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Review of chapter "Preliminary Plans" from Gideon
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At least the Laura voices in their heads will be rational and impartial! It will help a lot to have a 2nd opinion that knows all their thoughts when they want it. I agrees that Laura should wait to be asked though!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [10 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Preliminary Plans" from Avantre
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Enjoying the story. Just a note that you kept alternating between using dashes and underscores for the three names (including alternating between one and the other on the same name) during that psychic conversation.

One thing to note with technology is that most of it requires a hundred other things to be already invented before you can re-create it, and knowing how to build those hundred things becomes a real stretch of the suspension-of-disbelief. If I went back to the middle ages, for example, I could build a simple hang-glider but it probably wouldn't work very well because there was no way to source Mylar/other lightweight fabrics, aluminium or other materials light enough to build it properly. Or if I knew all the steps and components to making a modern computer I'd still be out of luck if I went back two hundred years, as the factories would probably take decades of retooling to be able to make the components. Heck, if I took a current generation smartphone back to thirty years ago I wouldn't be able to build it without setting up processing machines that didn't exist back then for things like building the touchscreen.

So, what I mean by all of that is that whatever technology you choose to upgrade should, to be believable, be something that on first glance would be something simple enough that they'd know the formula/blueprint off the top of their heads, and of simple enough construction that it's believable that modern day components could be used to substitute for something that was originally designed to run off of science so advanced that it may as well be as magic to us as some of our stuff would be to people a century ago.
Comments from author:
Sorry about the names thing. I thought I got them all changed to dashes.

I am aware that making anything that doesn't have a good basis in the current time would be virtually impossible but remember, Luornu was a permanent member of the Legion's Espionage Squad and would have acquired skills at improvising needed items from readily available resources. Think "The Anarchist's Cookbook". Plus not all worlds had equal levels of technological advancement even in the 30th Century so her survival training would include cultures that were even more primitive than late 20th Century Earth. At least that's my take on things. Besides even if it is only a small improvement to cell phone technology related to how she upgrades StarTACs for Scooby use, it could still bring in a goodly sum in liscencing fees.
Review By [Avantre] • Date [5 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Preliminary Plans" from raxadian
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Well, it may take time, but I hope they eventually patch things up.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday Evening" from raxadian
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Since Buffy feels so bad, she may jump to have sex with Angel earlier than in the show.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Contemplations" from raxadian
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Well, I wonder what Willow did that made Buffy so angry.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Going Separate Ways" from raxadian
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Well, that communication device would at least save some cash on calls.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Introducing Laura Clark" from raxadian
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Okay, so they share powers and magic then.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Yes, magic is real" from raxadian
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Poor Xander, I hope those memories end fading eventually.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Search" from raxadian
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Well, her reaction is gonna be interesting.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "We've Got Problems" from raxadian
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That toon never aired around here, but at least Xander did not dress up as Gilligan...
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Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Wondering" from raxadian
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Well, I wonder what the merged girl is dreaming about.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Speculation" from raxadian
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The three will probably have shared dreams if they sleep without merging.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fix Us!" from raxadian
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Very interesting so far.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [4 Aug 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunday Evening" from Gideon
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Trust is something that is crucial to friendship so I'm not surprised that Buffy is having problems relating to Willow at present. The fact that they will know each others thoughts from now on won't make it easy to regain that trust either. Still, the sooner they start the sooner they can rebuild their friendship, and it isn't like they have any choice in the end :(
Review By [Gideon] • Date [7 Jan 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Contemplations" from bookworm
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Good to see more of this story, and indeed, some useful contemplation from everyone. Looking forward to wherever this goes!
Review By [bookworm] • Date [4 Jan 14] • Not Rated
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