Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Gideon
Interesting idea, but this reads a bit more like an outline for a story than the story itself. If you are interested perhaps you could come back to it at some stage and rewrite it. Give the characters names and personalities. Tell the story of the demon attack instead of just saying that it happened. I guess this is harder with characters that you must create from nothing than it is with the Buffy characters we all know, but it is worth it.
Comments from author:
I probably will not this is part of a large whole, where i will be using pieces like this to explain a certain world. you have to remember that when it comes from the characters it is what they believe not necessarily what actually happened and since this is in the Who verse history can be rewritten.
Review By [Gideon
] • Date [10 Oct 11] • Rating [6 out of 10]