Love this story and can't wait to read more, please update

My muse is working on other things at the moment. But please let me know if you like the rest of my stories as well.

There were a lot of good bits and some that I really didn't like. Chipped Angelus was amusing and not something I've seen before, as was respect for Dalton and compassion for Ford. Stakes to the head came out of nowhere and changing ring transporters to work like Star Trek ones with coordinates was lazy writing. As for Zats I can understand changing what even the show writers wished they could, but I'm not sure it's a science issue so much as a plot convenience as transporters and stargates are equally unlikely. You were very good at pointing out references and nods to cannon so it may have been an oversight on your part that the Tok'ra don't use subspace communicators at all. I'm not sure that makes sense for a galactic espionage/sabotage network but that is what they said.
Well I hope you found something helpful in this.
FG

EDIT> This is in response to your comment on this review, I can agree with 3 out of 4 points no problem, Vampires have so many differing accounts from old folklore to Lestat to Twilight, you can pretty much do anything with them, plus stakes to the brain is new and interesting. Tok'ra subspace tech again makes sense and I'd forgotten they had it in later episodes despite them saying that having it proved Cordesh was a traitor in "The Tok'ra, Part 2". However Ring Transporters working like asgard transporters is a Bugbear of mine sorry if this seems like a rabid geek rant but they are a more limited and interesting version of the transporter tech because they need a second platform. In the example you cite they use an internal set and then emerge from another set mounted outside the ship. More info can be found here Http://stargate.wikia.com/wiki/Transportation_rings if you were interested. Finally thank you for your praise of my challenge it's just something i'd like to see more of. Hopefully one day you'll have all the time you'd want to write.

Let me address some of these issues one at a time.

Stakes to the head - This is my own idea. Short explanation: Stakes to the heart work and beheadings work. Why do they both work? There's some sort of magic between the head and the heart that animates vampires. And if wood to the heart stops the magic, I would logically assume that wood to the brain would do so too.

Ring transporters - Ring transporters do not have to have a landing platform to work. SG-1 landed on an asteroid using a ring transporter. The coordinates are just a way of explaining how they know where to send you without a ring platform.

Zats - lazy writing from SG-1. Just always bugged me.

Tok'ra subspace communicators - They had tracking devices that communicated back to the Tok'ra base via a subspace network and they had communication devices. It's not canon, but it's a reasonable extension of canon.


And for you, The A Good Goa'uld Challenge. - I love the idea and I would love to write this if only I had time.


EDIT: Yes, the rings from the bottom of the ship are how I intended them to work in and around Sunnydale. I must not have made that clear enough. When the muse comes back to this one, I'll have to make that clearer.

Definitely "Xander out of a box" and I was getting a bit worried when you started wasting baddies left and right--usually a bad sign when authors take out evildoers so fast. However, your compelling story and solid (and funny) dialogue kept me reading. I'm impressed with how well you've balanced Xander and Jolinar, particularly the moderating effect of each on the other's personality, and kept this from turning into a generic SuperXander! story. I was pleasantly surprised by your spin on Ford and Walsh; I've never seen fics where they weren't spun as the bad guys. I hope you find your muse to finish this one off some time.

Well, I consider this to be my first 'real' fic so I was still pretty new at fanfiction. And I wasn't, and somewhat still not, a fan of reusing bad guys. If your heros can't kill the bad guys, they're not going to last very long.

I'm glad you liked Ford and Walsh. I already commented on Walsh in your other review, so Ford: I really don't have much to base Ford on. But I didn't see him as Irredeemable the way others do. Nor did I actually see him as Evil. I saw him as desperate. And once his last bid for life failed, he would likely be remorseful. And after a second chance at life and to make up for the ass he'd been, would likely make him extremely loyal.

And my muse is back. But I whipped her pretty hard last time we worked on this one so she's a little shy to come back here.

In the meantime, enjoy the rest of her work and keep reviewing!

Just re-read this and it was still as fun as the first time through, I hope that your muse comes back before too long!

Some of my favorite things this time are definitely Xander and Jolinar's stance on making the Stargate public before they start handing out tech advances. It's a strong position to take and it's smart to want the SGC out in public eye sooner so backlash against the Air Force is as minimized as possible.

Ford joining the group is still great. I liked him in these last few chapters especially and I hope he picks up training to be the groups medic in the future so the group doesn't have to rely on just Xander and the healing device every time.

Seeing Kendra back in Jamaica was nice, too. If I remember right, this witch-doctor manages to curse her in canon, right? Or maybe just one of the semi-canon books, I remember she was cursed by somebody and if Drusilla hadn't killed her she would have died anyways... Still, it was nice to see her getting some support and I wouldn't mind having her show up again from time to time.

Finally, I'm not sure if this was mentioned in a review or not, but, how is it that Angelus is actually sticking around still? In s1 of Angel he's drugged by an actress he's guarding and that temporarily brings Angelus out, but as soon as the drug wore off, he was back to normal. So I'm not sure how this is working, unless the drugs were stupidly strong or something.

Thank you. I certainly haven't forgotten about this. My muse is even willing to write a few paragraphs here and there, but I promised myself I would never do a 1,000 word update on a 100k story.

To compete on a galactic level, you have to have a united world. And humans are usually able to unite against a common enemy.

I'm surprised more people don't do something with Ford. Most stories where he isn't ignored, simply rehash canon word for word.

That was a semi-canon book. I just figured a witch-doctor would be a likely enemy in Jamaica. Still not sure what I'm going to do with Faith though.

Angelus is still around because Buffy canon states that "One moment of true happiness, of contentment, one moment where the soul that we restored no longer plagues his thoughts, and that soul is taken from him." The writers of AtS ignored that because it was easier to wrap up their story without making a big deal of putting his soul back in. I'm taking the idea from Angel canon and applying the Buffy canon rules. MUCH more entertaining, don't you think?

