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A Slayer in Shreveport, Part Two

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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Current Donor)Listener
Review:
Told you I was off to read the next one.

Other than the extreme amount of talkiness and infodumping (a ton of telling, too little showing) that went on, and the wish-fulfillment of telling off Buffy's father, I enjoyed the story. I was fine with her being turned, although honestly I might have made it a little more difficult for Bill to get that done -- maybe stretched it out a chapter or two. I could tell you had a plan for what you wanted and where you needed to go, but that part happened a bit too fast. A story point that humongous needed more time -- and maybe to be placed closer to the end of the story (although without Buffy already being a vampire, her killing Debbie wouldn't have worked, so *shrug* it's your story; I'm just reading it).

These are just my thoughts. You may have others.
Comments from author:
Actually, I had the exact same thought about Buffy's turning. I do feel that I probably should've stretched it out a chapter or two but the truth is, the idea came to me so quickly that I kind of just went with it, haha!

Thank you for your honest reviews, I really really appreciate them! :)
Review By [(Current Donor)Listener] • Date [11 Jun 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from (Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker
Review:
yes hahahaha!
Comments from author:
;]
Review By [(Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker] • Date [31 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Avaiaal
Review:
Have enjoyed the story so far. :) looking forward to the next installment. :)
Comments from author:
Thank you! :)
Review By [Avaiaal] • Date [28 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from aidensmom
Review:
I hope theres going to be another story. This is great.
Comments from author:
I would never just leave it hanging :]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Review By [aidensmom] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Eureka
Review:
GAH!!!! You are going to do another for this series right????
I mean you can't just leave us hanging knowing that she finally told Wills and Giles that she was turned. Then saying that they are going to take down the "king" and end it. Too bad about Faith and Jason, they were pretty good together.
Comments from author:
Of course I am! :]

Thank you for reading and reviewing!
Review By [Eureka] • Date [27 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from (Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker
Review:
OMG!Can't wait for more.
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [(Recent Donor)GothTroubleMaker] • Date [5 Jan 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from AllenPitt
Review:
So... picture from high school. Probably Xander. And, he likely thinks he's doing the right thing. I can see it from his viewpoint. Vampires are bad, no exceptions. Buffy is a vampire. That really isn't her, it's just the thing that killed her. Etc etc. So he thinks he's got to kill off the demon wearing her body. After all, he trusted a vampire once in his life (Angel) and Angelus came out. Proving you can never ever trust one. Xander staked Jesse; if vampires aren't 100% evil, then he staked his best friend; I don't think he could live with that.
Anyway--this isn't Xander being 100% evil.... he thinks he's the good guy in all this, and the rest of the scoobies "just don't understand" (I'm guessing).
Mix in the Fellowship and it gets really unpleasant. Hey--is there any chance X. could set a group of slayers on Buffy, if he gave them just enough mis-information? i.e. "The Buffy we all used to respect is dead! She's a vampire now, we have to stop her, quickly!"
Comments from author:
You're pretty good hahaha

Thank you!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [30 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Ten" from BrownFinderth
Review:
Thanks for an update to this wonderful story!!!
Comments from author:
Welcome! ^__^ Thank you for reading and reviewing!!!
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [29 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Nine" from BrownFinderth
Review:
I SO want this to be continued!!! I'm hooked on this story!
Comments from author:
Working on it as we speak! :) Thank you for reading and reviewing! ^_^
Review By [BrownFinderth] • Date [20 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from loopy
Review:
Awsome chapter cant wait for the next.

I love this story and think you are an awsome auther. I have read pretty much everything you have on here apart from your twilight stories but i will get around to them.

Cant wait for the next chapter this story has me hooked

Lov loopy xx
Comments from author:
Aww thank you! That's so sweet! :)
Review By [loopy] • Date [15 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven" from Lili
Review:
wow i am so happy that you made Buffy a vampire. Being a slayer and now a vampire she will be unstoppable. I love it. I cannot wait to see what Xander and the other will do or say. I almost expect it and i hope, hope, that Buffy will kick their ass. Dawn being mad, well, what can you expect from her, she should think that she lives with a shapeshifter, what the heck. This is a candy and i think you did well with this story, and Bill......well he will discover Buffy when she is pissed off. Bravo.....Cannot wait to read more.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! :) I really appreciate it!
Review By [Lili] • Date [14 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
One other thing - I have the same complaint about True Blood that I do about the Anita Blake series. And that situation is very much manifest in this story.

The supernatural world has become publicly known. Vampires, werewolves, and witches (oh, my!) have Driver’s Licenses, Social Security #’s, normal jobs, and pay taxes, just like anyone else. So unlike when they were living unofficially in the shadows of society, they no longer have any actual authority to order their people around and mistreat them with impunity. I’ve never understood why – for no real reason at all – the weres and vamps in either True Blood or Anita Blake put up with being ordered about by their “superiors.” Their “rulers” have no actual legal authority to do so and if they’re all so gung-ho with presenting this “we’re legal citizens – and gee, look, we play by the rules, just like you!” type of image, then there’s no reason why weres and vamps should ALLOW their “leaders” actually BE their leaders.

They try to order you about? Fight them in court, call the cops, claim harassment, get restraining orders; forget freaky vampire powers, get something truly terrifying in the modern age – a good lawyer (matter of fact, go with Wolfram and Hart and get the best of both worlds!). Set up paperwork that implicates them if you should “disappear” without a trace and then bye-bye any good-citizen-legal-status for them and they can go back to being hunted. Or they actually CAN acknowledge that it’s the 21st century and that the modern world is not a feudal domain where they can automatically order their “subjects” about and treat them as they please. Pick one or the other – they can’t have it both ways.

So don't bother trying to slay Bill - just call the cops on him. He wants to be legal, deal with the consequences of that status.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [29 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Review:
This seems more than a bit...contrived. Can't say I didn't see it coming, but still. The whole "blatant railroad plot to make Buffy undead" wasn't subtle.
Comments from author:
yeah, probably because I wasn't trying to make it subtle.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [29 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from bradsan
Review:
well I'm going to stop tracking this one. I don't like Buffy being a vampire, but that's me. My adverse against Buffy being a vampire is because it's her biggest fear and you let it happen. I wish you good writing and a lot of readers but for me the fun reading this one is gone.


Doesn't mean I won't peak so now and then.
Comments from author:
that's alright. just trying out something different and not every story has a happy ending. thank you for reading anyway!
Review By [bradsan] • Date [28 Aug 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six" from AllenPitt
Review:
I have to wonder if Buffy retains any of her slayer abilities --"Dracula" in S5 strongly hinted that she would. If she does, she might not realize it yet, of course. but she might be a lot stronger than Bill expects. He has to know that she & Eric will try for revenge at some point. Must think having a lot of guards will save him.
Meanwhile when Xander gets word, he'll go berserk, and probably send a large squad to take Buffy out, because she's "evil now" or some such.
Comments from author:
We'll find out! :)

thank you for reading and reviewing!
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [28 Aug 11] • Not Rated
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