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Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from MadHobbit
first let me say good story, my comments are about the chars personally I think they show the phrase absolute power corrupts absolutely. and while not there yet, they are heading down that slippery slope. lets see they steal the apples, and later they save the jedi temple,and copy every thing before giving it back and not even asking permission.
when they get to voyager and make a deal it is just a smoke screen while they take every thing they can without asking. to me they seem to be information Borgs, instead of taking the people they take the tech/knowledge/magic. while I can see wiping out the do it to the ancients. seems the gang are the new PTB

again the story is fine, the chars actions I have trouble with.

now for the 180

surprised they did not go to a DC universe and go to the 30th century, some of the LSH get their powers by birth, element lad ,saturn girl,cosmic boy,shrinking violet just to name a few, and they would not have to get the samples from the heroes,just other members of their races.

well with the Borg,they take people,what I was referring to was they take information,for example the taking of the Borg cube,no problem,but they gave some info and a trip to voyager,but they hacked and got the total databases and info that Starfleet had.bit of stealing, and as for the jedi information, it like when a hurricane comes and lay waste to a town, you go into the local music store, grab all the cd/dvds take them home rip them then take them back to the the above example,getting food/medical supplies is a different reason all you could say this set of heroes were more grey hats than white or black. as for the B5 trip,they knew that displaying powers like that would be like
waving a red cape in front of a bull,and any PSI corp member would do something.So great he attacked me so I can now do something more to him in the name of self defence.

like i said good story ,I have a few issues with what the chars did,we just have different viewpoints.
Comments from author:
You're right about them being a bit selfish. Stealing apples of immortality from the gods is a tradition... :) No real reason not to copy the Jedi temple if given the chance. As for copying information, most of the people that dealt with them were better off for it. They got help and the gang got something out of it.

As for the Ori and the Ascended... one of the ascended gave a race a weapon... then rather than take the weapon away they vaporized that world's surface... basically... they allowed billions of people to suffer (anubus because one of them raised him...) They didn't bother to clean up their mess Wraith... there are a few examples of them being hostile to life when it benefited them.

Was it underhanded and cold to kill them? Yes... I'd say it was. I could also argue that fear of the ori were the only thing keeping them in check.

As for comparing them to the borg, I'm sorry I don't buy it. They're copying knowledge or collecting it, they're not destroying people to get it.

As for the DC world, they probably could have collected some blood samples from various alien races... but I'm not sure they cared enough.
Review By [MadHobbit] • Date [21 May 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from slmncpm
i just found this series and read it straight through. i love it. thank you for sharing!
Comments from author:
It's sort of a fun crazy series :)

I'm glad that you enjoyed it.
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [28 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Doodle
I just thought of another idea if you do happen to decide to continue this. How does the new Slayer/Potential thing work in this series originally? Is it genetic through bloodlines or does the Slayer Spirit Simeya chooses them? How does it work now that their in the Hercules/Xena and hopefully eventually the PJO world? Or does it get passed on differently now that they're in a world with actual Gods and Goddesses? If it's through bloodlines that could be why Percy could instinctively kill Alecto the Fury in the beginning of book one, but Slayer is partially latent in him and being in water just heightens it.
Comments from author:
As for the slayer essence... I would assume that it's passed through genetics... recessive... or something...

As for Percy.. he's the son of the god of water... I think that's enough. :)

As for continuing the series... I might at some point.
Review By [Doodle] • Date [16 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from branz
Now that is how you do a story.
Excellent story and you don't let it drag on too far like some. Well Done!

the best way i could see to continue this is have each of their future adventures in each universe in separate interconnected stories, (look for Guardian54 on for an idea of that.

if you are continuing i would like to see a story that involves Eve Online if you can.
Comments from author:
At some point I might continue it... but I'm not sure when. I'm trying to get back to some other stuff that needs continuing... and keep some Harry Potter stuff I have on another site going... so it might be a bit... but I sort of like the one for one idea... one world per story... so we'll see...
Thanks for the review.
Review By [branz] • Date [9 Apr 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from deathgeonous
And the good times continue. Now the only reason this fic is not also going on my recs list, is that I only put the first fic of a series on it. Saves on the limited space we get. Well, thanks for writing this, bye of now.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [5 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Good story, hope you continue it!
Comments from author:
At some point I'm sure I will.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [22 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from ivanjedi
You have used at least two different versions of several realities by now, how about adding an additional Hercules/Xena universe? I'd love to see the crew handle the situation with baby or adult Eve/Livia
Comments from author:
It's been a bit too long since I watched the episodes to do that sadly. Not to mention that they have little reason to go to an alternate world now for her. If you'll recall they are in Hercules's world rather than stepping into it and collecting... so they would have to step into a similar one and... I don't think I can make that idea work. Thanks for the review though.
Review By [ivanjedi] • Date [20 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from DavidFraser
A very readable sequel which merits a mention in its own right.

Well done.
Comments from author:
Thank you, I'm glad you enjoyed the sequel.
Review By [DavidFraser] • Date [26 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from cptquinn
Interesting series, way too much Harry Potter for my tastes, but there was enough 'good' x-over stuff to balance it out. I do hope you add more at some point, just remember to add a chapter here telling people if you do. This site really needs a 'track series' feature.
Comments from author:
It would be nice if there was a track series feature. At some point I do intend to continue the series.
Review By [cptquinn] • Date [5 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Zyanadryn
love this series!
Comments from author:
It was a blast to write.
Review By [Zyanadryn] • Date [31 Oct 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from Obsidian
Another Awesome story. thanks!
Comments from author:
Thanks. That one was lots of fun to write as well.
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from deathgeonous
Ah, again a nice, and very over powered, fic here. And sadly, I had thought my problems with this site were over and done with, but starting on chapter six, every other chapter kicked me off this site. If this keeps up, I'm going to have to find a way to contact them.... ah well, thanks for writing this fun fun fic, bye for now.
Comments from author:
The story was sort of designed to be a bit over powered and yet to still have a story that was worth reading. Hopefully I didn't miss the mark by too much.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [9 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Current Donor)Katrina
Had me a moment of ended too soon! But really, I just enjoyed the ride. Thank you :)
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed the story. It was fun to write a lot of that story.
Review By [(Current Donor)Katrina] • Date [6 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from (Current Donor)vladt
another wonderful romp. thank you.
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you enjoyed the story.
Review By [(Current Donor)vladt] • Date [2 Jul 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Fifteen" from zanviller
I don't normally like crack-fic style stories but this one is a keeper. No universe is safe with this story!
As barge captains on the Mississippi are fond of saying, "Keeper coming captain".
Comments from author:
I enjoyed writing the story, it was a nice the sky was the limit type of fic.
Review By [zanviller] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Not Rated
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