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Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from Grovtech
Review:
I like this middle of the road version of Hank. He's not evil and not tragic either, but he really needed that wake up call.

Grover
Review By [Grovtech] • Date [8 Oct 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from Zeviz
Review:
The vote is obviously over, but I still find the idea interesting. The difference is between a world with clearly delineated good/evil (with Hank1 being an amoral lawyer who deserved all the disappointment he got, but wasn't even that disappointed), and a shades of gray world (with Hank2 being a tragic figure and the situation looking like there is no solution that would lead to good conclusions for all good people). I am more in the mood for a type 1 story right now, but type 2 could also work, especially if you find a way to make that Hank learn his lesson and for his life to improve based on that.
Comments from author:
I've been toying with some ideas about both of them. I hope the Hank that appears will appeal to you.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Zeviz] • Date [2 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from DieselDriver
Review:
This one would be easy to dislike intensely. Good if you intend him to be a villain.

Just re-read this and had a thought, This is why 99% of lawyers give the rest a bad name.
Comments from author:
I still intend to write a story with Hank as the villain. But it won't be soon, and not in W&S. ;-)

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [7 Jul 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from DieselDriver
Review:
I can see this one committing suicide pretty easily. I don't think you want this one if you want Joyce and Simon to be together, more conflict if he's the "hated one". Or I can see this one doing something nice for them comparable to what I did when my wife decided she needed to live with someone else. I helped her move in with him. Last time I visited She and her husband through a barbeque for me and my new wife. They've been married almost since I did that. 30 some years ago. Might be interesting.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I eventually went with a middle road for Hank, who appears later in the story.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [13 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from starwolf
Review:
the second one I think portrays the Hank that should have been, but the first one show the Hank that we saw in his few appearances. I liked the WR&H mention, it tracks well. nice job, thanks
Comments from author:
Quite true. A lot of people wanted a Hank in between. I call him medium Hank, he's the one we'll see most of.

Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [starwolf] • Date [30 Sep 13] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from HappyWonKinobi
Review:
I very muchly prefer the second one. I mean, he was an idiot, but at least he realizes it. And yes, though I do have a big soft spot for "better" characters, if you know what I mean, but hey, sometimes it takes losing everything amazing in your life to realize just how much you had to lose. Oh, um, if you wouldn't mind it, would you read a story or two of mine that I have written to it's current location? And I'm directing my question to other readers who read my review as well, because, as my sister said, at least one story I have up so far is, and I quote, "Better than stuff that people buy off the shelves." [C'mon HappyWonKinobi, don't turn this into a commercial.] Anyway, I have to go. I'm school and I should be doing work instead of reading an awesome story.
Comments from author:
So noted. I'll see what I can do with reagrds to the stories, but I'm only very tengentially aware of the existence of the crosses you use. (And I almost never read anything Superheor/Buffy)

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [HappyWonKinobi] • Date [10 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from (Recent Donor)tchizek
Review:
Wonderful story! It makes Hank more real than other AUs that I have read, gives more insight into his character. It will be interesting to see if the mainline story has more Hank in it.
Comments from author:
Thank you, yes, it does.

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Review By [(Recent Donor)tchizek] • Date [10 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from BrownFinderth
Review:
I do believe I prefer this version of part 3, if this is all we'll see of Hank!
Comments from author:
There will be more Hank. I hope you like him there too.
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [7 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from bradsan
Review:
love it, but did Hank forgot Buffy's name and that she still out there somewhere or was Dawn his little princes and Buffy well he had another daughter kind of child. I really dislike parents who only have eyes for one child and forget they got some more children running around.

