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Review of chapter "Sunset" from Bugeyedmonster
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
Review By [Bugeyedmonster] • Date [4 Sep 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sunset" from VillageOrchid
Okay this one nearly made me throw-up. Based on how you are writing the story, I guess it would be a complement. These are a little too dark for me, and I don't enjoy the violence.

EDIT: Since you were so kind to respond to both reviews, the more objective con-crit here is that we (as the readers) don't know if there is any hope. Ducky doesn't fight back or give away that the others know anything. There's no exposition about the time ship that O'Neill had, or any other characters following up on Abby's disappearance, etc. So my response was to an effective "slaughter-fest" and to say that slaughter-fest without hope of either redemption, correction, REMORSE, or punishment is "not my cup of tea."
Comments from author:
That's ok, it was fairly graphic. If I do more, the probably won't be nearly so graphic, but I wanted something that would really get at gibbs. I always imagined that if Jack was ever turned he would be like Angelus, utterly sadistic, but he is still very young as a vamp, and Dru is utteryly bonkers so he as nothing to temper him at all. Also with his backgound in black ops I would imagine he'd seen some horrible things which would come through as a vamp.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [4 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sunset" from RevDorothyL
Okay, Jack O'Neill as a psycho, sadistic, "Black Ops"-gone-bad vampire? That is SO very disturbing!

Good job.
Comments from author:
Glad you liked it. I really could only imagine Jack as an Angelus style vampire, utterly sadistic and loving every minute. due to his past in black ops etc, I couldn't imagine him as anything else. I appreciate the feedback.
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [3 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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