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Review of chapter "Countdown" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Can i say that I really love Harmony's parents! You made them so very nice and just the support that Buffy and Cordy need with Joyce in another galaxy. Can't imagine what happened with their daughter being so vapid, but considering that she ended up not being a very wicked vampire in canon, she wasn't that terrible... just dumb. Sadly, children don't always turn out the way their parents expect. ;-)

You've created a nice 'family' for my girls.

Thanks. look forward to what comes next. Please, no dead scoobies.
Comments from author:
Thanks - that was the general idea. There are enough bad parents floating around in the story that I thought at least some of them ought to be decent people (which is also why I'm gradually rehabilitating Sheila Rosenberg). As you say, Harmony was never an particularly evil vampire, nor even a very effective bitch in High School.

No promises, but if you want a spoiler, drop me an e-mail...

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [16 Oct 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Countdown" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Willow shook her head, trying to shake off a mental image of Major Carter dressed in leather and brandishing a crop, standing over a tied-up O’Neill, kneeling on the floor with a ball gag in his mouth.


I don't want to know how you got that particular image in your head, but I'm gonna have to work hard to get rid of it. Carter isn't too bad, but O'Neill... that's just wrong. Poor Jack!

You're a very, very evil man. But I already knew this. ;-)

Comments from author:
Purely context driven - female USAF officer, coincidentally also a Major, as part of Tara's case. And how many other female Majors does Willow know? Of course, in close proximity to Tara, who knows how her mind works....

I'll try to stay just a wee bit evil. ;-)

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [15 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Honor and Recognition" from rhoadan
"The next week was pretty much filled with Army-approved Show and Tell activities. Assorted schools and hospitals in Sunnydale and neighbouring Glossonville, visiting Boy Scout and Girl Guide troops"

Well, I suspected before based on word choice and spellings, but this bit definitely outs you as not an American. What are known as Girl Guides in most of the world are called Girl Scouts in the US.
Review By [rhoadan] • Date [9 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Countdown" from RevDorothyL
So, possible world-ending Apocalypse on the one hand, BUT we have the pleasure of knowing that at least one muderous, racist, sadistic ex-Watcher AND the senior Chases are getting their well-earned comeuppance first. And yes, I do find that a great comfort!

Also, I adore the way you've depicted Teal'c's way with words in love letters to Cordy. When the peril gets real and the excrement is about to hit the fan, it's nice to know that at least ONE of the Summers Slay Sisters has a boyfriend who can be counted on in the clinches. For all Tony's supposed success in the romance department, Teal'c turns out to have far more of the REAL romantic (and the real gentleman) in him.
Comments from author:
There are other ex-Watchers out there, too, some of whom are on the Assembly's shit-list. At least Cordy could die relatively contended right now...

Teal'c is a gentlemen here, Tony not so much. That said, he's a younger version here than in canon, Tony the probie with a lot of life experience to gain. Unfortunately, it's at Buffy's expense. If she survives Glory, I'll have to think about a decent guy for her.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Countdown" from Grovtech
So good to see an update! So the decks are beginning to clear for action. I'm guessing Cordy is going to be stuck with the ax. Perhaps some kind of shielding gloves might help? Raw silk blessed by the Pope maybe?

Comments from author:
Cordy might not be stuck with the axe, After all, it's Buffy who calls the shots here...

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Countdown" from grd
I hope Tony pulls his head out before G-Day. Wonder if some fools decide to magically hide and stay, becoming witnesses to a battle few have ever seen. (Hinting at the Trio recording the event.) Nice build up.
Comments from author:
It'll be a long time before Tony pulls his head out of his ass. This is a slightly younger Tony than in NCIS canon. He's still basically a probie here.

I don't think anyone's going to stay to find out what happens, when the conspiracy theorists' alternatives will be a bio-weapons spill or a nuclear attack. The Trio wouldn't last two seconds against the Assembly and its allies. This isn't the disorganised Scoobies of Season 6 after all. If and when I use the Trio (in the sequel) they'll be appropriately dealt with.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [grd] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Countdown" from DarthTenebrus
All my bags are packed, I'm ready to go
I'm standing here outside your door...

So kiss me and smile for me,
Let me know you'll wait for me.
Let me know you'll never let me go...

Cause I'm leaving on a jet plane,
Dont know when I'll be back again. ..

Doesn't that just say it? Sadness and fear of the death and destruction waiting around the corner, while Down Under triumph and closure have come to a Potential Slayer that so desperately needed it.

But one question; if Earth bites it, on what world will Joyce and Dawn spend the rest of their lives? Or would the Universe itself bite the Big One?
Comments from author:
Well, the end of either Glory or Earth is certainly nigh... If Glory succeeds, it's 'just' a world-ending occurrence, whereas with the Key, it would have meant the end of all universes.

Nice choice of lyrics there, perfect for the mood. Many thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Countdown" from Kremer
Great update, as usual. And long (long is good)!

I've been thinking about what to do with the Axe after Glory (assuming it still exists afterwards). Too dangerous, and too tempting to some, to keep it around on Earth, even well hidden.

One option: The SGC still has that Tel'tak with the cloak, so take the Axe around to the moon's far side and make it 'disappear'. Wrap it in MLI with a flat black coating, find an appropriately named crater on the farside, and place it within a pile of large rocks in the crater or near the rim. The black will blend in with the rest of the rock shadows, and unless someone knows its exact location it will be practically invisible. (MLI is the heavy material used to insulate and protect space hardware like the ISS truss structures. Undisturbed, it should last for millennia.)

