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Review of chapter "The Verdict" from TTrunks
Review:
Honestly, I've always had mixed feelings about Buffy season 7. My biggest wonder is why no one suggests guns. Bringers have been shown to be mostly human. I mean the town was abandoned. I honestly wonder how effective the bringers would have been if field watchers carried a basic gun. I'm also interested to see how these characters would take the mutiny after the vineyard attack, and what happened afterwards. That's another one of those things I have mixed feelings about.
Review By [TTrunks] • Date [22 May 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from Selonianth
Review:
While I don't have any personal experience with the military, despite several attempts, I can say that the situation seems to me to require an assault AND a stealth-based element. Allowing Faith to lead Spike and as many as ten or so potentials in a frontal assault while Buffy snuck in to attempt to locate the item in question. The same arguments you already made can be made here as well, no one even suggested anything along these lines. Such a plan might have a higher chance of success of, if not destroying the Bringer force, at least acquiring the target. There have been many uses of such distractionary tactics in the past both in military battles as well as something as simple as sleight of hand magic.
Comments from author:
Thank you for your review. What you pointed out is part of what I was trying to show with the story. No one came up with any alternative other than to not do it and that strategy had already shown that it didn't work as the potentials were being picked off or fell to psychological warefare. I also applaud you for pointing out a potential alternate plan that could have been proposed.
Review By [Selonianth] • Date [30 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from Fayari
Review:
You forgot to factor in that Buffy deliberately led a whole bunch of POTENTIALS, as in normal teenage girls with no experience and little training, in that first attack without any proper strategy besides full-frontal attack, with weapons that had already proved ineffective against a slew of super-vampires and an unknown enemy, but one that could still apparently control the aforementioned super-vampires. She did this despite the very large likelihood of it being a trap (of which she has a consistent record of springing). She also disregarded the input of the vastly wiser and more logical Giles, who usually planned most of their coordinated skirmishes in the past. My own military experience dictates that it doesn't matter if she was trying to reassert her authority or not. A military operation is no place to be stroking one's own ego. The vineyard attack was a badly planned op that ended with two teenage girls dead, dozens more wounded, and one man missing an eye for the rest of his life.

Then she made it worse by demanding a second attack based on a hunch (which only turned out to be correct due to Deus Ex Machina), with most of her troops not fully recovered and seriously demoralized. With the potentials understandably questioning her authority and planning skills, Buffy lashes out and makes it all about her and Spike, saying how she did all the work and that Spike was the only one who supported her. As if the potentials didn't JUST follow her to the vineyard for the first attack, and Xander didn't JUST lose his eye during her op.
Review By [Fayari] • Date [15 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from Alkeni
Review:
I think you were FAR to generous to Buffy the terrible General with this.

Disagreeing with your conclusions does not make someone non-objective. I LIKE Buffy, but all emperical evidence shows she is possibly the worst leader in the world.

Anyway, an enjoyable fic though.
Comments from author:
Your opinion is noted though I conjecture that you're being FAR too harsh on her leadership skills. I have personally seen worse leadership capability in action. Plus there are several military history books that would point out some who made worse decisions using even much better intelligence. Plus, she did not make this decision in a vacuum. Her support team failed in their duties as well.

Glad you enjoyed the fic. Hope you like some of my others better.
Review By [Alkeni] • Date [25 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "After Action Report - Just the facts" from Oxnate
Review:
This is great. Hope to see more stories like this someday.
Review By [Oxnate] • Date [22 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "After Action Report - Just the facts" from incubuschained
Review:
One area I disagree with is the officers assessment of Xander. Even early in season 4 the writers go well out of their way to show that his Army training has faded to nill. Riley would have noticed this easily. Therefore most of the officers reactions to Xander (other than his speech giving talent) should not have been colored by the Halloween incident. Other than that I like the story you've written here.
Review By [incubuschained] • Date [4 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from Gideon
Review:
Good work on trying to provide an unbiased review. I'm not sure how much weight Buffy would give to it as she doesn't know any of the people involved but it was interesting to read.
There is one possible spelling mistake in " A boost to moral" I would spell it morale.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from (Current Donor)vladt
Review:
very fine read, thank you.
Review By [(Current Donor)vladt] • Date [27 Jun 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
This was good.

There's always been emmotion in the whole business of the Vineyard and the subsequent kicking-out of Buffy.

As Mustaine snarled out in "Sweating Bullets"; "Hindsight is always 20/20, but looking back, it's still a bit fuzzy."

An independent AAR was called for.

Thanks for providing it.
Comments from author:
You're welcome.
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [26 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from Salric
Review:
Interesting. I like the format, and agree with the conclusions, but you've got a little bit of grammatical tightening-up to do. I'd be very interested to read AARs for other scenes in Buffy and other series. Heck, I think it'd be kinda fun to do episode-by-episode (or season-by-season) evaluations over the course of the entire show.
Comments from author:
At the moment, I have been focusing on Season 7 since that is where a lot of Buffy bashing has occurred in stories I've read here. Now, I don't think Buffy is perfect but then neither are any of the other characters, though many try to make them so in their stories. I hope my stories have been more even handed, not making any one character too much more or less than they were in canon. Not sure when the next installment will be out but I do intend to have others in the series.
Review By [Salric] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from (Current Donor)dogbertcarroll
Review:
Sorry, it reads like a list of excuses for her decision to me.
Review By [(Current Donor)dogbertcarroll] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from (Recent Donor)DonSample
Review:
A couple of points that I think they might have brought up:

1) A strategy of sitting around waiting for the bad guys to attack you is a losing strategy. If you want to win, you pretty much have to take the battle to the enemy

2) No matter what they did, just about the only way they were going to find out about Caleb's abilities would be when he came along and killed a few of them one day.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DonSample] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from spk
Review:
Very intriguing story. I liked your approach and the crossover characters that you chose to write. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Verdict" from naraic
Review:
Really enjoyed the new chapter. I agree with your conclusions.
Comments from author:
Thanks.
Review By [naraic] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "After Action Report - Just the facts" from SilverAndSage
Review:
Hi;

Just wanted to let you know that I enjoyed this, and look forward to reading the rest!
Review By [SilverAndSage] • Date [25 Jun 11] • Not Rated
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