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Review of chapter "BOHICA" from (Current Donor)richierich
Review:
Oh. My. God! I've been reading your fantastic series of Cordy stories forever and loving them to death. The only thing that's felt a little off is the extreme lack of Slayers. It's been a bit hard to take the Slayer Council seriously as a world power when there's only three and a half Slayers and one of them is WAY far away. Yes, I know that there are Council special forces (newly reformed and nicer) and other allies. But the new council lacks some serious teeth that only a thousand or two Slayers could bring it. AND NOW BUFFY GETS A VISION ABOUT THE SCYTHE! OMG I'm geeking out right now! If you do go through with this everything is going to change in a big way. Make no mistake... I love your story as it's been written so far and will cantinue to love it if the Scythe thing falls through. But man..... the possibilities! I don't comment much, but rest assured that I look forward to every update. This is one of my favorite stories and I thank you so much for all of your hard work.
Review By [(Current Donor)richierich] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from (Past Donor)exiled
Review:
Very good, the final scene was touching.
Comments from author:
I thought it might be an appropriate ending to the chapter, after the emphasis of the previous three chapters.

Thanks for the review
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from Grovtech
Review:
I don't know if I have anything to add that the other reviewers missed. This is really good and I very much enjoyed it. Since I've spent some time of my own at Ft. Bragg, this story really comes close to home even if it has been many years.

Nice to see Willow's Mom can at least admit she was wrong, but Mr. and Mrs. Chase appear unrepentant. They really deserve their fate 100%.

I've noticed that Xander has been pushed to the side in this one, but he's still true to his character with his loyalty to his girl. Perhaps, with the greater resources the Assembly will find some way of helping Glory's victims.

Really good stuff!

I take it that updates are irregular? Perhaps I'm a victim of my own fast reading!

Please keep up the great work!
Grover
Comments from author:
Glad you thought my portrayal of the military aspect was reasonably realistic - I always try to make it as believable as possible.

Willow and her mother have some way to go, but they should eventually reconcile properly. The Chases on the other hand? Yeah, they deserve everything they get.

I'm not a great Xander fan and don't tend to write him very well. He will, however, pop up in the final battle against Glory and potentially in future stories. When Glory dies, her victims should mainly come back to normal (not sure about Hank Summers, as he was brain-sucked more than once).

Updates are irregular, because I'm also working on 2 other stories in this series: Key to the Stars, which is about Dawn and Joyce in another galaxy and picks up from volume 1 of this; and A Sunnydale Summer, which is a prequel to the whole series (set during the summer after graduation).

Thanks for the review - glad you're enjoying the stories and series.
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [15 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "BOHICA" from Himuradono
Review:
Damn, they took some serious casualties, and more dog tags to add to Cordy's collection of people who had died under her command. I think you could have toyed with the 'if I did'; 'if I didn't', she had going on with that experienced NCO from SF who straightened her a bit, some more. But as it is right now it still works so no biggie.

Despite the situation I had a good laugh at Cordy being ambushed in the stream. She was like a real frontier women who had to deal with a local talent show. I'm sure she looked fabulous all soaped up and angry. :)
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Caught another typo
"Of course, it was standard operating procedure in hostile territory, but right now it meant that Sergeant First-class Parsons was currently *sanding* guard, loaded M4 at the ready, while she soaped herself down."

...standing...
Comments from author:
She'll still take a while to get over this, however.

Cordy will always look fabulous, regardless of the situation ;-)

Thanks for the review
Review By [Himuradono] • Date [14 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
A great many things happening here. This search for the Scythe was a lot less lethal than the last one, and now they have the Guardian to get information from. And no doubt Joyce will insist she come to dinner. I wonder how a guardian would co about recruiting new guardians?

Poor Kate, a horrid childhood, but at least now she can live in the knowledge that her career she worked so hard for won't fall to pieces. One wonders if it was guilt or indignation that led her protector(s) to do so. Hope they can give Annie's people some closure by finding her.

Cordelia has learned a lot in this war, but even if it is the sort of lesson any officer eventually learns, losing those under one's command and those one knows is always devastating in some way.

