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Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from Alkeni
Another excellent chapter.
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it - thanks.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [19 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from RevDorothyL

And I do so envy Sulvia and Dawn for their current additional guardians' willingness to carry them or play in the snow with them.

(Wanna guess which part of the film "The Golden Compass" was my absolute favorite and made the rest worth sitting through? Hint: it wasn't Daniel Craig's too-brief on-screen presence.) :)
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it.

They'll have a lot more fun with their guardians in coming chapters. We'll also see the Imshai in action in a more serious setting.

I haven't actually seen the Golden Compass, but I'm guessing something about bears?

Thanks for the review
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [9 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from DarthTenebrus
Worth the wait; a situation developing on Imsha, with Ilarius making his presence felt again, and Drayana threatening extinction of the whole Forvan race for their role in releasing a bioweapon on a major Talluran world...the Talluran fleet steadily encroaching on a hostile power that latelyhas been questioning the strategy, and indeed the sanity, of their supreme commander the Khkerrikk Emperor...

The tension builds, and the anticipation, and all conveyed by a style of writing that consistently demonstrates a tale nt with narrative, detail, continuity and perspective...this has absolutely been brilliant so far. I do so desire to see how the new dynamic plays out between Ilarius and Sulvia (cuz I think we all know that Ilarius is going to try his damnedest to influence the Princess Imperial any way he can...)
Comments from author:
Glad you're still enjoying it. Things should come to a head with the Khkerrikk in the next chapter. Ilarius will have little opportunity to influence Sulvia, so he may be driven to extremes...

Thanks for the review.
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from (Current Donor)Sulien
As always, I very much enjoyed this update. I love the Imshai and I'm really looking forward to Faith's sparring match with Turo'ganiskh. Their planet and the description of the city was fascinating. The dolphins especially really intrigued me and I'm wondering if they're sentient (as I suspect ours are, to a great degree), but I suppose that's something I'll likely find out in a future update. *crosses fingers* The scene between Drayana and the High Priestess is my favorite in this update, though. Especially well done there!

Thanks for the update, you made my evening. :)
Comments from author:
It'll be an interesting sparring match - not as easy as either might think...

Glad you liked my notion of the Imshai city. I'll continue that aspect of world-building in the next chapter. As for the dolphins, maybe they are sentient...

I had a lot of help from Vidicon for the Drayana/High Priestess scene.

Thanks for the review - good to hear it made your evening.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from Grovtech
Just wow! The flow and pacing has me really looking forward to each and every chapter of this tale of yours. The power vacuum thing reminds of the post WWII thing of winning the peace. That's something no one has been very good at. Perhaps the Empress will do better.

Comments from author:
Even more of a World War one issue, so all the powers will have to work hard to make sure that the peace is permanent and resilient. She's still relatively inexperienced, but immensely talented, so there is some hope.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [6 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Interludes" from Rich
“The fact that you developed illegal weaponry designed to kill every sentient species in this sector does not help your case, Ambassador".

No, that usually doesn't go over very well...

Also, nice touch with the underwater bedroom. Not part of the story, but great atmosphere.

I remain stunned and envious. Some authors do well with large scale actions, others are good at attention to detail; you consistently do both simultaneously. This isn't a story, it's a universe, and the amount of sheer work put into it is amazing.

Seriously somebody should make a movie out of this epic.
Comments from author:
The Forvon are in a very sticky situation of their own making now...

There may be some underwater action at some point.

Doubt if anyone's going to make a movie out of it, but many thanks for the appreciation!

Thanks for the review
Review By [Rich] • Date [6 Sep 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Alkeni
Another brilliant chapter.
Comments from author:
Thanks - glad you're still enjoying it.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [27 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from Grovtech
I don't have much to add to all the great comments that has already been made. This isn't just fanfic but like others have said you've greatly expanded on the source material. I'm so looking forward to more!

However, I did note that in the Cordy story the Asgardians did play mailman for our castaways so at some point an agreement has been reached after they failed to uphold the treaty.

