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Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from (Recent Donor)jedibuttercup
Review:
*biting fingernails*
Comments from author:
I hope to have the final chapter completed before you run out of nails...

Thanks for the review, sorry for the cliffie!
Review By [(Recent Donor)jedibuttercup] • Date [19 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
I had a longer review written, but lost it to PC problems.

In short, a 2000 lb bomb _never_ holds 2000 lb of HE,
and the more penetration of whatever it is optimized for,
the more steel and the less HE it holds.

Cotrasting things like the Syrian improvised "barrel bombs"
(essentially huge fragmentation grenades) made up of
nearly 100% HE and shrapnel material (like scrap iron) and a
"bunker buster" bomb built with heavy steel noses and structures
and a complex guidance system.

In this case the mentioned GBU-24 bomb only carries 530 lbs of HE or ~26.5%. See below....

So I'm wondering if a dozen or more M1 Abrams each firing 2-5+ 120mm DU (depleted uranium) AP rounds a minute at Glory from 500-1000 meters couldn't have _seriously_ hurt her.
No explosions, but hitting her _hard_ and punching holes in her. Think hitting an armored knight with pickaxes.......

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/GBU-24_Paveway_III

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/BLU-109_bomb

The BLU-109/B has a steel casing about 1 inch (25.4 mm) thick,
filled with 530 lb (240 kg) of Tritonal. It has a delayed-action tail-fuze.
Comments from author:
I believe I even mentioned the fact that it holds 534lbs of HE... It's still 2000lb of object moving at a high velocity, versus what's effectively a small DU dart. And I'm not about to get into an extended debate on this one.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from ShalaDakiri
Review:
About the various weapons used:

Even though the bombs and missiles just scratched the surface, if the Slayers can target those spots, they can aggrevate the existing damage and bring her down faster than if they hack at unbroken skin/scales.

And targeting eyes/mouth... The heads are likely moving a lot more than the body. Eyes are a relatively small target and easy to miss. The mouths breath fire. I'm not sure there are too many people (at this stage, anyway) willing to risk getting barbequed for a maybe on a hit.
Comments from author:
This is exactly what the Slayers will be trying to do (as far as they can within reach, given her height).

The mouths are also well-lined with teeth and the heads themselves are very hard objects, if they hit something...

Thanks for the review
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from maxthehobbit
Review:
I've been waiting for this ... it seems like forever, but it's great and in two parts makes it even more worth the wait. I knew that against a hell God there was going to be many deaths. At least Giles went quick and didn't have to suffer. If Buffy finds out Giles was killed, she might just go into a rage and charge Glory with a suicidal attack, Cordy won't feel too good about it either, she'd want to stick the sword Giles gave her up Glory's ass. At least the jets caused some damage and the witches hurt her. The second half of the glory fight ought to be fantastic. Will she just die of a thousand cuts, or will they have to use a nuke or some other mystical mojo to kill her, she's just gotta die.
Comments from author:
Then fight is really only just beginning... Buffy won't find out about Giles for now, nor will Cordy. The key to killing her is the magic in the various mystical weapons, which will act loike a poison. If that doesn't work, then a nuke is the only option.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from Magi
Review:
Hey, an update. Cool!

Tony's still the young jerk he was early NCIS. If he survives the battle and Buffy maybe he'll get better.

Sucks Giles died.

Any idea when we can expect updates on Dawn, or the story were the Vengeance Demon get fired and framed for murder?
Comments from author:
Tony is an arsehole right now - even younger than he was in season one NCIS. He might grow up a bit, but if she survives the battle he won't be her boyfriend again. Plus a lot of people will make him realise the error of his ways.

In a battle like this, it was inevitable someone died.

