I have to chime in here and say that you have ABSOLUTELY captured the voice and tone of Burn Notice! I eagerly look forward to seeing anything else you write in that universe!
Comments from author:
Awwwww, thank you so much! I'm not sure if there'll be any more, but I'm going to be poking at it! If any more comes, it'll be posted up here. ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it!!
Review By [addictedtwotext] • Date [10 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Bravo!!! Note perfect for tone, character portrayal and layout of the scene. The use of the voice over was spot on as well. Love what you have here and glad to see that you are developing it further than the one of previously.
Quick thought. For another part to this you should have Xander and Fiona hitting it off at a bar, comparing past exploits with explosives and preferred methods of making things go boom while Michael looks on worriedly and Sam by his side digging in at how cozy the two are getting. Would be great and work well depending on where in continuity this takes place. Xander definately shares some traits with Michael that Fiona appreciates and might find alluring in him as well. Filler and fun could be Xander referring to African exploits. It could also be a way they new each other before by meeting there before Fiona had headed to Miami to help Michael.
The last angle that seems like fun/interesting would be either Maddy (Mama Westen), Barry, or Nate (Bro Westen) be either the reason or somehow involved in the reason for Buffy and Xander being in Miami and Michael trying to not only help resolve and by this help out the one in the middle, but also keep it all concealed from Sam and Fiona at the same time. Michael jumping thru verbal hoops and trying to get by with the "trust me" toothy smile would be a hoot as would their calling him on it.
Again great job and thanks for the fun read. Can't wait for more! Later.
Comments from author:
I'm really glad you enjoyed it! ^^ Thank you for the suggestion, it sounds like you've got a pretty detailed story in mind. I appreciate it, although I'm not sure how good I would be at following it. I'd love to see it if you wanted to give it a try yourself, though!! Please feel free to, it sounds awesome!
Review By [missinglink] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Glad to see more of this wonderful little universe you're creating. So, Mike knows about the kind of things that happen in the shadows' shadows, hm? Sounds like a fun time (not really) to be had in Miami with The Slayer hanging around there. Hopefully, you'll write more? Please?
Comments from author:
Hee, I'm glad you're liking it! I'm not sure if there'll be more, but I might poke at it and see. Thanks for the comment!
Review By [Ghostrider] • Date [8 Sep 11] • Not Rated