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Review of chapter "Chapter Three" from DragonBard
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Just a thought, but could have grabbed a human Anya from a world where the Scoobies won, but died, and Anya survived. Then give her the option of being reunited with Xander, but having to share him.

Maybe do some occasional crossovers, where Gabrielle and Rose go to say Mystic Dawn, Luck of the Draw, or one of your other projects when the main part is done.
Review By [DragonBard] • Date [20 Sep 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from deathgeonous
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Great fun and slightly weird. Thanks for writing this, bye for now.
Comments from author:
It's a bit weird but I thought it was interesting to write.
Review By [deathgeonous] • Date [8 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Balder
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Beautiful story! :)
Twisted and perverted but beautiful all the same!
Comments from author:
Thanks, I enjoyed writing it.
Review By [Balder] • Date [19 Nov 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Thirty" from MMWillow
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can I go to that school
Comments from author:
Sadly no, would be nice though wouldn't it? Nice dress code and excellent teachers.
Review By [MMWillow] • Date [8 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Twenty One" from MMWillow
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Well I followed this story from Fanfiction and I am so glad I did! I think so far this is almost my favorite part of the series. It's great seeing all the might have beens if the hands of fate and played things differently! Seeing them all younger and playing things differently is great! So many sweet couples and Jenny the house elf beyond priceless and I probably would have spanked her a little Giles has a great deal of restraint, lol.

Thanks so much for leading my to this site! I might even start posting my crossover Buffy story here as well!
Comments from author:
I'm glad that you're enjoying the stories.

I think it's interesting to see how things could have played out differently. A little change here or there and things would have been vastly different. If Faith hadn't stabbed the assistant mayor, or if Faith hadn't freaked... Any number of things could have changed things.

I thought Jenny the house elf was funny and sweet. Giles was being a gentleman by trying to be good...

Hopefully you can find a number of stories that you enjoy here.
Review By [MMWillow] • Date [7 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Rune
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Whole story review.

I could tell when you sent Lilith to Moria where she met Albus and Ariana that was a cross with your other fic "A Wand, Werewolf, and Demon Girl". Also the end had a cross I think with that "Tales from the Barkeep", did I get the titles right?

Could you as some point list the fics you crossed with? I'm thinking they would be nice to read. I have not seen any good Harry Potter as a girl that did not also pair the poor lass up with Draco. If you crossed with a real fic there I'd like to read one where Draco is the "Boy who lived".

Well done story, even if you did roast a few billion characters.

Thanks.
Comments from author:
The fic A Wand, werewolf and a demon girl is part of the series so it's more looking back than a cross. I based the barkeep Xander on the tales of the barkeep or at least the idea. That one was a bit of a loose crossover.

Other than the vague idea of a bar tending Xander I hadn't really crossed with other fanfic author's stuff for this series.

I woke a back story rather than borrowed from any particular fanfic for the girl Harry and the boy that lived being Draco. As for pairing my female Harry with Draco... no thank you. I'm not sure who I'll stick Draco with, but it is not going to be Heather (girl Harry). I'm not sure I've ever read a Harry as a girl fic that I actually completely like. I've seen a couple people attempt it but not that often.

As for roasting characters, it happens. Sometimes we cheer and sometimes we cry over it, and sometimes it's mere back story... Hopefully it raised a touch of emotion one way or another. :)

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Rune] • Date [16 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Swordchucks
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Despite the ending being a bit anti-climatic, I liked this story very much. The cast got a little too large at times, but you did a pretty good job of balancing it all. There were lots of creative ideas, plenty of twists, and even more depravity to enjoy.

I'm looking forward to the next story in the series, if you decide to write one.
Comments from author:
I'm going to write one it's just a matter of finishing plotting the general arc out for it before I start it.
Review By [Swordchucks] • Date [3 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Drake
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Nice touch with the bar. Before the author notes I thought you were back on the world where Xander was a stripper, but this is even better. Great story.