Comments from author:
Many thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it. This is probably my favourite of the series, as I've given myself more free reign here.

The Tallurans and Asgard will partially mend fences, and this will be one of the favours owed by the latter...
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [18 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: Counter-Strike" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Poor Faith, finally some men throw herself at her feet, and she can actually have some fun and they're the wrong race. I'm just surprised no one made an 'I've got crabs' joke.

At least the destruction on the archeological site wasn't wrought by the investigators. Curse you, Indiana Jones!

Ah, for the joys of insane Emperors... Insanity that was actually bred into the line. Makes one wonder about the sanity and asininity of the race as a whole.

A horrible and terrifying attack that will no doubt lead to a tough decision and painful consience for Drayana.

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Who said these Malhenthia were the male of the species? Actually, I missed a trick there. Exactly the sort of thing Faith would have said.

They might have to return there at some point, too.

This Emperor's insanity may yet have dire consequences for the whole extended family, when his troops finally rise...

Drayana is quite capable of making the toughest decisions - even in a context like this - but her conscience will weigh her down for a long time afterwards.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [1 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from (Recent Donor)draconin
Wow! Your portrayal of war on this scale is terrifyingly evocative. I really do love Drayana as a character and you're keeping her fresh and evolving. I think that she is NOT going to be impressed with the outcomes of the High Council's refusal to involve itself! Really looking forward to the next instalment.
One small typo (I presume): I went back to reread the previous chapter - in the paragraph where Joyce is taking 'holiday snaps' you say that she (Joyce) is looking forward to relating her experiences to Buffy and Joyce... I assume you mean Buffy and Cordelia. :-)
Comments from author:
The war is almost over, though there'll be a lot of mess to clear up. Glad you like my development of Drayana's character. She won't be happy with the Asgard at all...

I'll fix the typo - thanks for pointing it out.

Thanks for the review and glad you enjoyed it
Review By [(Recent Donor)draconin] • Date [31 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from (Current Donor)Sulien
ETA: I really wish the review area had a reply function! Anyway... Yes, Deterrence Theory is very valid in the real world and I have been cringing and literally face-palming and grinding my teeth at recent real world events. Dear Gods, I wish all real world leaders had to undergo the training you've had the Tallurans give Drayana!

While I'm at it, Drayana's reasons for not wearing her military uniform gave me all kinds of warm fuzzies. I really love that character!


I very nearly did Gollum's dance of joy when I saw the email notification of the posting of this chapter in my in-box this afternoon. Thank you!

Review. Wow. Holy crap. I have trouble wrapping my head around the casualties caused by various madmen in our own reality and this scale is downright incomprehensible. Okay, I admit it, I really don't WANT to wrap my head around this sort of thing. *forcibly dragging mind away from this line of thought and all that it entails...lalalalalala*

The thought that the Asgard were hanging back and could actually have intervened to stop such massive civilian casualties... Yeah, the Asgard High Council can count themselves lucky if Drayana doesn't tell them to exit the Vedda Galaxy and put her imperial boot up their collective backsides on the way out after she learns about this. I've a feeling Drayana, and the rest of the Tallurans, will know that they no longer need the Asgard baby sitters by the time all is said and done in this war. And if the Asgard are smart, they'll wait until the peace is well under way and everyone is in recovery mode before telling Drayana. She'll have had enough of conflict by that time that she'll likely not even plant her boot up their backsides.

Very much looking forward to the next chapter whenever you post it! And thank you for sharing this and making my day. :)
Comments from author:
The casualty figures were indeed eye-wateringly high. Unfortunately, if the Tallurans hadn't responded extremely harshly they'd have been leaving themselves wide open to similar attacks in future. The Empress will still have problems with her conscience for a while - in spite of her threats, she isn't her ancestor.

The Tallurans may find it hard to forget and forgive the Asgard's failure to intervene. While the former aren't quite ready to dispense with the Asgard, they will be sorely tempted, and as you say, if the Asgard are wise, they'll wait until things have calmed down somewhat.

