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Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
You got my interest. Any chance of more of this?
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [19 Mar 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Loatroll
Review:
Good stuff! Very interesting story so far.
Mind blown at the low review-count.
Review By [Loatroll] • Date [24 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Cdog
Review:
Surprised at his sudden courage, but all I could do was shake my head after finiding out what she was really trying to say to him.

Looking forward to the next chapter
Comments from author:
It just wouldn't be Xander Harris' love life otherwise. Then again, that's probably why I like the character so much...

Thank you for the review.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [5 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from gaulty
Review:
good chapter, wonders what happens next, byes
Comments from author:
I'm not sure myself, but hopefully we'll both know some time next week.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [gaulty] • Date [5 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from RafMereC
Review:
Good one.

If his papers pass muster, will she accept?

Raf
Comments from author:
That, I can't tell you. I guess it depends on where my muse takes me. Knowing Xander's luck with women though, I'd say it's doubtful.

Thank you for the review.
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [4 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from Tariq
Review:
Glad to see he survived, even if he does have plot armour. And Rail guns to go with the lasers, a very interesting world indeed. The effect immulsion must have had on technological changes is impressive. Energy and rail type weapons in hands. Satellites prevalent enough with sufficiently sophisticated computers to analyse weapon requests on the fly. Or am I over thinking this world of yours?

Curious as to what the age requirements are for the Imperials, most organisations like to get them young when they can be better moulded.

And a little bit of me hates you for cliff hanging us again. Fortunately the rest of me is nothing but grateful for another good chapter.
Comments from author:
My idea always was that imulsion is like oil times ten. The kind of power it can produce made technological advancement speed up to roughly twenty years beyond where we're at now. You aren't over-thinking it, that's just about where I wanted the story to be.

I didn't want the Imperials to come off like some kind of SS or Stassi group. They're just a very elite police force, possibly one you have to be born in unless you know someone. I haven't decided how it works, or if I'll even delve that deeply into it.

I'm keeping the chapters short so I can keep putting them out there. Long chapters on my story 'Headhunters' burned me out it. Keeping them short just allows me to work on them without too much pressure. Unfortunately, cliff-hangers are just good spots to end them.

Thank you for your thoughts, and your review. Both are appreciated.
Review By [Tariq] • Date [4 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Hanzo
Review:
interesting
Comments from author:
Thank you.
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [22 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Tariq
Review:
Good to see more chapters from, even if you are being stingy and just giving us enough of a chapter to tease us and create a cliffhanger.

Plus the idea of a gun with a payment plan that craps out on you at just the wrong time is one that I could believe from a government, along with a black market in unlocked weapons (probably obscenely costly given the measures you described them as having).

And please tell me he's remembered his lessons about backups that don't cost credits to use and has something suitable in the edged or blunt categories.
Comments from author:
It can be annoying, I know. But that's just the way this story turned out. When I started it, I was sick of making those huge chapters for my story 'Headhunters'. These shorties were a nice change of pace.

I got a kick out of the idea for the guns as well. The fact that they make you listen to commercials while you're trying to stay alive, was just all the better. I would definitely agree with you on the cost of guns that you didn't have to worry about. I'd say even with hazard pay, they're way out of Xander's budget.

I'm honestly not sure how Xander is going to get out of this one yet. I've got a couple of different ideas, but nothing I've really decided on yet. We'll see what happens.

Thank you for the insight, and your review.
Review By [Tariq] • Date [21 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from AbscondingCascade
Review:
Nice, can't wait to see where you take this next. In thanks for this - http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=1Mqc-z2HJW0
Comments from author:
I honestly don't know where it's going. My beta and I are still trying to sort out the next chapter.

Thanks for the review, and the music was classic, great pick.
Review By [AbscondingCascade] • Date [21 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from Cdog
Review:
Poor Xander. Even in a new universe, he's still Murphy's bitch.
Comments from author:
And that's why I love writing him. Only he could get into these kinds of messes so easily.

Thanks for the rec, and the review.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [21 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from egwolf
Review:
it's good. I like it!!
Comments from author:
Always nice to hear, and I do hope you like the new chapter as well.

I apologize for the delay in response, thanks for the review.
Review By [egwolf] • Date [16 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from Robby
Review:
Interesting, I look forward to seeing what happens next!
Comments from author:
Glad you've enjoyed it, I'm hoping to put out another chapter in the very near future.

Thank you for the review, and I apologize for the delay in response.
Review By [Robby] • Date [29 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four" from murdock
Review:
I like this story but it needs to get going
Comments from author:
I do agree with you, but I'm working on multiple stories at the moment. I'd rather put out short chapters, then go weeks without posting anything. Xander will see some action next chapter, I promise.
Review By [murdock] • Date [1 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from CPTSkip
Review:
Interesting and unusual story. I look forward to reading more.
Comments from author:
It's definitely a lot different then my other stories, but that was what I was going for. I'm just going for whatever comes to mind while I write it. I hope you like the rest of it.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from michaelangelo
Review:
wow, interesting tale, I recognize the Gears of War Emulsion and the Fallout New Vegas Thompson machine gun type laser and figure your a bit of a first person shooter game nut... bit like me really.

Very, very nice.
Comments from author:
I was wondering where the idea for the Thompson laser gun came from. I originally got F:NV when it came out, but traded it in for being too buggy. Now that you mentioned it, I can clearly remember the gun.

I'm very big on the FPS games, it started all the way back with the original Wolfenstein. I've gotten picky with age though, it's harder and harder for me to find one that can hold my interest these days.

Thank you for the review.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [22 Mar 11] • Not Rated
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