I'm a bit surprised at Cordelia; she put such a value on her cherry earlier; that she'd now give it on stage seems off.

Limiting Hermione's power is long overdue I would say. Even at 1% strength she could kill a human easily. I'm honestly surprised that the amount of damage she's done hasn't come up in the conversation. I mean, given the strength she'd rip lots of things apart by bumping into them or accidentally touching them. A mention of the blessings of repair spells would fit that scene.

When you bring up the eyepatch it would be interesting to know what the see through illusions enchantment allowed him to see. If anything. I somehow can't see them bothering with illusions, on the other hand you brought it up and that has me wondering.

So Sublime is back... and once again you manage to keep her and her group ambiguous. I'd say more friend than foe, but who knows...

It was a great read. Thanks so much for sharing the story. I hope you have another project ready; I for one am very interested how things continue in the HP world. Though I guess there are endless tales to tell.
Comments from author:
I figured a Xander run bar was neat.

Cordelia... I had assumed that this wasn't her first time and that her first time was special. This was a slightly intoxicated challenge after she had her first. My bad if it seemed like she lost her cherry on stage.

You're probably right I should have mentioned the repair charm a bit more and the tired Kryptonian babysitter that's been doing her best to keep her from smashing things. The best they can hope is sort of a stop gap measure as they try to keep her strength under control until she gets it under control.

Mostly it was designed to allow him to both see through illusions, ie be the one that sees and to hide himself slightly. :) As for what he saw, well a good barkeep keeps the patron's secrets.

More friend then foe but she's still sort of a loose canon.

I am working on the next projects plotting and such. It will likely be HP but I wanted to keep this story semi contained to the summery and focus. Thanks for the review and the ideas.
Review By [Drake] • Date [1 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Four" from Drake
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British and American enough... that's a though order, seeing how divided even Britain is. On the one hand I want some details on how it's handled, on the other it's such a... political... topic that any detail will outrage someone. Probably best to leave it as is.

Gabrielle and Marie... I dimly remember that name. Is that Rogue from the X-man? Were they involved before? The statement that she wants to have kids with her seems to come out of nowhere. Or maybe the background was lost in time. Maybe it's time for a reread of the series.

Trista... wasn't she kicked out by her family? So why didn't they take her along when they left the world?

Sending alt Harry to Hogwarts? From what I understand they have an academy far better than Hogwarts, teaching more magic, with a better learning environment. So why bother with Hogwarts? And if it's to stop Voldemort, would they really even think about sending kids that young, no matter how well trained? It seems to go against everything they stand for.
On second thought, was the Academy in this story or the other? I remember they hired Harry Dresden to teach, but the stories are so similar in some regards that it's hard to keep them apart. This one had him accidentally summon Rose, didn't it? So I guess they may not have an academy set up yet... although they have to have some education system, right?

It's interesting to see Leo become the big man, the one staying behind and giving orders. This of course raises the question when/if his siblings and parents will follow.

Attacking the aliens... I can accept that their existing FTL tech doesn't work (though I'd imagine the Asgard would probably tackle that problem before too long), but what about porting directly to their world from another reality? The ultimate deep-strike technology.

Overall a nice chapter. It felt a bit disjointed, but given the time jumps and massive number of characters that is inevitable. I'm looking forward to see where the story goes next. Thanks for sharing.
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That's sort of the problem they're divided and anything I put in would be political.

Marie is Lexie and Rogue's daughter. So no she didn't come out of nowhere just the space station.

I had assumed that Trista still had a reason to go back now and then.

I think they would be amused by sending the children to Hogwarts for a year just to mess with people. Mostly though they have the Moria school as well as a school that was based on the space station before they stopped using time dilation fields. So they would have scaled it back a touch. But yeah they have better schools. So unless they are going to try to pull Hogwarts forward into the 20th century then there isn't much point for them going other than to meet people and cause mayhem. And well tradition but yeah...

The Academy was in Mystic Dawn. They were really big on education and making sure that everyone was prepared.

