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Review of chapter "New Girl in Town" from unicornzvi
Review:
I might be repeat myself since the first nine chapters were listed as read but:
I liked the setup and for the most part the character's reactions, however:
1)While keeping Xander in quarantine makes sense not letting him use the phone does not.
2)Once Xander knows they know he's not human anymore I don't see what reason he'd have to keep his story secret.
Review By [unicornzvi] • Date [15 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Jimbobob
Review:
This was a very fun story.

I hope you did end up writing that sequel. Going to check now.
Review By [Jimbobob] • Date [4 Oct 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Obsidian
Review:
awesome story. cliffhanger!! nooooooo! (throws popcorn and rocks -small ones-)
Review By [Obsidian] • Date [22 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from (Recent Donor)nerfherder
Review:
I laughed. I cried. It made me long for more. Damn Good Work.
Review By [(Recent Donor)nerfherder] • Date [8 Nov 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Rune
Review:
I was not sure if this were a nine or ten.
Finished fics get tens, others get 9 or less.
But it did not feel complete, not quite.
Still the first arc was done, so the real score is ...

9.6

And you have started the next arc so I'll add .3

9.9

Eh you get a 10 this time.

Now about the fic itself, the "men of god" in it are all to close to real.
Personally I think religion was the best thing evil ever invented.
We are supposed to live our lives by making our own choices not blindly following some priest.

Priests like the ones in the fic are going to hell.

Too bad Power Girl won't send them there.

On Xander/Karen, playing with a characters thoughts/identity like this is something not done often enough.
It makes you think, Who Am I, Really?
What is really important?

Thanks for writing and sharing.
Review By [Rune] • Date [16 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "New Girl in Town" from Dardrian
Review:
I really don't like the way that you have Xander immediately shift his pronouns. It is completely incorrect. I had to stop reading as soon as that happened, unfortunately. It looked like an interesting story.
Review By [Dardrian] • Date [9 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Identity Issues" from unicornzvi
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I liked the concept and you're a good writer so I might manage to get back to the story some day, I couldn't finish reading it because of the way you had the media respond to the confrontation with Stryker. You had him say, on camera and in front of hundreds of people that he expected them to die for his cause. That would be the big deal for everyone since that would be a"shocking revelation" which would boost ratings, and they'd get eye witnesses to talk about how Stryker was almost as dangerous as the mutants (or as dangerous or more dangerous depending on the person talking) and interview anyone who was a business contact or political ally of Stryker to attack them again boosting ratings.

There would probably be doctored footage and people claiming Stryker was mind controlled and so on but however most people viewed the issue what they'd be discussing was Stryker seemingly willing to kill hundreds of his followers to kill one mutant.
Review By [unicornzvi] • Date [26 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Alstreim
Review:
Generally I can't stand the Marvel comic book universes, but the story was so good that I kept reading despite that
Review By [Alstreim] • Date [2 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Dragonbaita
Review:
You've got Chpt14 at ff. net when can we see it here?
Comments from author:
Destination Unknown.
ff.net lacks a 'series' function. Can't link two stories together. Here, that's not an issue.
Review By [Dragonbaita] • Date [15 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Identity Issues" from jimk
Review:
Toad and Erg attack them clearly intending to severely damage or kill them. The "hero" strikes back and is now crying that she almost killed the guy who was attacking her. Just another reason why Logan is almost the only X-Man who is worth a damn.

Edit: I wasn't criticizing you for it versus venting on how Marvel portrays most of their characters. I think you did a very good job of portraying it as Marvel would most often have done in that situation. That "hero" attitude is why I come back and say Logan is one of the few X-Men actually worth a damn in my opinion. So, while I think your portrayal was completely unrealistic in both a real world sense and in the sense of Xandar's character history, I think it was an excellent portrayal of a typical Marvel or DC character.

However, to answer your question in your reply, I do think you are wrong in how most people would act when they kill someone in self defense who was trying to kill them. For the average situation if you consider that as the first time Xander has killed a human then a state of some shock would be realistic but not a breakdown. I don't really think the wound was any more horrible than a gunshot or surely a shotgun blast at close range.