Can't wait to read the sequel! Gave it a 9/10 because Willow/Xander is my least favorite pairing

Sequel? This one isn't even over yet. :-)

A/N: 22 cups of soda. 12 oz small pop = a little over 2 gallons of pop. Around 3,000 calories depending on the kind of pop.


Good thing Xander had a Tokra to filter things out... That much liquid could drown an average teenager by thinning thier blood to the point that it cannot carry sufficient oxygen.

Any doubts, look up the radio contest in San Fran about 10 years +/- ago where the contestants were to drink 'gallons' of water without peeing. Last one to pee wins... The 'winner' collapsed and later died. (Same thing happened to a young boy in Alamance County NC about 5 years earlier when his step-father punished him by making him drink a gallon of water for peeing in his pants)

IT depends on how dehydrated you are. After a long bike ride, I drank an entire gallon of water without peeing. I had to drink another gallon before I was finally back to normal. It is possible.

Best BTVS Stargate story I've read in a while.

Why Thank You.

I just found this today and am enjoying it immensely. I am somewhat surprised by what seems to be sexual bias. I hope it is only your interpretation of Xander's reaction, although I would think having Jolinar in his mind would get him to thinking about the close mindedness some of his notions.

I can't be sure because it has been a while since the muse visited this story, but yes, I think that I had Xander react slightly badly to the idea of female memories. It certainly wasn't my intention to keep him that way, but he is a high school boy and very worried about his sexuality. Rewatch the beginning of the Halloween episode if you don't believe me. (Before the costumes)

I'm rereading this story and thought I'd drop a few more thoughts on it. Hopefully I haven't reviewed chapter 5 before (if I have I'll look for another to drop this on).

One thought that jumped out on me was that you mentioned at the top of this chapter that the Zat would not work as in cannon. I can understand your argument if this was a straight AU for SG1. However... you've gone and mixed the dern thing with Buffy. Now, if you are thinking of rewriting this story in the future, or if you are just burnt out and pick it up again later, you should really reconsider this thinking. All you have to do is throw in the great deus ex machina "MAGIC!" and Presto-> no more worry about the Laws of Conservation of Energy.

You can even go further into the "Science" behind it and state that it's a property of Naquadah. Just have one of your characters question this, have Sam counter that they haven't figured it out yet, then have a Scoobie say that it must be that the properties of naquadah make it interact with the forces of magic. Watch Sam's jaw hit the floor, think about every object that uses naquadah as a power source, see her add the term magic into an equation or circuit in her thought bubble, and have her scream out "B-But that means we'll Never be able to calculate it's impact on a circuit or system!!! It'll ALL have to be by trial and error!!!". Willow can then say "Not necessarily, the circuits could be laid out in Runic patterns that would direct how the magic was expressed. Then it's just a matter of picking one language for the spell casting so that you only invoke specific forces that don't conflict..."...

Lots of room for fun and games teasing your scientists with this process. All you have to do is think of the magic forces as similar to inductance in an electric circuit. It just really really matters How things are laid out in the device as much as what components are used in it. Just think. Give Willow a scan of the Tollan arm bands, and she just might be able to tell you how they work. :) "It's just like this spell I learned, see, the incantation is written in a three dimensional matrix aligned so that when the button is pressed down it completes the spell and puts the wearer out of phase with normal matter..." hehehe so much fun!

Anyway, love your work. I look forward to any new chapters you write for us readers.

-------Edit to reply to your reply:

Can you imagine Rodney's reaction! "NO! Absolutely Not! There is absolutely NO WAY you can convince me that Magic, some unseen force that no one can point to, is real! Absolutely not!"

Willow turns to Sam, "Now?" and Sam replies "Now. I think he'll get the point." as she smirks thinking of what will happen.

Willow turns back to Rodney and starts incanting, and suddenly in place of Rodney on the floor is a common brown rat. "Quick now, catch him so he doesn't run out the door!" she cries. Thinking of all the trouble it would be to find him before turning him back.

LOL. You are EVIL!

There is magic in the SG-1 verse. The zats, those guys who could transform into birds, there are plenty of other examples you could point to. I'm hoping to get the Scoobies to the mountain in time to see the shapeshifting people. "See!! Magic!"

And I'm only burnt out on this one. Muse has given me a few chapters here and there since then. But I want to make sure any update I do is worth it for people to re-read 100k words.

a good that the NID wasn't to much of a trouble...yet :)

Yet being the operative word.

good Sam is at least willing to listen to Kendra's ideas.
ohaa not good with the Ted explosion.
and now there is the NID to muck things up.....not good ....

Yes, very not good with the Ted explosion. That's going to ripple for a while.

Just finished re-reading this, and it`s as great as I remember, hoping yyou update soon!

Thank you. I do have more for this, but want the eventual update to be worth people re-reading the story.

this is a great story and I have been wondering if you will continue it?

My muse is giving me dibs and dabs of this every so often. I'll update once I have enough to make it worthwhile (no 1,000 word update) or if I get on a roll again.

Good enough to shotgun, and one of the five best BtVS/SG crossovers I've yet run across. Kudos galore.

I'd review, instead of just random praise, maybe later, when I haven't a headache from staying up too long and reading so much in a single shot.

Seriously though, bathroom brakes and water. Otherwise this kept my ass glued to my seat and my eyes to the screen.

Thank you. High praise indeed since I too love that type of story.

Thank you.

Definitely hoping you will be writing more in the future. Thank you for your efforts!

I do have more of this. Waiting for Muse to look this way again.