Leo's been sliding into a command roll for a while. As for when or if his siblings will take up command roles that really depends on personality.

The aliens are shielded from scrying. Until they actually sneak a ship there with something like a booster they're out of luck with jumping in from another reality and say dropping a bunch of troops in or just reaching out and stealing aliens to drain until they get bored. So yeah there is a reason they aren't just jumping there.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Drake] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Three" from Drake
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Valhalla? So does that mean that the Asgard are there in force (or even entirety)? In any case it promises some interesting interactions in the future.

Stopping time on Earth... you know, it would be much easier if they simply let time progress faster on their ship - much smaller volume that needs to be affected. You'd need separate distortions for each construction site, but even that'd be easier than stopping time on Earth - you need to take care of so many facets to keep Earth in orbit, with the right side facing the sun.... just accelerating time in small spots needed seems easier.

Mad scientists. lol.
I guess he will fit right in.

The space stations sounds like a decent idea, though I'm not certain about the logistics you're planning. Do you want every non-criminal beamed there to raise children and then, once the population recovered, resettle the children back to Earth? I'm a bit lost there. I can't see either country accepting foreigners, even if cloned/engineered with genetic material from their country... a country is more about common culture and schooling than genetics... and if they have no ties to the existing population (especially emotional ties - both ways), it's just asking for trouble, more so than releasing all criminals (after all only a few of them are insane and destructive beyond reason).

Well, that wasn't much for this chapter, but it was a needed filler. It does a decent job of showing what happens. So thumbs up.

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Middle Earth... I wonder if there even is a solar system as we understand it. I think it would be more interesting if there wasn't. Of course the god that led the song to create the world may want to talk to them by now... I think he unlike the choir didn't enter the world? It's been too long since I read the Simarillon to remember the details.

The survivors... percentages mean the overall average. There will be places where nobody in a group (of several hundreds or so) survived, and there will be places where nobody in a group died. So my idea was that the Rosenberg's would be the only survivors to show the destruction... in the Riley scene I was talking more about fleshing out the scene, rather than more group scenes... say instead of him estimating the losses right away, something like: Riley looked around; where there was a group of hot cheerleaders they had been eying, there was now just dust, the football team that had gathered at the pitch was reduced to the quarterback, but the study group under the tree was still there, looking around in confusion... that was the major weakness in the scenes, that they were too short and without life.

TV again. How do they get death numbers to begin with? I can see them coming up with percentage estimates by having reporters check how many people in certain villages with known population survived, but death figures? It seems hard if not impossible to get even estimates. Once reporters or police have counted the survivors in some communities, I can accept them having survivor estimates... well, percentage ranges at least. But beyond that it'd mostly be limited to who they can reach and who can't be reached... and of course some of those people may simply be busy with other things and not answer the phone. Or have no listed number, other than a now deceased personal assistant.

Scene order... the jumping here and there to show what happens in some microcosm of the whole is a tad confusing since you need to find out where you are now first, but the scenes together do a good job of showing the whole picture, probably better than a continual narrative could, and they do aid the confusion/lack of info mindset that the characters suffer. That the scenes are out of order however is more frustrating than confusing, at least to me. Quickly jumping scenes/views from different POV IMHO work only well if you can grasp how they are ordered chronologically, and so I believe that's the order they should appear in.
Would the Faith scene have the same impact if you already read the Lily scene? It would be slightly different, but not worse... and it would bring home more just how isolated the characters are at the moment, with no idea what's happening beyond their immediate sight. You probably need to add a bit of color to the Faith scene... expand it to show how Faith learns that something is happening (who does she see turn to dust? Or does she just feel the magic? What about the wards of their residence? etc), but as I said earlier, that seems to be the one weakness of the chapter.
Comments from author:
Yes there are Asgard there. It might not be all of them but it's a decent number of them. And I can see people being a bit nervous about them.

Probably should have went for them speeding up time on the ship rather than the other way around. It would probably have been easier.

Hey, it seemed like a good place to stick Warren. A place where he can get some direction and be useful.