A pity the Chases can't stay in a nice Saguerran jail. I'm sure they've got some roach infested places there. They deserve it. I do wonder if Cordelia will ever see a cent of her trustfund again. The IRS probably has first dibs on any money.

A poignant scene in the plane at the end. Even if they are coming home on their shields, they are coming home and someone cares.

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Very few places could be as nasty as Defiance Island. And they may not be finished with it yet, either. They'll sometimes have the Guardian around, when she wants to be. I think she may be rather elusive.

I think mainly indignation, depending who was responsible. Kate will get some closure and revenge for herself and Annie's people and it'll be good for Wesley, too.

Cordy still has a lot to learn and she'll receive specific Special Forces officer training before moving to the SGC. Unfortunately, it probably won't be the last time she loses people under her command.

They didn't break any Saguerran laws, but they won't have an easy time of it in US prisons, either. Doubtful if she'll ever see her trust fund, but she isn't badly off, with her Army pay, Slayer stipend from the Assembly and the $40,000 a year from her dead uncle.

The scene at the end seemed appropriate, given the focus of the last few chapters.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [13 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from Inoeth
Review:
Another great update. The setup you've done regarding the upcoming war with Glory is truly stupendous and that i have to wait more and more is tough but i'm sure fully worth it.

I also have to commend you for the scene between Cordy and her 'parent's. Keep it up and I look forward to more.
Comments from author:
The end is nigh - not too much build-up left. Glad you liked the Cordy scene - I've been sitting on that one for a while, waiting for the proper moment to use it.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Inoeth] • Date [13 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from RevDorothyL
Review:
Even more satisfying in this final version of Cordy's confrontation with the Chases, in context. Well done, yet again!
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed your scene - I tweaked it a little from the last time you saw it.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [13 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from (Current Donor)Sulien
Review:
The idea of Buffy wandering up to a piano somewhere (a music store in a mall, a piano bar, etc.) and noodling around a bit before playing through a piece or two of "The Well Tempered Clavier" is pretty mind blowing. Better yet, if Willie decided to put an old upright piano at one of his joints... *snicker* I think it would be all Spike could do to keep himself from proposing to Buffy on the spot, considering the kind of women he's pursued for serious relationships in the past.

You always do an excellent job with your stories, but this last chapter definitely hits a high note, oddly at the lowest point for Cordelia. As a friend of mine likes to say when something is so good: "I bow as not worthy."

Thank you for the updates!
Comments from author:
She might have to practice a bit first, as unlike the needlepoint, this isn't something she's been doing in the years since that Halloween. Still, anything's possible... Nice idea about Willie and a piano - I might keep that in mind for the future, if you don't mind.

I thought that might be a highly appropriate ending, given the focus of the last few chapters - glad you agree.

Thanks for the enthusiastic review!
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
Everybody has gotten what they want or need. Buffy with her Scythe, MacGregor with at least a hint of upcoming closure and possible vengeance, as well as some burgwoning trust in the new Assembly organisation, and Cordelia with one last conversation with her so-called "parental figures". I halfway expected Cordy to start the paperwork to change her name finally to Cordelia Summers, after the confrontation with the Chases. Still, I was impressed with how you wrote that; I felt her anger, an icy and patient fury, while in the person of Gregory Chase I envisioned an unrepentant, hateful and spiteful tyrant suddenly bereft of his crown and his kingdom, and thoroughly cemented in his worldview, and in Virginia Chase I could see the blindfolds slowly being removed from her eyes, that she could see finally the error of her ways, yet still clinging to the hope that blood would win over justice. How sad for Virginia, but perhaps prison will finally help her to put things in the proper perspective for once...

And when Buffy received the Scythe, I had almost expected you to have written in a piece where Glory suddenly senses the power of the Scythe, that a wielder had found it at last, and then howls in rage and despair galf a world away...

I think your writing style has improved, if any can say that perfection can ever be improved upon. Looking forward to the inevitable confrontation with great relish.
Comments from author:
The scythe might just be enough to give them a fighting chance against Glory. It killed an Old One, after all.

McGregor may get her closure and vengeance, but it'll also be good for Wesley, as he still has some residual guilt.

