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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Mechconstrictor
Review:
The story isn't too bad. It needs some work in some places, a bit rough. I hope to see more.
Review By [Mechconstrictor] • Date [14 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from JediKnight
Review:
Interesting but you seem to be posting very short chapters
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [3 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Moderator)JoeHundredaire
Review:
Why does a representation of an American soldier have a Nepalese knife?

EDIT: No, he was a US Army soldier, as evidenced by Xander's ability to exhibit knowledge about the American army.
Comments from author:
Because it was a generic soldier.
Review By [(Moderator)JoeHundredaire] • Date [2 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Hanzo
Review:
♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story.♥
Review By [Hanzo] • Date [2 May 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from eriktheviking
Review:
An interesting development in their relationship.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [2 May 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back in Sunnydale" from RHatch
Review:
its a good idea, but the dialogue was kinda lacking, an your show facts are a bit skewed... for example if Xander just returned from his road trip, Giles wouldn't be in the library because they destroyed the school before they all left for the summer.
Review By [RHatch] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back in Sunnydale" from JediKnight
Review:
You do not seem to have all of your facts straight in this chapter; not to mention it doesn't seem to have much in it at all.
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back in Sunnydale" from LostDragon
Review:
I like the concept however, the dialoge seems a little. ........."flat" or emotionless. Not a writer myself so, I can not hope to suggest a fix but it is my feel on the story. I do like it and will be following it to the end.
Review By [LostDragon] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back in Sunnydale" from LFW
Review:
The Snoopy dance by three mental figures is very amusing.
But I do have to question if Sunnydale has enough tall buildings to swing?
A visit with Joyce next?
Thanks
Review By [LFW] • Date [26 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Back in Sunnydale" from ovid
Review:
What the hell happened? Your grammar quality took a noise dive, and you wrote this chapter as if it was a significant amount of time after the first one.

Did someone else write this chapter?
Review By [ovid] • Date [26 Apr 11] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Lovely!

See's Candies, Ghiradelli, all the classic chocolate, it'll work well.

And as Xander is keeping a handle on it, hopefully the Symbiote's opinion (that it was acting out on the issues Peter himself had) will get more credence.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [26 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Dragonwolftiger
Review:
Great start, I love the intelligent Hyena. Please continue, but make sure YOU'RE happy with each chapter.
Review By [Dragonwolftiger] • Date [26 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from JediKnight
Review:
Very interesting start, I hope to read more soon.

-Will any other Marvel characters be showing up?
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [26 Apr 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ovid
Review:
Sounds like an interesting concept. I look forward to more updates.
Review By [ovid] • Date [25 Apr 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Vilkath
Review:
A bit rough and slightly out of character, especially in Xander's response to a strange voice offering him power up in his head. Still I like the idea and look forward to seeing where this story might go. The most important thing to make this story a success is to keep it going. Far to many alternate start stories like this die off after the first few chapters. Authors love to set these idea's up, but few think far enough ahead to establish a goal.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [25 Apr 11] • Not Rated
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