The idea is to put people into Vr and try to sort out just how crazy some of them are before sending them back. Not to mention you can get opinions and try to sort things out a little before just letting them run around like a chicken with their heads cut off. As for culture, they'll probably take a number of the people from both places and have them teaching the next gen in vr. While I realize it's not the same it's a stop gap measure to keep everything from completely falling apart. It's better than nothing.

You're right, sometimes filler is needed.

There isn't a solar system per say in middle earth. That's one of the reasons they can't bring ships and such things. As for talking with the god of that world, maybe though really not on their list of fun things to do. It might happen or it might not depending.

People called in, people counted in some places and such things... it's not an exact percentage but they have a rough idea. I'm sorry that the scenes didn't have enough life. You're right some of them could have been longer as well.

I'm sorry that the order wasn't as good as it could be.
Review By [Drake] • Date [23 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Two" from Drake
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Holy shit.

Now that was a mess. I can't help but agree with Gabrielle that some orbital surveillance should have been in place, but then again they knew aliens would attack at a certain point if demons did not overrun the planet, and that point hadn't been reached yet. So how did these aliens escape observation? I guess that will be the most troubling question for the Key's; just how much is hidden from them when they view a world?

Talking about world, where are the gods? There are numerous gods, not least Janus, who hold power on Earth; no warning seems odd. No retaliation odder. Especially if the souls were really destroyed. That's going to piss of all the death gods for certain, and probably all gods, period. And there's the question on how the ships escaped the wishes that people must be making all over; what is protecting them from Vengeance Demons?

Honestly, I was expecting Willow and Gabrielle to reach out and use their powers to crash a few ships into one another; but it seems they've escaped that fate for now. And their oracle did only detect the police, not the 'gods' on the world that are about to come after them... poor fools.

Injuries... I can see that initial treatment of injuries is problematic, but what about the Slayer who lived with a couple of dragons? That was a D&D type world, IIRC. So Regeneration spells at least should be available, and a Wish spell should be able to return those killed to life, even if they have no cleric with Resurrection allied to them. I can't see Willow (or Gabrielle) not learning D&D type magic; maybe not for everyday use, but for special occasions. I'm not saying that the magic has to work, but that it should not be forgotten/ignored.

So will they go for intimidation? Like a couple moon sized ships (Dahak-verse), or use their regular ships? Will they have defenses in place before the police or whatever shows up? What reaction is that going to cause? I mean just because there is an empire the raiders fear, doesn't mean that those are good guys. They could be just as much of a problem as the raiders.

Talking about ships and defenses; is the HP-world set up yet? If one world can be hit, so could others. Depending on how much resources an early warning and defense grip costs, I'd expect them to start fortifying all worlds (Sunnydale, HP/old gods, and Middle Earth).

There's also the question of emergency aid... there are several universes capable of rendering emergency aid to the survivors... the Culture (from Iain Banks), Dahak-verse after the war, Warhammer-verse, Star Trek, Honor Harrington-verse, and maybe a few others... humanitarian aid and emergency support (and law enforcement) for the survivors could save millions, and I don't think they have amassed enough resources to mount a global aid campaign out of their own resources, while all those mentioned could do so easily, and save for Warhammer would do so with little thought for payment... and the Warhammer verse would probably aid as soon as they believed that it was an alternate Holy Terra that needed aid - even if most would be more eager to hunt down those that defiled the planet.
I realize bringing in foreign aid may not be high on their to do list, but given the situation it is probably the only way to keep order, especially with super powers awakening all over.

Then there's maintaining civilization... to maintain out standard of living requires a lot of people. A high population density. With the population dropping, maintaining the infrastructure will be hard; keeping our general tech level problematic. Even without considering that all economies need to reboot, new currency printed and brought into circulation. And nobody will be certain how to move forward. That's before you consider where governments remain in control and where others take over... gangs, criminal organizations, religious fanatics, .... - doomsday cults will boom, I think. On the other hand people may not have time to spare for anything but survival.
And there is the matter of disposing the corpses of those that died after the disaster; OP patients that survived while the doctors didn't, people dependent on medication no longer available, children without parents (especially those that can't leave their home yet), elderly unable to care for themselves, ...650 million (10% of the population) may have survived the attack, but I'd be surprised if 600 million survived the first 48 hours. And that's without the complications that out of control powers could cause.

