I like what you have done so far with the story and I hope you will get inspired to add more chapters to it.
::Gives the plot bunny a slice of Princess Cake::
# = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # "I am Grey. I stand between the candle and the star. We are Grey. We stand between the darkness and the light." - Delenn, Babylon 5 # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = # = #
Review By [Dragonelf] • Date [19 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Harry is acting way too meekly about this thing with his sister. What did the Dementor lop his balls off? Where is the righteous indignation at being abandoned not just by his friends from school, but also as it turns out his sister? Instead we have him being rather accepting of just about everything that happens to him. He's a teenager, not a mannequin. And based on how he's been treated throughout his life he should be pissed off at everyone, Dumbledore, the Ministry, his friends, the Lantern Corps, and most importantly for this story his sister. Unlike Sirius who has a valid excuse for being absent from Harry's life and Remus who, while not having anywhere near a valid reason but was still plagued by his disease, Forest has no excuse for basically going off to live with people that care about her while Harry is basically discarded as no more important than an ant by the Corps.
Review By [espinosaca] • Date [20 Nov 11] • Not Rated
nice start so far and I wonder where you will take this. But really a Lantern leaving a kid behind where his parents just were killed? I would throw him out of the Corps
Review By [Hawklan] • Date [23 Sep 11] • Not Rated
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