again good writing.
Comments from author:
No, he loves them both equally. But he feels guiltier towards Buffy, so tries to make up harder to her.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [bradsan] • Date [3 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from RebeccaAshling
Review:
My opinion is now moot because you went with option #2 in "Lonely Souls". I think that was the better option. Hank as utter bastard isn't particularly interesting; all too many sleazy lawyers abound in fiction. But Hank as a workaholic idiot who realises his mistake is much more nuanced and has better story potential. A nice story.
Comments from author:
Actually this is medium Hank, he won by a landslide. Still a lot better than #1. We shall see where Hank ends up. Glad you liked it and thanks for reviewing
Review By [RebeccaAshling] • Date [17 Jan 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from Meneldur
Review:
Nice. Nothing too exciting, but good background. I'm for a balanced approach, combining the two fo them. The first makes him too inhuman, the second makes him too sympathetic. Again, kudos on inserting the sense of reality into it.
Comments from author:
Medium Hank, check. He''s front runner by a huge margin. Thanks and thanks for reviewing
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Hrm, this gives pause. While i extremely dislike Hank, and find that the first chapter was more like the Hank i'm used to, the second chapter's Hank has such potential. I know you try to bring out the best in everybody in this series, so I don't know what to tell you about which one to go with. Probably the first tho, i loves seein' my Hank taken down a peg... ;-)
Comments from author:
Evil Hank, now that has been a while. Medium Hank is still leading by a considerable margin though.

Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [12 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from AllenPitt
Review:
Somewhere between the two would be better. The thing is, 'evil Hank' is mostly extrapolation as he just stopped appearing in the series, with much later comment about 'secretary/in Spain' stuff. S7 had him not-calling Dawn....
But in S2 in that first ep he was concerned over Buffy, realized something was wrong, and cared enough to mention it to Joyce. So... Something Happened. Don't know what. It's really hard to come up with a good reason. I always fan-wanked it that he worked for W&H, not the LA branch and there was something going on with that...
Or, that the Dawn-spell only covered Sunnydale & he didn't know he had a 2nd daughter...?
Comments from author:
In between, or medium done Hank is by far the front runner. We may save him yet...

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [7 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from wert
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I would recomend a combination of the two versions.
The first one doesn't seem verry realistic and the second one doesn't really fit into the main story. The first one actually made me think that someone messed with his mind. With the second version he would have contacted his daugters st some time. (I have read lonely souls up to ch. 48 and nothing of the sort happened) The second version might have even commited suicide in the meantime, since I doubt that Simon and Joice never made it into the Papers after that event. Some Reporters would have followed up on that date.
Comments from author:
Medium Hank is the most popular option so far, yes. Several reporters have tried to follow up on the matter. All have been discouraged rather effectively by the nightlife. And Simon is very boring as target for Paparazzi and very dangerous as well.

Thanks for reviewing
Review By [wert] • Date [2 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A variation on a theme" from Runewolf
Review:
First of all, I just wanted to compliment and thank you for the series so far. I just finished reading up to here over the past few days, and it's been wonderful. It made a BAD week much less bleak. I'm hooked.

For this story, I found the second Hank immensely more gripping than the first. Bad Hank has been done alot in fanfic. Soft (doubting) Hank hasn't. And given his self-doubt, I can still see him pulling back from his family as in the series. Simon is doing better than he ever did. If he truly loves them, then part of him might feel that in withdrawing, he allows Simon to truly become their father. It might not be right, but he could think that way.

It gives the relationship dynamics more depth. You've got lot of parents as assholes with Willows and Xanders parents. Maybe having one who screwed up, while being there, would add a new dimension. In many divorces, and in many families, you do get good people who make bad parents.

That said, the first section was also well-written. While it didn't grab me like the second one, it was still well done. But the second one almost made me want to cry, which is an emotional depth that is VERY rare in fanfiction. Frankly, few published pieces hit me that hard. So in my humble opinion, screw canon, make Hank tragic.
Comments from author:
Thnak you for the compliment, I appreciate them very much. Hard Hank is not going to make it, he's been voted down in favour of medium Hank verging towards tragic, so you get your wish. Cecilia, though not an entirely bad parent, was not the best in the world, witness her treatment of Joyce.

Could you give me your opinion of The Devil of Sunnydale elementary as well? Of the shorts, so far it is my own favourite.

Thanks for reviewing, Vid
Review By [Runewolf] • Date [14 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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