I am surprised that they didn't turn the strollers themselves into emergency portkeys... then again maybe they were and Helen didn't want the kids in the same room as Lily and Islay.

Rosenbergs... the scene itself isn't bad, but the writing suggests that only some burst into ashes, meaning most survived. Shouldn't it be the other way around? Or does the plane provide protection? Unless other survivors are necessary for something you planned later, I'd change it to everyone on the plane burning up, leaving the two of them alone - to give at least a glimpse at the level of death and destruction wrought. Same with the Riley scene. At least half the people? I'd go with three quarters, or maybe even describing various groups they either ceased to exist or were vastly reduced. Telling of the destruction is one thing, but at least a few scenes that show just how devastating the attack was would make the chapter even better.

White House... I can just not see a SS agent to act/think like that. Maybe I consider them to be too noble, but well, I do. Curses, thoughts about the future/succession, fear for her family, fear of war, or whatever; but as is her behavior seems out of place, unless she really disliked the administration. And I think you're wasting a lot of the scene's potential by not staying there a bit longer; maybe it's just me, but I'd like to know just how badly the administration was hurt and how secure the succession is. It'd take too long to get a feel for how hurt the government and military as a whole are, but the Secret Service should have a good idea who is the next in line for presidency within a minute or so, unless they were hit disproportionally hard.

So Aura left a skeleton behind? How common is that? Does it ,ean that some of her is still there; that when she wakes she may just look like a skeleton? Another mystery to ponder.

The TV reports seem... plot driven? Forced? I could see them occasionally giving an update on new estimates, but wouldn't they at least at first be fixated on how hard they were hit (if the reporters aren't busy trying to reach their families, that is), and then concentrate on specific figures... like President, Congress, Governors, military, nuclear weapon security, power plant operations, chemical spills (how many truck drivers vaporized?), electric grid operations, state of public infrastructure, status of celebrities, reports about super powers, advice of which hospitals are still staffed, etc. Rising deathtoll seems just such a boring subject to report on, when the survivors (reporters included) have so many questions they need answers to.

Cassie Newton... I guess we'll learn more about her soon.

I wonder how many squads were forced to flee from local resistance. And how many wiped out. Will we get an After Action report from the raiders? Perhaps contrasting that with AARs from the US and Dawn (who I'm sure will view the event in detail from outside the world). It sounds like an interesting chapter, or at least part of a chapter.

Have Gabrielle and the others noticed the super-powers yet? I mean, Helen should at the very least be curious what happened to her leg, shouldn't she? And had Hermione perfect control after they arrived? That seems odd, yet they aren't mentioned. Wouldn't Gabrielle (or others) scan everyone in depth just to make sure they are okay and there are no hidden problems (like radiation poisoning or something similar)?

The Gabrielle/Willow scene is... good. Well done.

I wonder.. are there demons who want payback a well? Perhaps this could be a bonding experience that brings humans and the majority of demons together, under a common government.

The LA scene seems forces; why did Angel wait this long to confront Doyle. Perhaps add something about Doyle just arriving back from shopping (i.e. he was out food shopping during the attack) or something similar. The scene itself flows well enough. But where is Kendra and Wesley? Whether they lived or died, it should have been mentioned; of course the group may not know, but even that should be mentioned.

Giles in the last scene seems oddly passive. Where is Ripper? His books are unlikely to provide answers, true, but maybe spells that could divine some answers or track the attackers? Or he could go out and help out in Sunnydale - his intention would be to keep busy and help people, but he'd become known - with the next mayor dead, and who knows how many others, maybe it's time for a white hat to take the office. And how the hell did I get to this thought from thinking about Ripper???

