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Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from Magi
Review:
Yeah, RFB might be good. FAL Para's a good choice. I really don't think .40S&W is a good choice. IIRC it's not that much better than 9mm, has a sharper kick, and tends to cause more wear than 9mm. Also, it's practically identical in size to 10mm Auto(10x23mm to 10mm Auto's 10x25mm), so I'm seeing a VERY real chance of people getting the wrong ammo or gun parts. Maybe .45ACP then? You'd likely be stuck with single-stack M1911 variants unless you go Glock 21, but 1911 grips will be a bit slimmer, the Glock 36 is single-stack subcompact, and you can issue UMP-45s, Thompson SMGs, or (in another few years) KRISS Vectors.

Ever consider issuing 7.62 NATO machine guns? HK21 is IIRC supposed to be super-accurate, and M60E3/E4 stuck around for a while with the SEALs despite their horrible rep. Mk.48/ Mini 7.62 would be good once they come out though.

And yeah, beaming won't work on Value Size Glory. Thought it might work on regular size though.

So, when will the main story catch up with "Tanika's Trials"?
Review By [Magi] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from Magi
Review:
Hey, just wanted to say I really like your writing, you're up there with batzulger in my book when it comes to writing BtVS/Military stuff. Please, update this soon!

Also, Buffy is currently looking for 7.62 NATO rifles for Slayer use. I think the G3KA4 is her best bet, 12" barrel and collapsible stock. FAL Para is still a bit long, MC51 is too short. The SCAR-H/Mk.17 CQC (13" barrel) might work as well, though I'm not sure it exists yet. Also, Glock 17 and 26 for the smaller handgun?

Also, can't you just have the transport they used to take down the System Lord beam up Glory and dump her in space? Maybe use a missile or two to shove her at the sun? I mean, she might survive outer space but she can't move in it, and she'll turn back to Ben eventually. Or beam her to the Gate Room, blast her through to an uninhabited world, and shove a couple gigaton nukes after her? If she tries to com back through the gate she'll get obliterated, right?
Comments from author:
If it had been around at the time, I'd have had the Slayers armed with this: http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Kel-Tec_RFB (short, but a full-length barrel, as it's a bullpup design).

As it wasn't, I'll probably just go the with the FN Para when she eventually makes a decision - slightly longer than the M4, but with a 16" barrel, not noticeably. There are more of them around and the weapon was used all over the world, so ready availability of parts, etc. As for pistols, something just slightly less powerful, probably anything that fires the .40 S&W.

When Glory reappears, she'll be several hundred feet long - rather too big to beam anywhere with a ring system. Also, they don't know where she is right now.

Glad you're enjoying the story and thanks for the reviews and advice on he weaponry.
Review By [Magi] • Date [27 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from imokit
Review:
Brilliant chapter, Can't wait to see how Cordy gets out of this!
Comments from author:
There are a number of possibilities...

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [imokit] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
Our girl is in dire straits, but she's the best person for the job, even though she feels shattered right now. Leadership sucks sometimes, especially if you're a good leader.

This was one heck of a meaty chapter. The military bits were very detailed and I'd have liked a bit more Cordelia to detail ratio. On the other hand, Defiance Island was utterly chilling and I held my breath for most of those bits. I always enjoy Buffy and company. Glad that Willow got some payback and Spike seems to be remembering his 'Gentleman William' self more and more even though he doesn't yet want to admit it to himself.

Can't wait for the next chapter...

Thank you,

Blue
Comments from author:
Dire straits indeed, especially as she's still learning to be an effective officer.

The military detail needed to be quite extensive to set these scenes, but the next chapter will have more Cordelia. I spent more time on Defiance Island than strictly necessary for the retrieval of the axe (and Wesley isn't a central character) as I wanted to set the scene for the sequel. The island is much worse than portrayed here...

Willow needed a little payback I thought and Spike, even without his soul, is reluctantly finding himself fighting more and more on the side of light, with less inclination to turn against them.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [12 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
Lovely line, this.

