Review of chapter "A change is needed" from ChloeBlack
Review:
Love it! Can't wait for more! :)
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! :)
Review By [ChloeBlack] • Date [11 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A change is needed" from efwrocks
Review:
Looking forward to the rest very much. Two things I found though.
“If you insist on leaving, I insist you left me help you. ..." I think you meant to have put let instead of left. Also,
'Let’s make my last nights in Sunnydale memorable.' I think you meant night instead of nights there.
I think you have a great story line so far, and this story has the potential to be absolutely amazing! (It already is in my opinion!)
Sincerely,
efwrocks :)
Comments from author:
Thank you! I fixed the first mistake but I did mean 'nights' for the second. They weren't leaving instantly after Faith arrived, more like a few days after. Again, thanks for pointing them out!
Review By [efwrocks] • Date [11 Aug 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A change is needed" from Toniboo
Review:
hey, this is just gona be a quick review but i wanted to let you know that i am liking this so far, i think it has great potential. the only thing that isn't as good is the over use of the comma at the start but still as i said this fic looks like its going to be really good. am looking forward to your next chap
toniboo xox
Comments from author:
When I first started writing I was told I didn't use the comma enough so I tried using it more and now it's too much haha. I'm trying to find a balance though because I did notice the large amount of commas in the first few chapters. Hopefully I'll be able to get it right in the later ones. Thank you so much for the review!
Review By [Toniboo] • Date [11 Aug 11] • Not Rated
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