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Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from Spica
Would totally like to see more of this!
Review By [Spica] • Date [19 Aug 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from Alkeni
I really like this fic, and think that you should continue. Its wonderful idea.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [22 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1. Accident" from Vianca
Strange dubble post, it twinned..
Weird. :(
Review By [Vianca] • Date [24 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 1. Accident" from Vianca
Aye, I understand.
Might want to read some other stories with a build-up in it, they might have what you need in it, qua inspiration.

This a cross with Stargate or some other Sci-fi story as well?
Anyway, you could go with build-up and getting the lay of the land, besides adding any new knowledge to their database, for the next chapter.
Possibly even some new toys for the Slayers as well, I would think a HUD/glases that lets them see if somebody is alive or not, would be quite liked.
Incendary rounds just became possible, for one.

Since Buffy just can't drive, a Knight Rider style car for her?
I mean, the new guys on the block have AI tech.
These new guys their own plans and designs could be contra to what the Scoobies might want or need.
Both parties would likely have a little problem with fully trusting each other for some time, tension amounts.
Basicaly, keep the distrust of the unknown in your mind when writing, since that is what both sides are to each other.

If this is also a cross with Stargate, you could let them detect the two Goa'uld ships at the end of seison(?) one.
Would give you a little playing time, a new enemy and another common treat.
It would also clue them in that the USA has some pretty heavy (Naquada enhanced) nukes , nukes that they have'n't ever heard, seen or read about, till now.

But it's your story, so.....
Anyway, blow that roadblock to hell and clear that lane up, a story awaits. ;)
Well, till the next time. db
Comments from author:
Beautiful ideas, thank you. Yes, I did plan to add SG-1 at some point - the idea of Starcraft Battlecruisers vs Goa'uld Ha'tak gives me tinglies :)
Review By [Vianca] • Date [24 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from PATM
So Dracula is common knowledge in the future? Going from the surprise about vampires to knowing about Dracula? Woopsie! Otherwise this a good start.
Comments from author:
I believe Dracula to be an immortal story, yes :) Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [PATM] • Date [23 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from Genuka
Evil..... Nice thought on the tactical front though. More please!
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing. I am stuck at the moment, but I'll figure it out.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [10 Jun 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from LetsRandom
I'm interested to read what you do with this setup/story. Looking forward to future updates!
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing. I am stuck at the moment... but I'll figure it out.
Review By [LetsRandom] • Date [3 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from Gideon
Oh dear, Frank may be getting ideas above his station. I hope he doesn't try to take over the world! Eva and the scoobies seem to be getting on well though and the medevac has some useful abilites for now with more possible through construction at a later date. If some training facilites could be built maybe Faith and Buffy could get a bit of ghost training and maybe Xander could get some marine training or gear?
Comments from author:
Thank you for reviewing. I am stuck at the moment, but I promise I'll re-read all the reviews as soon as I manage to get back on the horse. :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2. Recon" from Vianca
Following up with review of chapter 3 using chapter 2.

First off, it looks like the command center is higher then 3 stories, unless your looking from a verhincel point-off-view, then it would be true.
Atleast that is what I get from the pic's, check the pic's, you'll see what I mean.

Another thing, building it in a remote aria will cause it to be noticed in time, but what about extending Calax Research and Development (if they can get it) with a landing pit that covers-up that it can fly?
Put the mountain one under ground as much as possible and make the top part look like a old piramide or so.
As for the Nuclear Silo that can be build within, what about using it as the launch silo for a probe-sat so they can check the whole solar system for resources?

You do realise that a medivac modified with MULE tech could also mine asteriods and the like, right?
Because of this, you might also want to think about one modified with a constructor it's tech.
Mmm, if you burry the command center as much as possible so it won't get noticed that quickly (it's a bit big considering it's three floors are the biggest verhincel it's hight, high. Same for the lenght and wide of it), might I suggest using the Barracks ad the "Calax Research and Development" terrain?
It would make more sence as a forward base, lift-off abilities would/could be hidden in the same style I suggested for the command center.

Another thing when looking into those web-pages, why can't a building be connected to both a reactor and a tech-lab as long as only on is used at the time?
Might be something for them to look into, while they concentrate on getting cloaking tech as fast a possible.
It would let them hid better in those mountains without having to worry about being noticed all that easily.

Anyway, till the next time.
ps: They could always ask for a "notice me not spell". ;)
pps: Didn't the Scoobies encounter several robots? Perhaps they could study them for use by their own AI's, AI troops.
ppps: Can't they go and become concurrents of NASA and the like in terms of launching sats? That way they don't need to hid their command center all that much.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for reviewing... this is a lot more than that :) I am somewhat stuck on this story, so I was ashamed to reply. Stupid, as I just realized today :)

I will be sure to integrate the above in the next chapters... as soon as inspiration hits.