No updates on the others until I've finished the next (and final) chapter of this, I'm afraid.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Magi] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from BotticellisMuse
Review:
Wow, can I just say this has been worth the wait? Truly satisfying! This is one brutal, heroic, meaningful fight of lives, and all's just getting started....i could only feel pain at the death toll they've already had mere minutes from Glory's arrival. You blindsided me with Giles death. I'm glad he and Buffy got sometime to spend together just having a joyride and picnic. No matter how bitter the aftermath would be for Buffy, assuming she survives too, she has the sweet and light memories of that day. (Sigh) another man leaves her behind. Man, when it rains on Buffy it pours huh? She just couldn't get a break..well as they say you cant have it all. She successful as a slayer, the most successful in fact and so far; so somethings got to give somewhere. And the humbling factor would be her crappy romantic life.

The Devon covens help was one of the things I wondered when season 7 aired. Why didnt Giles demanded wiccan help from them during the FEs ruckus? They aided Willow on her rampage and focused desire to end the world. The FE wants to end the world--the humanity--and it should have merited one hell of a reason for them to aid Buffy and the scoobies even without the latter asking. Esp since they always have known big bads emerging in Sunnydalebefore like Willow. I didnt understand why they chose to be silent and unhelpful at the time.

I totally agree with your use of mystical artifacts to augment the scythe in this battle. I also wondered why the heck didnt the show's writers think up of some other mystical weaponsto arm the others, not all of them but certainly more than one slayer scythe. They have a lot of fabled weapons around the world to choose andplay with. From western and eastern mythologies combined. It would have added a layer or complexity like what you did here with the ambiguity of using blades that killed the innocent used to kill its own kin in wickedness.

Well, vamp smackers and Jaguar Etype, I really like! Nice nice touch!

Tony's fingenails deserve to be taken out, ripped out forcefully one. by one. Then his eyebrows singed. Then whipped in the ass for an hour. And made to sit on a basin full of salt for 2 hours. Thats just for starters..

After this fight, I do hope Buffy finds the will to live if she survives. So many loved ones leaving her thru sheer stupidity or death does a lot of damage to her already shredded self confidence. I wont be surprised if she withdraws for awhile, feeling so so tired of all the crap and death and gore. All the people she couldnt save. She always had such an acute sense of survivors guilt.

Thanks for sharing this with us! May you have more inspiration-filled chapters to come!
Comments from author:
Glad you're enjoying it. The fight has, as you say, only just started and certainly won't get any easier.

Buffy will feel Giles' death very keenly but at least she has some memories to share. It will be rather bitter-sweet for everyone who survives the battle.

The Devon Coven? Joss was never very clear on their power. I've possibly made the covens a little more powerful than in canon, but yes, in the mess that was S7, the Scoobies could have used some help.

The mystical artefacts seemed like the best way to kill a deity like Glory. She's a fully fledged God, not just an oversized demon. I used some of those mentioned in canon, in addition to the scythe.

I've always fancied an E-Type Jaguar and I'm nothing like Giles!

Tony will have to face at least some backlash, but he might grow up eventually.

If Buffy survives, she'll have a great deal to get over and will deserve a rest.

Thanks for the review - only one chapter of this left, but there's a sequel or two planned (I've already started one, called Tanika's Trials).
Review By [BotticellisMuse] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from OtteryLexa
Review:
I was expecting some attempt at magical enhancement on the heavier weapons like the bombs and hellfires, to help get through the armour.

Very exciting fight though.
Comments from author:
Not easy to just add magic to pre-existing modern weapons. The magical weapons they'll be using were all created by masters of their trade, centuries before.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [OtteryLexa] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from tiggergirl
Review:
just a question, but why was i reading Finn's name in there? I thought Riley Finn was gone a long time ago. Was it just supposed to be Graham and there was a typo or did i miss a part of the story where Finn was redeemed?

Keep up the amazing writing, really love the story.
Comments from author:
This is Sam Finn, his wife in canon (and who had the same surname before marriage). She first appeared in the first volume of this, as Graham's aide.

