I think he needs to review the laws of diminishing returns. It's getting to the point where his secret is doing more harm than good for his and their effectiveness.

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nice the guest for the party have arrived :)

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good meeting with Lady, both are still alive and now he has a talk with Seras ahead of him as well :)

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ohhaa what a way to talk to Integra

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quite the nice start and I am certain to follow this for a while :)

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nice scene at Willy's and looks like X has a few ppl interested in him now :)

Good story. Can't wait for the next chapters.

I'm with your beta on this, decent job on the chapter. Maybe it isn't as smooth as some of the others but the overall story is moving along well and none of the characters where harmed (that shouldn't have been...). Hope to read more of this story soon.

Very good

First thank your muse for cooperating for this chapter! I hope she sees fit to grace you with her presence for this or other stories soon!

Second, good fight scene in the library - well done nicely paced. Good handling of Kendra's introduction and Spike getting Angel.
Good handling of Xander/Cordelia in the basement and Xander handling the bug assassin. Again well paced, just enough breaks to other parts of the story to keep things moving.

Thanks for a great chapter!

nice update cant wait to see what story you do next.

Awesome! I wondered if this was going to be kept going.

Quite an exciting chapter. I enjoyed reading it.
Congrats!

Time to dust it off and start puttin down them keys! Love the story and would really like to see more!

The more you write, the better it gets so keep up the good work! Besides, the ideas at the base of the work are more important, in my opinion, than the grammar, at least in the beginning. Grammar skills can be improved or supplemented by hard work and a good editor. Drop me a line. No notion how fast I will get it back to you but I can definitely clean it up.

Will talk to you soon, i warn you in advance the next chapter was by far the biggest nightmare i have takled in my career...

Very nice. But Xander is going to so get his butt kicked when Buffy and Willow find out he is Hunter.

It's not going to be pretty.

Great Story, Thanks!

Wow... exciting and fun chapter! Liked reading it.
I think it was a very Xander-like response to the Hellsing Organisation and Alucard.
Eager to see how the fight goes and who ends up with the cross.
Congrats!

Oddly not. I'm more of a free thinker that often aids writers to the hour of creating valid plots for events or such. Oddly, i can think on that the "Slayer Spirit" its on a sense present on a low level on ALL Potentials. . .a sort of bridge for when the anterior Slayer bites the bullet. Keeping on the thought line of the presence of the Slayer Spirit on some level on a potential.

Would not act this Spirit like a parasitic seal on the Potential, draining and sealing the devil side of the girl, while keeping the Potential ready for its "Calling" as a Slayer.?

Why this never happened before? Think on the sheer odds of a Female Half-Devil or such being a potential, or the fact that until very recent modern ages, Half-breed Devils did tend to have a VERY limited life length, due to Iscariot and other zealot, demon-hating groups killing said children on the spot, regardless of things. To boot, i guess that given Nero, Dante and Vergil, the birth of female Half-Devils happens less frequently than guys, and there you have a more plausible way to explain WHY a Potential never showed signals of Devil Heritage.


PS: Its a little known fact, but i believe that Devils and Half-Devils actually do take offense to be called or compared to Demons, as Devils are on the high tier of power and capabilities, like comparing a man with an orangutan