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Starship Troopers: The Betrayed

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Review of chapter "Fallout" from DarthPayne
Review:
I do hope this fic gets continued at some point...

Perhaps after the new animated movie comes out?
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [16 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fallout" from warfolomei
Review:
Hard to say... maybe it's a bit too much but at the same time it's not .. hmmm .. let's see how it plays out.
Review By [warfolomei] • Date [27 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fallout" from Gideon
Review:
Good to see Xander doing something useful with his downtime, maybe we will actually find out what he did next chapter :)
I did have some trouble following parts of this chapter though. There seem to be some missing words or unclear sentences. Try reading it out aloud and see if it still makes sense.
The guys back home all having themed code names is pretty funny, but I found it strange that they then referred to "Mrs Harris" by name. If the code names are for security then that is a great big breach of security. I hope you will tell us who all the code names belong to eventually :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [5 Oct 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fallout" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written tension build-up.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [3 Oct 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fallout" from Addlcove
Review:
hoping to see more of this soon :)
Review By [Addlcove] • Date [3 Oct 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fallout" from DarthPayne
Review:
Well now, ain't this interesting. :)

Keep the chapters coming. :):)
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [3 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fallout" from jormunguard
Review:
While I like this story in some ways it has one major problem and that's the reality that the main part of the action is taking place. The earth had an extremely militaristic government. If Xander had suddenly shown up at a military base that was in this kind of situation with no orders and not providing them with anything but his name he would be shot not locked in a room. Also the higher level tech that your complaining about not being there actually did exist to a point in the book, probably wasn't in the movie because of budget.
Comments from author:
I know the book had higher tech, hell the book is a work of art a literary masterpiece in my opinion. However I'm using the movie-verse which you already pointed out failed to bring across that fact or the true scale of the books, mostly due to budget, a portion to the limits of the technology and techniques of the time it was made and I'm gonna attribute a little suckage to artitistic liberty but not on the actors parts because I liked the acting especially Rasczak. I also know that chances are he would have been shot but chose not to do that because then I'd have no story or I'd have had to reveal a secret, that I'm saving for later, in an orgy of blood and destruction to rival the clusterfuck on Klendathu that would have severly wounded my plotline.

Thanks for reading and review. I appreciate that you actually took the time to comment.
Review By [jormunguard] • Date [2 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from Genericrandom
Review:
This is a pretty good one. Not quite as captivating as /Hound/ but it's got lots of promise. Still needs a little bit of polish, for example instead of telling us what'd gone on, you'd have been better off doing a series of scenes like that classified report excerpt and building up to the beginning of this story. So put in some time now and then on this, and keep going.
Review By [Genericrandom] • Date [23 Aug 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Command" from Evilsandman
Review:
If this is the first story you've ever written of this lenght you are doing a good job. This is the only mistake is spotted; Otherwise they’ll be one more to add to the dead.

I do like this story and hope you'll complete it. You are not the only one who hates the 2th movie and even the 3th was a big dissapointment. Especially the power suits or whatever they're called.

I look forward to the next chapter
Review By [Evilsandman] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from janeaverage
Review:
I'm totally unfamiliar with the Starship Troopers 'verse other than the first movie, but it's a simple enough setup to grasp and promises to be enjoyable. I liked the battle sequence; it both shows Xander's competence and creates a potential problem for the command (nobody likes a mysterious guy with the guts and the presence to command their troops, but OTOH they might all have died if he hadn't). I think you managed to strike a nice balance between Xander's own talents and the assistance he receives from his magic/tech.

(Also, Odin and the Valkyries? I can just IMAGINE how thrilled Xander was to get another special designation xD but it's brill and very apropos.)
Review By [janeaverage] • Date [29 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from bolhabela
Review:
Good chapter but a little short. Keep up with the good work and do not make Xander a superman. A lot of advanced technology and a little magic can go and he can be stronger then normal humans but hes no superman. Please update mmore often. Good work!
Review By [bolhabela] • Date [29 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from shadowalker
Review:
Very entertaining Love the 75% more Xander.
Review By [shadowalker] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Command" from cwolf
Review:
Eh. track down the 1960's novel and write more based on it.

http://www.amazon.com/Starship-Troopers-Robert-Heinlein/dp/0441783589

they reprinted, but kept to the same 1960's story
Review By [cwolf] • Date [28 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from DarthPayne
Review:
I like. :)

I look forward to future chapters.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [27 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Command" from Vilkath
Review:
I like this story and there are not nearly enough good Starship trooper stories out there and I am always glad to see another one. I do wish the story had a more linear approach though. The abuse of flash backs to fill in plot holes after the fact is always annoying. It is one thing to start a story off as an AU and gloss over the history, it is another to then state it like a summary in the second chapter any ways.

The flash back is a valid writing tool, but use it with caution. Far to many fics use it as a cheap method to paste in facts that they need to make something work instead of leaving the proper clues in the first place.

As for rants about the Starship Trooper universe I'll give you another one, they have next to no heavy weapons. No tanks, no real weapons platforms, no portable machine guns. Everyone has a riffle that has dubious effect on even the weakest of bugs and little else. Even the outpost from the first movie only had two high caliber guns on towers with little to no protection. No mortars, no heavy artillery not even any wall mounted machine guns or plasma canons. The ships have energy weapons, why doesn't any thing in the military?

Then you have the second movie with their electric fences with no real back ups. A single wall around their base with no secondary walls to deal with the bugs if they get passed the first one. Never mind the fact the wall was only so high and in the past the bugs proved they were willing to climb their dead to get over a wall. You also have to consider the bugs proved they could burrow under ground straight into a base in the first movie and they had flying bugs as well. Frankly a little 20ft or so electric fence was a rather poor defensive measure.
Review By [Vilkath] • Date [27 Jun 11] • Not Rated
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