The jumping scenes are a tad confusing at first, but I think they do a good job of capturing the feel of the situation there are however some out of order... for example the first Faith scene is after, followed by the Leo scene during... from reader information POV it might not be a bad order, but keeping it in chronological order would help build the feeling of helplessness - or not knowing what is going on.

Overall I liked the chapter. There were some scenes as mentioned above that should be expanded, but I think you managed to show what happened to a fair degree. Well done.
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How the aliens escaped their notice is going to be rather important for the keys to figure out.

The no warning from the gods part will be explained. There are a number of gods that are likely going to be pissed. The powers that be might not actually survive to be killed by Gabrielle and crew. They're supposed to be maintaining order not doing things like selling out the planet. Though there are other gods that are going to be happy that there will be a resurgence in worship. It's a mixed bag really.

The aliens did hit and run stuff. They didn't really have that much time to reach out and crush a ship. They were more worried about shoring up their defenses. I had considered downing a ship but I decided that they didn't have time. As for detecting the gods of earth, well that's more problematic than checking for stuff you know is coming.

Willow and Gabrielle at least have some regeneration spells so they'll be able to put people back together. It's just going to take going and raiding the magic shop for stuff.

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So will they go for intimidation? Like a couple moon sized ships (Dahak-verse), or use their regular ships? Will they have defenses in place before the police or whatever shows up? What reaction is that going to cause? I mean just because there is an empire the raiders fear, doesn't mean that those are good guys. They could be just as much of a problem as the raiders.
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They are likely going to scout the demon/aliens empire out then they'll see what exactly they need. They'll be bringing a number of ships as well as some backup for helping the world put itself back together again. They're likely to go a touch overboard with defenses on the various worlds they have people on and likely over their whole empire. As for the empire that the raiders fear, you're right nothing says that they're the good guys.

The Hp world isn't set up but it will be next on the list to get defenses. They'll also likely work on Middle/earth's defenses.

Bringing in foreign aid is one way to help. Though the scale they would need help on is rather insane. It would require a massive number of ships. While they have a number of ships and crew from their training centers back in their world, it's a matter of skill and experience which they don't have at this type of thing. So yeah they'll be bringing in outside help but it's still going to be a nightmare.

And yeah, I suspect that the first 48 hours are going to be rather important. I suspect that either people will have to concentrate or they'll have to figure out something that allows them to get around. Perhaps something like flying cars would take care of having to maintain roads. Then again an influx of robots might stem the tide and allow things to continue to be maintained. At least until various groups decide to go crazy and try to take over with their new superpowers. I suspect that the first 48 hours is going to be key for so many reasons. If you can partially deal with the chaos then people will have something to believe in and hopefully things don't go completely fubar.

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Rosenbergs... the scene itself isn't bad, but the writing suggests that only some burst into ashes, meaning most survived. Shouldn't it be the other way around? Or does the plane provide protection? Unless other survivors are necessary for something you planned later, I'd change it to everyone on the plane burning up, leaving the two of them alone - to give at least a glimpse at the level of death and destruction wrought. Same with the Riley scene. At least half the people? I'd go with three quarters, or maybe even describing various groups they either ceased to exist or were vastly reduced. Telling of the destruction is one thing, but at least a few scenes that show just how devastating the attack was would make the chapter even better.
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If the plane was packed with Sunnydale residents then 40% of the people might live. I realize that the rest of the plane wouldn't be packed with Sunnydale people but their compartment might be. There is also the idea that a large enough amount of metal would shield people at least somewhat. But yeah I probably should have had more people end up dead. Same issue with the Riley scene, he's in Sunnydale so more people are going to survive. I should probably have had other groups just vanish completely though to show the whole scope of the destruction.

