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Review of chapter "Conclusion" from Gideon
Review:
OK, so it turned out not so good :( Darn magic!
I am a bit confused about something though, is the phasm really Faith's father? Did it say anything that is true, and if so how did it know? Also who was the big glowing white thing and what did it do?
Sounds like the basis for another story there :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [3 Jul 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
An interesting introduction, but...ugh!...those Unbreakable Vows.

Worst. Plot. Device. EVER.

They totally destroy the entire HP universe, and for some reason JKR never figured that out. Don't believe me? Some lovely and excellent uses for them:

A) Have all young wizards swear Unbreakable Vows to always obey all wizarding laws on their first day at Hogwarts. Then retire all the aurors - they're no longer needed - and the perfect magical dictatorship is born. Also, Voldemort cannot arise in these conditions - his vow would have stopped him.
B) If you didn't do the above, for whatever reason, Voldie himself would have no compunctions about doing it to *all* of his followers, demanding that upon getting their Dark Mark, they also swear to always obey his commands and never lie to him. Bye bye Snape as an inside man.

Sigh. Professional authors should really consult gamers when thinking up tripe like these Vows. We'd point it out to them...
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review, and as for Unbreakable Vows - good point, but, firstly, they're canon, so they can be used in fanfics, and secondly, maybe (for some reason that JR never got to telling us - maybe she ran out of books or something) there's some sort of a catch, magical backlast or something similar, that discourages wizards and witches from using them too often, if ever. But overall - again, thanks for the review.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 2" from Gideon
Review:
Wow, I think Draco actually managed to use that spell for something good! And it was Draco! I am very surprised.
Comments from author:
Yes, well, the story isn't over yet, so keep on watching.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [1 Jul 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
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