Thanks for the review - glad you're enjoying it.
Review By [tiggergirl] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
The fight's going better than I expected it to go, but I envisioned it in the streets of the 'Dale, not a football pitch. Which, hey, good on you for getting to it at long last, the waiting's been excruciating! And even better was the way you built up the tension and let it drop off a little bit, only to bring it to quite the coronary- inducing level at yhe crucial final moment before Glorificus passed through the portal. I'll say this much, Cordelia's stomach wasn't the only one twisting itself into a great knot.

The sudden death of Giles, now, was rather less impacting than I expected, but of course my expectations never included him ever dying before, so I really had no comparable frame of reference.

As for the Slayers and the Varrini, I only hope they can manage their particular mischief with no casualties incurred. May good fortune meet them on the field of battle...
Comments from author:
The fight isn't finished yet, however... The football field seemed more logical. Why use a portal any distance from the Hellmouth, after all? Glad you enjoyed the build-up...

Someone had to die and Giles drew the short straw, unfortunately.

I won't say anything more about casualties, as the next chapter will be coming soon.

Thanks for the review
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from Dragan
Review:
Ouch! Poor Giles.

Is Willow going to try to Resurrect Giles in this reality?

Hmm I wonder if a localized NNEMP might disrupt magical fields (remembers Owned from Gargoyles Metnioning that Energy was Energy wether created by Magic or Science)


http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Electromagnetic_pulse#Non-nuclear_electromagnetic_pulse_.28NNEMP.29
Comments from author:
Willow doesn't have the ability here - still recovering her magic after her injury.

No reason why NNEMP should have any effect on something that doesn't follow the normal rules of physics.

Thanks for the review
Review By [Dragan] • Date [18 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Okay, for once, someone risk the side effects of Sarcophagus use!!!
Comments from author:
Except they don't have one, I'm afraid...

Thanks for the review - the last chapter is coming soon .
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [17 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
Wondering why there weren't a herd of .50 caliber machine guns around instead of 7.62s. The far heavier slugs would likely do more damage, or at least sting more.

Also wondering about why there weren't every available M1 Abrams tanks there. With their longer range 120mm guns they could be placed 500-1000+ meters from the football field and hit any part of Glory they could see with 120mm DU armor piercing shells.
A single 120 hit would probably do more damage than _all_ the rifle and light MG 5.56 & 7.62mm hits on Glory combined. Wondering what a 120 direct hit one of her heads would do......
Comments from author:
Fifty calibre machine guns aren't portable enough for this type of battle.

They don't have every available M1 because the HGC isn't equipped with them (too heavy and overkill for most of what they're facing) and the rest of the Army and the world doesn't know. If a 2000lb blockbuster bomb can only slightly wound her, then a 120mm round isn't going to do much more damage than one of the Hellfires.

Thanks for the review
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [17 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from batzulger
Review:
And burmafrdnow speaks! Or babbles inanely at least. This is normal behavior for them cordyfan, they're just jealous that you can write and they can't.
Comments from author:
He didn't really bother me. It wasn't up - or down - to his usual obnoxious standards, judging by the rest of his reviews.

Many thanks for the support, though.
Review By [batzulger] • Date [17 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Wrong Apocalypse" from naraic
Review:
Nothing was ever ordinary when the Assembly were called in, even if he'd personally - and reluctantly - picked up the figurative red phone to Buffy.

The above quote comes from Tanikas trials amd himts that Buffy siurvives. Is this accurate or is Tanikas trials out of date.

Good story I cant wait to see the end of the story.
Review By [naraic] • Date [17 Dec 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "G-Day Part One" from ShalaDakiri
Review:
Ouch. Really not a good couple days for Buffy: Boyfriend breaks up with her and admits to cheating on her, Giles is dead (even if she hasn't found out yet), and the fight isn't even close to to over.

If Buffy survives this, Heightmeyer is going to have her work cut out for her on counseling.
Comments from author:
And as you say, the fight isn't over yet... A lot of people will need counselling after this.

Thanks for the review
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [17 Dec 14] • Not Rated
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