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Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Obsidian
Review:
Interesting story but was overkill on the tech specs. Made for a very boring read. At times thought I was reading a Technical manual of what the race had or was going to make. Very boring. Needs more substance and action.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [17 Apr 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
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This is a great story, a bit heavy on the technical detail for the new ships but the actual details were very interesting.

I liked the interaction between Thor, Jack and Xander.

It would be even better if you continued it...
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
Merry Christmas, and to all a good life. Prayers for a update are always included.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [25 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from DarthPayne
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I'm really *really* hoping that this fic will be continued...
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [7 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from jgoodman
Review:
Love this story and can't wait to read more, please update
Review By [jgoodman] • Date [5 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 7" from SledgeHammer
Review:
Jenny took Xander's offer because the whole reason for her being there (to watch over Angel) is moot (as Angel was dusted by Buffy). What's nice (and not exactly typical from most YAHF fics in which the Brooding One becomes Dustbusted) is that *Buffy* not only did the staking, but gets why the staking had to be done in the first place. As so many (fic authors as well as vamps) bought into Xander's "Zeppo" mask, a lot of fanfic authors have bought into Buffy's "airhead/ditz" mask (thereby making them seem as intelligent as the soon-to-be-staked in most cases). That's one reason why I like this fanfic - not just Smart!Xander, but Smart!Buffy.
Review By [SledgeHammer] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3" from SledgeHammer
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Spike, Drusilla *and* Angel all wind up as so much DustBuster food (with Angel himself taken out by Buffy)? *ooopies*
Warren Mears crash-lands, fatally (that's really gotta sting!) - check.
I think Xander/Janus has plans for Joyce (and I don't mean the same plans Jean-Luc Picard had for Beverly Crusher after one of their breakfast dates, either).
Mayor Wilkins must still be dealt with, and Xander has to make with the 'splainy (not necessarily in that order).
Review By [SledgeHammer] • Date [19 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Narf
Review:
Not bad at all. Good story plot line, lots of detail. My only hope is that you have xander lay the smackdown on the bad guys soon. Anyway keep up the good work thanks and bye.
Review By [Narf] • Date [20 May 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Semnet
Review:
This was a great chapter. I can't wait to see how the system lords react. I would also like to see the replicators taken care to free up the Asgard ships.
Review By [Semnet] • Date [20 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from rothos
Review:
Xander seems too OP in my mind. Then again adding in a diplomatic squabble or two with the UN can remedy that. What tech to release becomes a problem because of OPEC.
Comments from author:
OP? Xander will have issues with other government bodies and will deal with them in interesting ways. Xander will work on improving the tech base but not give everything to them. Kind of like helping them understand gravimetrics and checking over their designs after they work it out for themselves.
Review By [rothos] • Date [19 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from VillageOrchid
Review:
The story has a bit of an "info dump" problem, but is interesting.
Comments from author:
I will work on smoothing it out for later chapters so its not such an "info dump". Thanks for the review.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [19 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from cjcold
Review:
Nice update.

Good job summarizing the situation. I imagine the Asguard will be very surprised when they see the new Thor.

The negotiations should be interesting, with the Goa'uld threatening and the Alteran and Asguard effectively saying just try it.

I wonder if the new Asguard sex drive will have an effect on their behaviour, such as more aggresive tendencies. And what effect that would have on their war with the Replicators.

I like that while Xander was glad to not be related to Tony, you didn't have him fall apart and suddenly want his daddy. He is a little too old for that.

Can't wait to see the SGC reaction to Jack's report.

Xander's requests were reasonable from my pov, but then I am not a politician. Wonder how long it will take before the NID poke their nose into things.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.

The Asgard will change because of the changes. The Replicators will be dealt with with the help of the Alterans. Xander and the AIs will work on designing better ways to deal with them.

Yea, Xander is glad to not be related to Tony but remember he has 16 years of human memories of abusive parents and then 10,000 years of Alteran memories. Jack will be a supporting person when Xander will be forced to make hard decisions and another role model.

The SGC will be a interesting scene which is the next chapter or two.

The NID will be dealt with before the meeting with the Gou'ald and during the treaty with Earth.

It will probably be next week before I update again.
Review By [cjcold] • Date [19 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from eriktheviking
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A well written set-up for the various parties who will want Xander's resources.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [19 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from TDK
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The whole Jack, Xander thing doesn't flow well at all. The reactions are wrong and it seems like you forced the scene.
Review By [TDK] • Date [19 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8" from Genuka
Review:
Again with the EVIL! More please!
Review By [Genuka] • Date [19 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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