Thanks for the review - glad you enjoyed it.

Edit: Feel free to drop me an e-mail via the site at any time. Too many people in today's world only associate deterrence theory with the Cold War, but it's timeless for a very good reason. Drayana had multiple reasons for not wearing the uniform, all of them valid. Glad you like the character - I've spent a lot of time thinking about how to portray her in the most convincing way possible.
Review By [(Current Donor)Sulien] • Date [26 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from maxthehobbit
I had expected a lot of interaction with Faith, Dawn and the polar bear creatures, but all the action with Dryanna was good and very entertaining. I guess what I thought will come up in the next chapter, a long three month wait. Hopefully I'll live that long ... had a heart attack near the end of March ... payment for smoking 2 packs a day for 38 years. The Asgard acting like the PTB is a new development. Still enjoying this story and looking forward to the big fight with Glory ... maybe about Christmas time?
Comments from author:
The interaction with the Imshai will start in the next chapter, which I hope to post in under 3 months this time.
The Asgard aren't exactly acting like the PTB, more wanting the Tallurans to reassume their position as one of the Four Races (being the remaining physical presence of the Alterans) and also to take some of the pressure off them for maintaining various Protected Planets Treaties. The Tallurans aren't going to like their non-intervention, however.

I do indeed hope to have FLP2 finished around Christmas, if not before.

Hope your health improves and thanks for the review.
Review By [maxthehobbit] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from NorthernOil
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review - hope you enjoyed it!
Review By [NorthernOil] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from RevDorothyL
I hope the Asgard High Council haven't made a serious miscalculation in their treatment of the Tallurans (even if they couldn't possibly have miscalculated as badly as mad emperor Kharillon).

Great and exciting chapter!
Comments from author:
Drayana may have calmed down somewhat by the time she talks to the Asgard and finds out that they decided not to intervene. She won't forgive or forget easily, however.

Thanks for the review, glad you enjoyed it.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [25 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Diplomacy and the Dogs of War: an Empire's Wrath" from JinaSolo
Please have the SGC contingent talk both parties out of invading Pegasus and the Milky Way...

I think Dawn and Faith would be great for chewing them both out. If the Asgard had stepped in and let the biological and nuclear attacks happen in space them the Empress would have still been mad and still ordered the Star Empire beaten, but she would not have had to order the deaths of so many...

In other words, if the Asgard want to help Earth them they can give Earth the technology to help themselves rather then sending in others to meddle... While Earth and the Milky Way might like to open trade relations with them, nobody in either galaxy would like interference...

Besides, in the SG1 TV show we get the Asgard Tech anyway...
Comments from author:
Earth doesn't even know about Pegasus at this point. In any case, it's more of the Tallurans' responsibility. They're an offshoot of the Alterans, who made the mess in the first place. If the Alterans hadn't Ascended, the Tallurans would have been the ones (as the warrior offshoot) who returned to Pegasus in force. Only their own disasters prevented that from happening, but it's still on the agenda. If I do write a Pegasus section, the SGA team will only be there as allies of a force better able to deal with the situation there. SGA in canon merely made matters worse in all sorts of ways.

Dawn and Faith are hardly likely to be asked to talk to important allies of the Talluran Empire and Earth. The Asgard will, however, be chewed out.

Earth was lucky to come out on top against the Goa'uld and in part only thanks to Replicator attacks, the Jaffa rebellion, and Anubis destroying the power of the individual system lords. The Protected Planets Treaty is a big bluff on the part of the Asgard for the most part and they probably view the Tallurans as better able to carry out that function. The Asgard have known the Tau'ri for all of 2 minutes in galactic terms and are hardly likely to suddenly share everything with them. Even if they did, the technological gulf is massive. Prometheus hasn't even been launched yet in this story and Earth hasn't got the resources to build a significant fleet (nor did it in canon). In canon, Asgard tech arrived in tiny amounts and initially with limited capabilities.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [JinaSolo] • Date [24 Jul 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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