Cordy might not change her name just yet, but you might recall a chapter of 'Key', where Dawn and Joyce were discussing adult adoption? Besides, they might not be Summers for very much longer either, if Joyce and Logan take their relationship all the way...

The Chases are pretty much as you described them and they'll get what they deserve.

Glory can't feel the scythe's power now, but she'll certainly be wary during the final battle.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from Dragan
Review:
Loved the progression in this chapter, also I do wonder how the Scythe will react to Codry in particular?

Somber ending but one that makes total since in the story.

Definitely 10 out of 10
Comments from author:
It should react to all the Slayers in pretty much the same way.

Given that the last few chapters have been very much concerned with a war, I though that was a suitable ending for the chapter - glad you think it's appropriate.

Many thanks for the ten and thanks for the review.
Review By [Dragan] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Wow, this is still one of the best fics/series on the site.

From the feel of things it looks like you're probably wrapping this one up in another couple-three chapters. Considering the long-term hooks that you've placed throughout this series, I'm really hoping for a 'Volume Three' that bridges from Glory to the establishment of the SGC ODA. (and after that, lots of little stand-alone stories about Team Cordy through the wormhole!) =D
Comments from author:
Most likely three more. That's pretty much what I'm planning - more stories about the length of Someone Else's Mess. I already started Tanika's Trials, but can't progress any further with that until this one's finished.

Many thanks for the appreciation and review
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from DofEire
Review:
Heck of a thing when this is what gets my attention: "just to get at the chewy snakey centre". And makes me laugh in a most unseemly snort. :)
Comments from author:
Just one of those lines that sounded O'Neill-ish and popped into my head at random. I always wanted to have a demon species that fed on the Goa'uld and this seemed like a good place to introduce it.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DofEire] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from (Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
ā€˜Iā€™m rubbing off on her, sir.ā€™


Uummm... that was priceless! Even in his head. Glad to see you updating this more regularly. I hope it means that the writing bugs are out and about... I wish you many happy nibbles... the good kind of bites... OK, that came out... a bit. Uhmmm... ;-)

I'm really glad that Cordelia finally got to confront the bastard monsters. Really do hope that the details she shared in front of the guard will percolate and that the Chases will return to the US a bit more battered and bruised than they left.

So much happened in this chapter, and I haven't even finished it yet... The scythe... I really hope the Guardian will stick around.

Great work. Now back to read the last bits... That little quote just made me laugh too much not to write something!

Blue

EDIT: I was deeply moved by the fact that she served as an escort to Dover. It is a powerful reflection on war and being a soldier. And yes, anyone who dies in service is not wasted... their life is not a wasted one, even if the powers that be throw away way too many without anything like enough consideration of the human beings behind 'boots on the ground'.
Comments from author:
The holiday has helped, but the muse is being cooperative. I'm about to start on a chapter of A Sunnydale Summer.

They'll probably get back to the US unscathed, but prison might be a different matter...

The Guardian will definitely be around from time to time.

The escort to Dover scene seemed appropriate, after the last few chapters.

Thanks for the review - glad you're still enjoying it.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from batzulger
Review:
Six days....
Comments from author:
Getting closer.

Thanks for the review
Review By [batzulger] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "BOHICA" from Orion
Review:
Great! This story continues to be a lot of fun to read.

I like Willow's interaction with her mother here - I've read quite a lot of Buffy fiction over the years, and can only think of a handful of stories that include Willow dealing with her parents. I remember in Canon there was at least some level of neglect for her, and in fan fiction if it's noted at all it seems to be on the more extreme side - so it's nice to see it addressed here rather than just being background information on Willow's character.

Thanks for writing and sharing with us.
Comments from author:
With most of the Scoobies having at least one lousy parent in this story - Willow's mother and father, Tara's father, Xander's mother and father, Cordy's mother and father, Buffy's father - I decided it might be a good idea to have at least one of them reconcile. Most of the others are non-starters and I thought Willow's mother might be an interesting character in future.

Thanks for the review - glad you're still enjoying it.
Review By [Orion] • Date [9 Aug 14] • Not Rated
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