...Unless you want me to see what happens when a vamp swallows a lit cigarette. I already know what happens when one drinks holy water.”

Heh Heh.
Comments from author:
Thanks. Actually, I think was one of Vidicon's lines, added when he beta read for me (I liked it too).
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [12 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from NorthernOil
Review:
This story keeps getting better and more complex at the same time. The only way to describe the island is "Freakin' Scary". The military situation is typical Snafu. Great work, great storytelling.
Comments from author:
The island will feature in the sequel - and it hasn't really started being scary yet...

The military situation couldn't be very much worse at this stage.

Thanks for the review - glad you're still sticking with the series.
Review By [NorthernOil] • Date [11 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from storiescollector
Review:
Classic case of light forces, mobility vs firepower. Foot soldiers can go nearly anywhere, bur have to carry everything themselves. In this case they had a road and transport, so were able to load heavy, but still it is not sufficient to take on a MBT group. All they can hope for is incompetency of the enemy (ie, never stop an enemy when his making a mistake) and the early arrival of the air support. If they can encourage the enemy to stop and prepare for a deliberate set piece battle to take the bridge, that may give them the time for air support to arrive. All they need is a stop for 3-4 minutes to give the time for the air support to arrive. Providing, of course, it is on time...

Of the rest, will be interesting to know the history of the island and Buffy is preparing the ground for the battle against Glory by thinning out the enemy (other demons in SD and issuing warnings).
Comments from author:
The main problem right now is the availability of suitable munitions to hold off the Saguerrans for long enough, with only a couple of Javelins left and the M3 RAWS not heavy enough to knock out a T80.

The island will pop up again in the sequel and Buffy is indeed thinning out the nightlife.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [storiescollector] • Date [11 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Current Donor)richierich
Review:
What a great update. Switching from one story line to the next kept the chapter lively and interesting as each had it's own tone. I'd call Cordy's story an action and adventure, while Wesley's is straight horror. And Willow's is a bit detective/revenge. Great stuff. I'm happy to see Wesley starting to come into his own here, although he clearly has a ways to go to be the bad-ass he was on Angel. And Cordy is really starting to shine as a leader and hopefully soon with SGC. I'm so amazed at how long you've kept these stories going and at such a high quality level too. Thanks so much for all of this!
Comments from author:
I'm not sure if Wesley will ever be quite the bad-ass he was in Angel (I was never convinced by the speed of the transformation), but he'll certainly grow as a character. Cordy still has a lot to learn as a leader, but she's getting there.

Thanks for the review - glad you're enjoying the series.
Review By [(Current Donor)richierich] • Date [9 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Please tell me this isn't THE END for "Terminator Team" and Our Cordy?

Aaagh! I can't stand the suspense!

Meanwhile, I loved the bits about Spike helping to spread terror at the thought of what would happen the next time non-combatant friends or family were attacked by anything demonic. :)
Comments from author:
Not the end for Cordy and the Rangers, but it will be - and already has been - nasty for them (I still have the request segment I wrote for you, coming up soon, and that contains Cordy).

Spike has hidden depths from time to time, though he'd claim that he was only doing it for the love of the fight and mayhem.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [9 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Some very nasty problems there. from crawling through stone-cold, near arctic cave systems to engaging the enemy with vastly inferior forces and man power.

And though the Axe is certainly a powerful weapon, it's a bit like juggling two halves of the core of an atomic bomb...

Buffy will not be pleased her sister was so exposed because some idiot in Washington thinks Technology trumps treads on the ground...

For the return to the Island, I suggest more cold, more fear, more slime and the ever oppressive darkness...

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Our heroes never have a dull moment. Well, Buffy's having a comparatively easy time, but only for the moment...

Unfortunately, there isn't much choice when it comes to dealing with Glory. The question afterwards will be what to do with it. Destroy the thing, or keep it securely against a future threat.

Buffy especially won't be pleased when she sees some other TV footage coming back from Saguerra (e.g. one of the supply convoys that were attacked).