Thanks again!
Review By [Vianca] • Date [1 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from LiseAnn
Don't know SC at all, aside from what I've seen in other fics. One question about the base they are building: You say they cleared an area but are they building on the surface or going down into the valley soil/mountains? Reason I'm asking is that unless they have some sort of cloaking for the base, they will get picked up on sat at some point if they are staying above ground. And I would think the AI would be able to detect satellites?
Comments from author: says the command center is three stories high AND wide. Three stories are about 10 meters, so that would be about 10x10 when seen from above. Hard to spot in a large forest from satellite, but I'll have them throw some rudimentary camouflage over it anyway.

Right now, since there's no reason for the government to investigate the area, I'm more worried about someone hearing their guns firing. As they start to become more active, that will very likely change.

Thanks for the review!
Review By [LiseAnn] • Date [1 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from Vianca
Intresting, would gas gaints have the gas they need?
If so, could they build a modified medevac for this purpurse?

It seems to me that they have one problem, crew.
While they could use AI's, it would still leave them short in the people department.
They don't clone, do they?
Any change on the Slayers geting a "slaying gear" upgrade?

They might want to see if magic could transmute one gas into another gas, for one thing.
What about Calax Research and Development, any use as a forward base and local money raiser?
They could probably get the needed stuff for that with raw materials like gold or so.
Heck, they might just hack themself into owning it and having a background togeter with a nice back-account.

Are these Starcraft People still in their own universe or in another one all togeter?
If it's the last, is it a cross with more then Btvs and Starcraft or not?
Starts dailing, so I have a quick escape to another galaxy. ;7
Comments from author:
Damn. I started to post this story as I write it exactly because I was sure I was going to get stuck on plot, and I wanted suggestions from readers, but... damn :) These are all great ideas, so it seems that I need to do some research to see how I can integrate them with mine. I didn't even think of the possibility of magical transmutation, for example :)

A very big THANK YOU.

Answers: harvesting from Jupiter would be an interesting challenge; most ships in the Starcraft universe are capable of interplanetary flight, as far as I know. (After all, Mutalisks are certainly able.) A modified medevac, maybe combined with MULE technology, sounds possible.

I plan on upgrading the Scoobies with high-tech, and maybe even Riley and Graham (I always found Graham underused in the canon).

As far as sci-fi goes, I'm in the school that says that travelling back in time causes another universe to be created. And yes, I had planned to also cross over with SG-1 at some point (Buffy x SG-1 is my favorite crossover) - I want Earth to kick Ori butt without the help of the ancients.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [1 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 3. Settling in" from rothos
Unfortunately I only played SC1 for too short awhile to remember ghosts, but I remem ber battle cruisers!
Consider this tracked.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm basing this on SC2, so there are some differences - though not on the battlecruisers.
Review By [rothos] • Date [1 May 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2. Recon" from trongod
Not up too well on Starcraft, but I enjoyed what you've done so far. Really want to see Xander and Willow's reactions to the new arrivals' ought to be fun...

Know it's 2000 in the Buffy 'verse, but fuzzy on details of who's where and what's going on with the Scoobies, or will you be tweaking the timeline some? If tweaking, couldja let Faith be part of the Scoobies from the get go? Always thought she had the worst deal of any of'em; besides, Joyce needs someone to help keep an eye on Dawn - Lord knows Buffy lets important things like that slide until it's too late...
Comments from author:
That's not a bad idea... I also think Faith got the short straw in canon. Thanks for the review and the suggestion!
Review By [trongod] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2. Recon" from Omegaprime
Hmm, this is an interesting story and hopefully you can update soon.

So when will Eva meet up with the rest of the Scoobies?

Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I plan to focus the viewpoint on the Starcraft crew, at least in the beginning... I want to have them develop in parallel with the action in the Buffy verse.
Review By [Omegaprime] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 2. Recon" from Gideon
Well at least the ghost and Buffy are being non-hostile with each other, if not friendly. If it is 2000 then Buffy is at college right? A ghost would be useful to infiltrate the sneaky commandos walking around town...
If they set up a base and start the scv building things then they risk being discovered because none of the buildings can cloak. They might even get deported as illegal aliens!
Comments from author:
The scout investigating the initiative would be a good idea, I'm just worried that the present-day soldiers might have security against invisible beings :)
I definitely want to be able to build stuff, but it's going to take time, and they'll have to find some hidden place for it.
I'll leave that here, even though I realized it was wrong. The initiative is gone by the end of 2000 - places my chosen date at the beginning of season five. Maybe dealing with Adam *before* Glory would have been a better way to start integrating the Starcraft crew in the Buffy verse. I'll have to think about it.

Thanks for your comment, it opened up some possibilities.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [27 Apr 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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