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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Dyri
The only thing I don't understand is how could they have expelled Harry when he had already taken his O.W.L.s? At most they could take away his wand for safekeeping until the scores arrive.
Review By [Dyri] • Date [15 Nov 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Mechconstrictor
Great story so far. I hope you write more for it.
Review By [Mechconstrictor] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from MarcusSLazarus
Interesting idea you’ve got here, if nothing else; Harry as Zod’s ‘son’ is certainly an intriguing touch, and you’ve definitely created an interesting ‘grey’ mentality for him (He’s more hostile and assertive than the canon Harry without being interested in going on mass rampages or attacking innocents; I’d call that ‘grey’).

Hermione’s knowledge of his powers certainly made sense, and I definitely look forward to seeing the long-term consequences of Voldemort having access to Harry’s abilities (Although I’m guessing that his human nature will give him SOME problems controlling or accessing all of Harry/Dar-Zod’s powers).

The expulsion created an interesting additional complication to Harry’s plans, of course, but I have a feeling that this new take on the D.A. is going to be VERY interesting to see the results of...

Keep up the great work; can’t wait for more!

(Just one query; has Clark still come to Earth, or is it only Harry?)
Comments from author:
Clark is on Earth. Harry was born in 1980, Clark arrived in 1989, do Harry will be older by a few years. They will meet up around the time of the Veritas episode.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [8 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Almadynis
Very interesting and intriguing. Looking forward to more.
Review By [Almadynis] • Date [25 Sep 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from TurfSurfer
There's just something off about this fic. The same thing that's generally off about most of the non-gritty comic-type stories. Namely, the fact that the main character is a wimp. A weenie. An angst-filled pussy.

Harry consistently makes resolutions to be tougher, more proactive, less merciful, and consistently proves himself to be an undisciplined wimp.

To illustrate, he is strong and able, yet allows himself to be the Dursley's bitch regardless. At some undisclosed rime, he resolves to change this, both his state and the world that allows it. And yet, things pretty much continue in line with canon events. I mean, how easy would it have been for him to super speed awaynonce he got the Stone? Or to knock Moony out when he goes wolf? Or to grab the rat in his attempt to escape with some super speed?

But even if all that is let slide for plot's sake, he at least started actively changing canon near the beginning of 5th year... which begs the question of why the DA even EXISTS.

And finally, upon coming to Sirius' death, which is still too late for such an obvious realization for one who wants to rule the world, he realizes that maybe gently knocking out all opponents may not, y'know,win a WAR. And after seeing that, and resolving to be strong, he pussies out in face of a petty school teacher with a grudge and a weak excuse for expulsion. I mean, he has to have HOW much clout by now, given how much shit the Ministry gave him? And yet he goes quietly into the night like a little bitch, and everyone seems to be cool with this, to the point that he gets a crappy, unsuitable, grave-robbed wand.

This story, and the characters in it, are just too damn inconsistent to be any good. Harry doesn't need to be such a goody-goody wuss when you've super-powered Voldie and left him with a huge magical knowledge and power base advantage. This story could be awesome, but it falls to so many pratfalls to just settle for mediocre.

Seriously, have Harry grow a pair and iron out some of the plot holes and inconsistencies. They're killing the story.
Comments from author:
There will be time for being a badass later. No man can rule the world alone, Harry requires a powerbase in order for his ambition to come true so he puts up with the niceties and laws until he no longer needs to follow the rules. As for the crappy wand, well you can't expect a good match if you buy an illegal wand for the first time, can you? Besides, Dar isn't ready to kill Voldemort yet. He will kill him eventually, once Voldemort has killed enough of his enemies for him while he builds his own forces up. The key to gaining power secretively is to not allow anyone to know you have it. Understand, Voldemort is not the Big Bad for Harry, he is just an obstacle and one of many, but it will during this period that Dar will build an army.
Review By [TurfSurfer] • Date [19 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Darkblood
I LOVE IT!, more please.
Review By [Darkblood] • Date [11 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from RafMereC
Pleasant twist.
I like it so far.

Review By [RafMereC] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from JoshuaRichardson
Wow, can you draw anymore parallels between Dar and Voldemort? I don't think we have seen enough.

So Harry is building a Wizarding Army, what of the Muggles he intends to rule? That is an untapped resource you have only brushed against in this chapter. Will we see more of them? What about favorite DC characters like Lex Luthor? Or eve Kal-El? Did he even make it to this Earth?
Comments from author:
All warfare is based on deception and misdirection. While Dar seems to only be recruiting wizards, there is another plan that is being carried out. Voldemort and Dar are not very similar: Voldemort is a psychopath unable to care for anyone and a sadist, Dar is more the militant 'ends justifies the means' sort who does care but also gets off on the power. More of a General Zod/Grindelwald/Alexander the Great mix.
Review By [JoshuaRichardson] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from michaelangelo
I agree with JanessaRavenwood, a little


Would work wonders and would stop the "huh" you get when the chapter jumps. Also am I the only one to think being expelled for crushing a hand is a tad much? especially when it can be fixed in ten minutes by a mediwich? not to mention Malfoy Crabbe and Goyle seemed to get away with it even though they were the belligerent party. It sort of came off as forced and nothing more than a weak excuse to get Harry away from Hogwarts.

Saying all that I really like the story, it's fun to read and funny in parts. I can't wait to see what happens next.

PS: Is this a version of the DC verse where Kal-El never made it to earth?
Comments from author:
Well, I used Snape to have Harry expelled by using the timing of the attack. The timing, not the act itself, allowed Snape to have him expelled. It gave him the leeway necessary. Kal-El made it earth in 1989 as per Smallville time-line, Lily birthed Dar on July 31st 1980 as per Potter cannon.
Review By [michaelangelo] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DarthPayne

I do hope Snape will have vengeance coming his way?
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from Rorschach
can't wait to see Dar just utterly decimate the future when he truly reveals himself
Review By [Rorschach] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Kneel before Harry. :-)

One thing, you need to put some sort of line/symbols/break between the time or scene shifts in the story. It's very jarring to go to the next paragraph and it's suddenly somewhere/somewhen else with no warning.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [7 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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