The island will be much worse next time.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [8 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Recent Donor)draconin
Review:
Wow. Your description of the journey through the caves and back was chilling. From the sound of it I hope that the ax is not going to be part of the solution!
Comments from author:
The axe may be part of the solution - one type of evil magic used against a wholly incompatible type - but it won't be easy for anyone to wield. And will either have to be destroyed or very carefully and securely stored afterwards (just in case it's needed again).

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [8 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
"Chloe shivered and shook her head. “The crystal’s been getting brighter since we started, but I don’t know how bright it’ll actually get...”

“Is the other one working? The one that gets us out?” Amelia asked, her voice rising nervously.

The witch patted her pocket. “Good as a GPS locator. It’ll take us right back to the gates.”

Several of the others winced, as they recalled how far away the exit actually was. Furthermore, there were no alternatives that they knew of. No more words were exchanged as they moved off, as though fearful that any more talk would summon something hellish, in the most literal sense."

****

This made me think of what a _wonderful_ opportunity this would be for Murphy (or a sadistic entity) to strike, somehow the return crystal gets lost, destroyed or doesn't work. Image of them wandering lost around this Lovecraftian Hellhole trying to find their way out.
No need for any actual physical attacks or physical blockages (the new wall), just them going nuts from the "atmosphere", stress and lack of sleep, while running out of food and watching their flashlight batteries dying.
"Does this stairway look the one we came down?" "Maybe, but so did the last three we already tried".......
Extra creep points if their watches die or start running _very_ erratically. "How many days have we been down here"?
Image of a handful of them return to the boat after a week or two, tho they _think_ it was months, all of them headed for locked psych wards and medical discharges under Section 8. When asked what they ate after their 3-4 days rations ran out they say nothing or mention the Donner Party.

I would have thought that they would mark their turning points, instead of depending on the return crystal. OTOH the owners of the Hellhole or its janitorial staff might be annoyed finding chalk or paint on their walls. grin
Comments from author:
Some useful ideas there for when they return to the island in the sequel - thanks. It'll turn out to be even more creepy than it seems here.

Thanks also for the review.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [8 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from (Current Donor)Sulien
Review:
Fabulous update! I was very happy to see the notification for the new chapter in my email, made worth bothering to check. *g* I particularly loved the bit on the island, which was majorly creepifying. I can imagine this little experience will be a good part of what brings Wesley along to becoming a good, competent Watcher. News that you'll be returning to this lovely little island in the sequel to this story is very welcome!

Thanks muchly!
Comments from author:
The island will indeed star in the sequel - lots of ideas to make it even worse... Wesley may return to being a Watcher, or he may stick with Covert Ops.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [7 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from Rich
Review:
Excellent job all around, although I was especially impressed with your "Lovecraft" section. I've experimented a bit with that genre myself, and it's not easy to do it well. Keep up the good work !
Comments from author:
Influenced a bit by Lovecraft, but also by Clark Ashton Smith who also writes very well in this vein (albeit not at Lovecraft's level).

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Rich] • Date [7 May 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "War Zones and Hell's Antechamber" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Awesome. ..or should I say AWSM? LOL...

An update at last, and a damned good addition to the story. They have the Axe, and a hell of a lot of nightmares to deal with on top of that. And it looks like they woke up an Old One. ..ah well, them's the breaks...it had to be something worse than Glorificus, didn't it?

And thr Cordy just got her first taste of combat in the defense. ..with a lot of dead and dying on her hands. I hope she's not thinking about handing in her butter bars right now...

How soon till the next update?
Comments from author:
Whatever they woke up, it may or may not be worse than Glory (probably not) but it'll keep until later, either way. They'll still have to go back to the island.

Cordy just got her first real taste of combat indeed, in a wholly unbalanced battle. She won't quite, but it will open her eyes.

Thanks for the review - not sure about the next update (a chapter of Key and Sunnydale Summer before that).
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [7 May 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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