Review of chapter "Prologue" from thegirlinquestion
It seems like you might have a good idea for this story, but unfortunately the execution and writing style doesn't do it any justice. The story feels more like an ametuer summary of a story that's not very well written. I would definitely suggest a beta so that you can work through your ideas and present them in a way that would do justice to the idea.
Review By [thegirlinquestion
] • Date [14 Aug 11] • Not Rated