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Review of chapter "among the ruins" from RockyWilliams
Neat idea, but you have a lot of spelling errors, and have left out whole words here and there. Also, things are very rushed. I'd advise you to take some time, describe things a bit, describe the characters actions a bit more.
Review By [RockyWilliams] • Date [16 Nov 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "dinner" from Netchka
More please! Love the series so far.
Comments from author:
don't hate me for this new chapter, just wait for the sequel.
Review By [Netchka] • Date [14 Nov 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "dinner" from Gideon
Great chapter. That is one way to prove themselves to the SGC, be very helpful when they meet! I wonder if Adria knows how her powers will develop and I wonder if she can fly yet?
If this is the episode where O'Neil finds the Ancient base then I think it was in the Antartic not the Artic. And didn't he only speak in Ancient by this stage because there wasn't enough room in his brain for English anymore?
I notice you still have some small errors. Perhaps another read through before you upload, or a beta reader could help with that.
Comments from author:
Hey Gideon. Thanks for the review. I will fix the location error, and Adria can't fly yet. I'm going to have it that Kryptonians need to be exposed to sunlight for a while before they can get their full powers, their are shortcuts but that would be telling:)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [10 Oct 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Smallville" from DarthPayne
This series has been pretty interesting so far.

What about Kara though?
Comments from author:
thanks. I'm not sure about Kara, originally Adria was going to be Kara when I realized that i don't know her character very well. but i might very well use her in the future.
Review By [DarthPayne] • Date [10 Oct 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "among the ruins" from Gideon
I noticed a few missing words here and there but the formatting is good.
I'm glad that the Kryptonians were experts at preserving food too, or there would be nothing left to eat after 300 years :) I'm surprised Hunter is so willing to leave his old life behind. Did he have parents or other family as well as his friends? In any case he will be welcomed back with open arms if he brings a Kryptonian warship :) And once Adria begins showing the effects of the yellow sun that will be even more useful!
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review.
I kind of forgot about parents, in my first draft, but i liked were it went so i didn;t change it. I will figure out a good reason for why he doesn't care to return home, for the time being just figure he has changed so much over the years he doesn't think he can go home.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [9 Oct 11] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "among the ruins" from Valandar
Umm, all your formatting was lost. There's no paragraph structure here, which makes it remarkably hard to read.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the heads up.
The formatting should be fixed now.
Review By [Valandar] • Date [9 Oct 11] • Not Rated
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