Good ideas with the Glory plans and conspiracy theories. I bet many of the vamps and a lot of other demons will fall for it as well. Most will probably head for LA, meaning an even bigger headache for Angel & Co. for a while, at least.
Comments from author:
The axe may well play an important part in the sequel. Making it invisible isn't a total solution, as it can still be magically tracked. And no one knows its full properties yet. For example, how did it come to be on Defiance Island....?

Vamps and other demons won't be any more happy with the idea of being nuked than the general population, that's for sure.

Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [2 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Countdown" from (Current Donor)Sulien
As usual, find the notification for an update to this story made me light up with a face-splitting grin! There were a lot of great parts in this chapter, but my two favorites were the capture of the rogue watcher and Cordy's presents and letter from Teal'c. I've always loved T and I've really been enjoying reading about him finding someone worth loving again and Cordy really fits the bill.

I have to give you extra credit for the cover story for the evacuation and the cover stories for the cover story in the government conspiracies. *tips imaginary hat*

You and Vidicon have really had excellent timing these last several weeks, as I've had something really good to read just when I needed it. In other words, an especial thank you for this update! Needless to say, I'm really looking forward to the next post of whichever story your muse decides to tackle when you get the time and inclination. :) Here's hoping real life is treating you well.
Comments from author:
Glad I helped to improve your day!

I like Teal'c and Cordy as a pair and I think they're better suited than some think (though the old Cordy wouldn't have been such a good match...) There are a few other rogue Watchers around that might prove troublesome to an extent in future.

I'll probably bring the UFO part of the conspiracy into the sequel.

Thanks for the review and hope you continue to enjoy my scribblings.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [1 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Countdown" from Orion
With all that happened last chapter, I didn't recall that her parents were arrested there. And it's nice to see that there's more than just the main plot moving forward.

Thanks for writing and sharing.
Comments from author:
Her parents were caught by the Army in Saguerra, while they were helping launder money.

A few loose ends tied up here, but mainly moving forward towards G-Day...

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Orion] • Date [1 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Countdown" from batzulger
Comments from author:
Not long now...
Review By [batzulger] • Date [1 Oct 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "BOHICA" from (Current Donor)richierich
Oh. My. God! I've been reading your fantastic series of Cordy stories forever and loving them to death. The only thing that's felt a little off is the extreme lack of Slayers. It's been a bit hard to take the Slayer Council seriously as a world power when there's only three and a half Slayers and one of them is WAY far away. Yes, I know that there are Council special forces (newly reformed and nicer) and other allies. But the new council lacks some serious teeth that only a thousand or two Slayers could bring it. AND NOW BUFFY GETS A VISION ABOUT THE SCYTHE! OMG I'm geeking out right now! If you do go through with this everything is going to change in a big way. Make no mistake... I love your story as it's been written so far and will cantinue to love it if the Scythe thing falls through. But man..... the possibilities! I don't comment much, but rest assured that I look forward to every update. This is one of my favorite stories and I thank you so much for all of your hard work.
Comments from author:
There may or may not be more Slayers at some point in the future, but the Scythe won't be used for that purpose at this stage, I'm afraid.

Thanks for your enthusiastic review - glad you're still enjoying it.
Review By [(Current Donor)richierich] • Date [21 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from (Past Donor)exiled
Very good, the final scene was touching.
Comments from author:
I thought it might be an appropriate ending to the chapter, after the emphasis of the previous three chapters.

Thanks for the review
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [21 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Guardians, Conspiracies and Parental Encounters" from Grovtech
I don't know if I have anything to add that the other reviewers missed. This is really good and I very much enjoyed it. Since I've spent some time of my own at Ft. Bragg, this story really comes close to home even if it has been many years.

Nice to see Willow's Mom can at least admit she was wrong, but Mr. and Mrs. Chase appear unrepentant. They really deserve their fate 100%.

I've noticed that Xander has been pushed to the side in this one, but he's still true to his character with his loyalty to his girl. Perhaps, with the greater resources the Assembly will find some way of helping Glory's victims.

Really good stuff!

I take it that updates are irregular? Perhaps I'm a victim of my own fast reading!

Please keep up the great work!
Comments from author:
Glad you thought my portrayal of the military aspect was reasonably realistic - I always try to make it as believable as possible.

Willow and her mother have some way to go, but they should eventually reconcile properly. The Chases on the other hand? Yeah, they deserve everything they get.

I'm not a great Xander fan and don't tend to write him very well. He will, however, pop up in the final battle against Glory and potentially in future stories. When Glory dies, her victims should mainly come back to normal (not sure about Hank Summers, as he was brain-sucked more than once).

Updates are irregular, because I'm also working on 2 other stories in this series: Key to the Stars, which is about Dawn and Joyce in another galaxy and picks up from volume 1 of this; and A Sunnydale Summer, which is a prequel to the whole series (set during the summer after graduation).

Thanks for the review - glad you're enjoying the stories and series.
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [15 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "BOHICA" from Himuradono
Damn, they took some serious casualties, and more dog tags to add to Cordy's collection of people who had died under her command. I think you could have toyed with the 'if I did'; 'if I didn't', she had going on with that experienced NCO from SF who straightened her a bit, some more. But as it is right now it still works so no biggie.

Despite the situation I had a good laugh at Cordy being ambushed in the stream. She was like a real frontier women who had to deal with a local talent show. I'm sure she looked fabulous all soaped up and angry. :)
Caught another typo
"Of course, it was standard operating procedure in hostile territory, but right now it meant that Sergeant First-class Parsons was currently *sanding* guard, loaded M4 at the ready, while she soaped herself down."

Comments from author:
She'll still take a while to get over this, however.

Cordy will always look fabulous, regardless of the situation ;-)

Thanks for the review
Review By [Himuradono] • Date [14 Aug 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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