Review of chapter "Finding Love" from CrystalBlaze
Needs a tad more tell and a trifle less show.
But yeah, "the moment" is a trifle now-centric, and I can imagine Dawnbeing rather absorbed in losing her virgin status.
The fact that this draws blood and maybe takes them both somewhere just adds to the fun.
Review By [CrystalBlaze
] • Date [29 Apr 11] • Not Rated