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Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from Traveler
Review:
A good story based on a well liked series. Simply- MORE PLEASE!
Review By [Traveler] • Date [24 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from slmncpm
Review:
congratulations and i hope you are feeling much better now. i just found this and read straight through, i really like it and hope you come back and add some more soon. thank you!
Review By [slmncpm] • Date [28 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
Good work! I hope you feel better and congratulations!
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [14 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Hmm, interesting. I am not sure how vampires fit into the hard science of the 1632 timeline but you are making a good try of it.

This has great potential please continue!
Comments from author:
Like my other series, the idea is that they have hidden all this time. Sunnydale was a blip, not the norm for when Vampires are around.
Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [30 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from Mordare
Review:
Great story. Really looking forward to more. I read like the first book in that series and forgot all about it until I read this one. Now I need to go find them & read them. Thanks.
Comments from author:
Thanks. It's one of my favourite series, but I haven't been inspired to continue it for a while.
Review By [Mordare] • Date [5 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from AshestoAshes
Review:
Damn, only a few moments ago
I noticed I'd missed the day,
but it seems so
the difference in time makes me pay.
Not that I write many reviews at all,
it's just an unlucky call
that I'd write a review today.
So ignore the occasional strange turn of word
and feel honored I make the effort!
(Not really, but you may.)
Now on to what I wanted to say.

It seems I'll have to look up this universe,
since unlike your story 'the thickest file'
understanding what happens here is often quite futile.
As a fine example of this curse:

The first half of chapter three
is quite obscure to me.
(understatement of the century)

Just like the how and the why
of the whole setting up
of an army and the mixing-up
of the future with the past
by those out of the future cast
makes me cry:

You, me, flummox.
What with temporal paradox?
Whence their luxury and facility
to be able to fight for a piece of history?
What's their reasoning?
No thought of a reckoning,
in the past by a sudden lack of material,
or in the future by blasting it all?

Thus for my mind's ease
a bit more stuffing please.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the rhyming review! It was interesting to read, and much better than my own efforts in that area. I hope you find and enjoy the books - they are great!

I keep getting inspired by other stories, and am waiting to write those down, hoping this one will grab that inspiration, so I can continue it.
Review By [AshestoAshes] • Date [14 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from Downery
Review:
Only 12 chapters and no recent updates.. i hate you. I hate you because i love the story and want to read more.

Oh well.. you won't be the last that disappears after a foray into writing. Hope your muse starts working again though.
Comments from author:
It's not closed. My muse has just been on another kick lately. I have three stories planned, then I hope to return to this one and 'the Thin Blue Line'.
Review By [Downery] • Date [5 Mar 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from Alkeni
Review:
Please update soon, this is an EPIC idea!
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [20 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "1: Some gas." from (Recent Donor)Hawklan
Review:
strange so far and no clue where you are heading, but I'll at least check out ch 2
Review By [(Recent Donor)Hawklan] • Date [14 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "12: Some comparisons." from Gideon
Review:
Looks like Xander has found some actual Greeks to prove it is not all Greek to him! Now Mike knows a little of Xander's special skills and Xander has a couple of soldiers to mold into his own image :)
Comments from author:
Ooh! I hadn't even thought of the last, just wanted a reason for him to get involved. But, an interesting idea.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [27 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "11: Some preparing." from Gideon
Review:
Good to see Xander making himself useful and introducing 400 years of ethical and legal improvements to the soldiers of the day :)
Comments from author:
What's better is, Xander has no idea what he's doing. He's just being Xander. Or at least, how I see the character.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "11: Some preparing." from eriktheviking
Review:
A great way to introduce someone to civil rights.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [10 Aug 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "10: Some guarding." from (Current Donor)DeacBlue
Review:
Not bad. There are some issues that you might want to address, though. First is that 1632 is available for download for free from baen's free library, so you can download it whenever you want.

Then you have Father Lawrence Mazzare. The way you have him appear so far, he would be a very arrogant cleric. The one that came through the grantville series might not believe Xander, but he'd likely bless all the water that Xander cared to give him.

Probably the biggest issue with Cordy and Gretchen being twins of each other is that Gretchen is a blonde, and Cordy's a brunette. Similarly, Gretchen is represented as a very strong (hot, but strong), very German girl, where Cordy has a more mediterranean (italian/spanish) visage; doesn't stop them both from looking good, but twins? No.

Anyway, I'd love to see more.
Comments from author:
I am presenting Xander's view - yes, Father Mazzare might still do so, but after this night, Xander wouldn't go to him.

And, I will get into the similarities and differences of the two girls, probably Chap 12 or 13.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [27 Jul 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "10: Some guarding." from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written intro for Xander to the realities of that time.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [22 Jul 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "10: Some guarding." from Michaelsuave
Review:
Good information, but WAY too short. The last two chapters have let the story feeling a bit stilted. Perhaps think about writing a bit more before publishing, but then again its your story so whatever keeps you writing.
Comments from author:
I have thought about writing longer bits, but it is meant to be fun, and that would involve too much work. I am also trying to update a bit more frequently, rather than waiting a long period between, just so it is longer. I am trying to organize the next bit in my head, so it will tell more of the story, have to see how it goes.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [Michaelsuave] • Date [22 Jul 11] • Not Rated
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