Very few people are actually trying to kill the other person versus simply stopping them. How they handle it afterwards simply depends on how angsty they are and also whether they have ever been in life or death situations before. Since Xander had already been in numerous life or death fights by this time I see no reason for him to be literally crying about it. Second of all, just because he is in a girl's body doesn't mean he would act like a stereotypical little girl. Sure some degree of shock but there was absolutely nothing really wrong with what he did. I would expect him to act the same as most people who shoot a burglar or something similar. Not saying there isn't an effect but you had him having a total breakdown and acting as if he did something horribly wrong.

Anyway, my opinion on what is realistic is only my opinion and I'm only stating it here since you asked the question. Obviously portraying him that way whether I thought it was realistic or not is well within your rights and, as I said, very true to how I would have expected it to be if this were an actual Marvel comic.

Edit: Yes. She or he has already been realistically punching through heads in the danger room for quite a while by this point in your story. I think you are being grossly naive but agree that it simply a difference of opinion. My other point is that there is nothing different between that and shooting someone at close range with a shotgun. Just my opinion but I think you are thinking too much of the superpower aspect and less of the actual injury. Again, shotgun or fist, you've still blown a hole in the guy and splattered blood around. Not pleasant and surely shocking to most people but something that happens quite often when you read about someone shooting a burglar or something similar. I'm basing my opinion simply on how most people would react after shooting someone who was trying to kill them.
Comments from author:
I've said it before: unquestionably, Toad and Erg were in the wrong. Even so, Karen didn't intend to do the amount of damage that she did. Do you suppose that most human beings would react differently to accidentally putting their fist through a person's chest and coming out the other side? Just the visceral sort of horror of the thing alone would be... well, unless the character in question was either a hardened veteran or the sort of sociopath who got off on that sort of thing, I'd expect either tears or shock. Or possibly shock, then tears.

edit:
... wait. Do you really believe that freaking out because you accidentally *PUNCHED THROUGH A GUY'S CHEST*, no horror movie fakery here but honest to goodness your fist coming out the other side COVERED IN GORE, and a splatter of viscera behind him... is 'acting like a stereotypical little girl?' O_O;
Review By [jimk] • Date [12 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Calm Before..." from jimk
Review:
On the one hand the density thing for kryptonion bodies versus canon weight is a cool idea. However, shouldn't a 500lb plus body cause a lot more problems in normal life than just needing a special bed? Sure she could maybe lighten herself consciously as in a variation of her flying power but just sitting in a chair at breakfast should crush the chair and cause problems for everything in normal life?

It's a sensible idea, (in fact you're probably way too light even at 500lb), if you want to try to be all logical about things. Although, if you are going with it then it seems like it should be a hell of a problem for anyone to manage at first. Anyway, just curious if you had considered that and had a solution or simply figured it was too much hassle to write that in but did want to try out the idea in this fic?
Comments from author:
Yeah, problems abound for a 500lb plus body. I tried using Thor's weight as a guideline here, what with his having a similarly dense body. Once Karen started flying, it was less of a problem, and Xavier's is a place uniquely well suited to deal with such things, having had unusually weighty students before (though usually not in so compact a body).
Review By [jimk] • Date [11 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from DarthPayne
Review:
Well now, *that* was a surprise.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [11 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Cdog
Review:
I usually can't stand Xander as a girl fics, because the portrayal of Xander turned into a girl just... bothers me... I don't know. However, I was pleasantly surprised by what you did here. Whatever it is about this genre of stories that doesn't click with me, never popped up.

I greatly look forward to seeing what you do next with this world.
Comments from author:
As it happens, I usually can't stand Xander as a girl fics, either. A small part of my decision to write this fic in the first place was the desire to figure out if it was something inherent to the concept, or if I could do a treatment of the subject that I would enjoy reading.
Review By [Cdog] • Date [10 Oct 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from gaulty
Review:
funny end of story, byes
Review By [gaulty] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Unjoining" from Toraneko
Review:
Okay, while i did expect xander to get transferred into divine's body, i did not even come close to seeing THAT ending. good job, and i hope to see the sequel soon. keep up the good work =^.^=
Review By [Toraneko] • Date [6 Oct 11] • Not Rated
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