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Review of chapter "The Rabbit Sends in a Little Bill" from sdavidm
Review:
Really good story, and well written, right up to the spontaneous slash. I don't mind slash as long as there's a reasonable buildup, which this story is completely lacking. Xander never showed any such inclination on BTVS, and he didn't show any such inclination in your story right up to this chapter where he had a brief flash of Riddick getting rained on, and then off he jumps into bed with him. Like, where the hell did that come from? If you're going to make drastic character changes with no explanations, then you should mark your story slash and/or specify the pairing.
Review By [sdavidm] • Date [24 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from RelapseWarrior
Review:
Dude.
Dude.
Duuuude.
I just had a life changing experience. Peace be with me and shit. This is the best thing ever, in the history of things that are the best. Like, if the world was ending and I only had one thing to take with me, I'd choose this.
Plus, Preggo Xander= win!
Review By [RelapseWarrior] • Date [5 Mar 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Pig and Pepper" from MultiverseBeliever
Review:
it was a good story right up until the slash . . . . . . you could of at least followed it up with riddick as xanders dad
Review By [MultiverseBeliever] • Date [19 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Down the Rabbit Hole" from MultiverseBeliever
Review:
could i ask the about the timeline on this fic .... when abouts is it set in buffyverse?
Review By [MultiverseBeliever] • Date [19 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from starfire
Review:
O_O oh.. WOW..ITS PERFECT 'rushes to next story' you are a darn good author.. and Faith is SOOOO in trouble.
Review By [starfire] • Date [12 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Mad Tea-Party" from starfire
Review:
is.. is Xander.. pregnant? ohh my gosh I LOVE you..O_O and i SO hope they KILL Johns.. the guy is really getting under my skin..
Review By [starfire] • Date [12 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from ReiLossefalme
Review:
I have to admit I adored this story so much I stayed up FAR too late reading when I should have been sleeping. I've found that one of the biggest problems in these Pitch Black Crossover fics is that they all start at the crashing onto Hades, and essentially recap the movie with some added plot points. Likely the best thing about this is that you started way back at Butcher Bay, and had a lot of character and plot development before getting to the Hunter-Gratzner, instead of just jumping straight into Pitch Black like most other stories of this type do. That in and of itself made this story original, intriguing and interesting, especially as I haven't played the prequel games and the new content was appreciated. Also, your writing style is clean, detailed, and addicting. Your characters stay fairly "in character," and when personality changes are made they are led up to or make realistic transitions between states of mind according to what is generally understood about the character. You do not constantly shift the POV around to show what everyone is thinking at every moment, but you're characters still express themselves well when they wish, and expose themselves later after they've been hiding for a while. I also like the way you incorporate plot points from BtVS within your created Riddick realm, such as Xander's eye and the hyena mentions, but I'm not real fond of the actual shifts back to the Buffy realm within the story. They're fun to read, but they don't really seem to have a point or be going anywhere. The last piece at the end seems more like an amusing omake, rather than actually part of the story due to all the horrifying plot issues it brings up just by its existence. Unless there's to be an entire sequel written about all the consequences of the last page of the story and the attempts to get him back or put together his two lives, I just found it a disappointing and unrealistic ending to a fabulous story. Other than that, there were some minor grammatical errors that I noticed, nothing an easy read-through wouldn't catch - words missing from a sentence, switched word usage (query vs quarry) etc.

Overall, I highly recommend this fic and I'm absolutely enthralled with it! I'd happily rate it best of the PB/BtVS fics, and even best out of all the Pitch Black universe fics I have read period.
Comments from author:
Thanks so very much! I'm glad you enjoyed it!

The switches back to Buffy-verse were done mostly to set up what's coming in the future, because I am planning on a sequel that takes place back in Sunnydale, with all the Buffy characters woven through it. I hope that'll make up for the jarring nature of those switches, earlier.

I didn't realize there were any little errors left - I had a beta reader run over it, but with a story this size, it's easy to miss things, unfortunately. I'll take another run through it and see if I can fix it up myself. Thanks!
Review By [ReiLossefalme] • Date [7 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from Elissiaro
Review:
Oh my GOD this was awesome!

Gah! I can't find the words to describe how awesome this story is!

I am totally waiting a few minutes til it's next month so I can recc this.

Gah! Awesome!

Ok I'm done fangirling now. Bye.

PS. Did I tell you how much I loved this story? A lot. I love it a lot.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much!

I'm so glad you liked it... it was fun to write! :D
Review By [Elissiaro] • Date [29 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from nightslayer
Review:
holl-ey underverse! that was awsome.
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm glad you liked it!
Review By [nightslayer] • Date [22 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from Gremlin
Review:
brilliant, really enjoyed this story. I love the way you set the story out and how you played the characters. My only recommendation would be...more please :)

i hope you will do the sequel at some point, I would be facinated to find out what Riddick will do:
a) when he tracks down Xander (go on you know he will!) with an armada of ships and the kids leading the pack
b) how hot it will be when he gets his hands on Xander (really hot would be nice hehe)
c) and what happens when he gets to the hellmouth, which you could call a gate to the underverse couldnt you? hmmm

umm i dont suppose Riddick could meet Angelus? (eg)

thank you for the story,
Gremlin
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm really happy that you liked it! I had a lot of fun building the story.

There will be sequels coming - slowly, unfortunately, I seem to have too many ideas, rather than too few - and Riddick definitely WILL be meeting Angelus. :D
Review By [Gremlin] • Date [9 Feb 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from ForeverWaiting
Review:
*bounces* that was brilliant! will there be a sequel? =D
Comments from author:
There will be! Hopefully several!

I'm glad you liked it!
Review By [ForeverWaiting] • Date [14 Jan 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from Ansku
Review:
Love it :) I know absolutely nothing of these people or this universe (except for one SG-1 fic that visits that creature planet), but it's not like I've let that bother me before :) Great work!
Comments from author:
Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you liked it! :D
Review By [Ansku] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from LadySybyl
Review:
This story was incredibly well fleshed out and the characters rang perfectly true! Well done! More, please?
Comments from author:
Thank you! I'm glad it worked as well as I was hoping it would - and sequels will definitely be coming!
Review By [LadySybyl] • Date [25 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from Yodes
Review:
Would love to see a sequel to this :)
Comments from author:
Thanks! There will definitely be one coming!
Review By [Yodes] • Date [8 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Alice's Evidence" from msdarque
Review:
Wow... awesome, intriguing and surprising story!
Absolutely loved reading it. Really hope Xander didn't get stuck there, that he got back to Riddick and their children.
Congrats and kudos!
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it - I had a lot of fun with the twists! And naturally I'll have to write a sequel where he eventually gets home. :)
Review By [msdarque] • Date [4 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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