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The TV reports seem... plot driven? Forced? I could see them occasionally giving an update on new estimates, but wouldn't they at least at first be fixated on how hard they were hit (if the reporters aren't busy trying to reach their families, that is), and then concentrate on specific figures... like President, Congress, Governors, military, nuclear weapon security, power plant operations, chemical spills (how many truck drivers vaporized?), electric grid operations, state of public infrastructure, status of celebrities, reports about super powers, advice of which hospitals are still staffed, etc. Rising deathtoll seems just such a boring subject to report on, when the survivors (reporters included) have so many questions they need answers to.
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I should probably have worked on the Tv reports a bit more rather than just having the crew catch one part of it. Mostly I was sticking with the death numbers rushing in because likely they aren't exactly getting coherent reports of much right now. They'll be some reports on the state of things next time around. The leadership of the country for one, a number of accidents for another. The nuclear weapons security will be important as well. State of public Infrastructure, status of celebrities... wow really? Shakes head sadly I can see people actually caring about that. Chemical spells will likely be a problem as well. The reports of superpowers should start pouring in eventually. :)

Cassie Newton is a psychic from the show. She's a kid currently rather than a high school girl that dies because of a heart problem.

~~I wonder how many squads were forced to flee from local resistance. And how many wiped out. Will we get an After Action report from the raiders? Perhaps contrasting that with AARs from the US and Dawn (who I'm sure will view the event in detail from outside the world). It sounds like an interesting chapter, or at least part of a chapter.
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I'm planning an after action report on the local resistance though likely there isn't going to be much resistance because they were in and out too fast. That being said there was some and in certain places they will lose troops. Dawn is going to be unhappy with what she finds or doesn't find.

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Have Gabrielle and the others noticed the super-powers yet? I mean, Helen should at the very least be curious what happened to her leg, shouldn't she? And had Hermione perfect control after they arrived? That seems odd, yet they aren't mentioned. Wouldn't Gabrielle (or others) scan everyone in depth just to make sure they are okay and there are no hidden problems (like radiation poisoning or something similar)?
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Actually, I sort of touched on Hermione when they sent the half/full powered Kryptonian to watch her. So yes they are aware that things are fishy. Two year olds no matter how much adrenaline don't have the ability to crush a bio war machine's leg. They'll still sort of in reaction mode. This is a first for the group as a whole. Willow and Buffy have a bit better grasp on end of the world situations but this is the first time they've failed or come this close to failing at least. They'll likely start pulling themselves together pretty soon. Checking everyone for radiation sounds like a fantastic idea though.

I'm glad you liked the Willow/Gabrielle scene.

Most of the demons will just be looking to either take advantage of things or get the hell off the world. I could see some of the demons wanting revenge though.

I should probably have pushed the L.A. scene up in the chapter so that it didn't come after some of the stuff that was after the attacks. Either that or I should have put in a part with him coming back from checking his sources. Kendra and Wesley were of course out patrolling. Kendra isn't going to let the end of the world stop her after all. I should have included it.

Giles in the last scene seems a bit broken, like someone just pulled the rug out from under him. I suspect that once they fix Jenny that he'll be a bit more willing to help out.

You might have a point about the scenes being a bit out of order but I thought as you said that it helped with the confusion they've got to be feeling. They're used to a certain amount of control in their lives and this experience shook them badly.

I'm glad that you liked the chapter and thanks for the review.
Review By [Drake] • Date [20 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Two" from banditdoz
Review:
well I didnĀ“t see that coming! I thought it was going to be the Asgard or something!
Comments from author:
Nah, the Asgard would likely not land like that and they surely wouldn't destroy 90% of the world. :)
Review By [banditdoz] • Date [20 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Two" from Doodle
Review:
Excellent chapter. 1,000/10


Where are the PTBs/Oracles in this chapter? Did they get blindsided by the invasion/destruction and couldn't send a vision?
Comments from author:
Either that or they passed the word to the aliens/demons and didn't want to stop the chain reaction.

Thanks for the review.
Review By [Doodle] • Date [20 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Two" from Mordare
Review:
Great chapter. I know it must be hard when you are writing with such a huge cast. Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
It's sometimes a bit hard to work everyone in a way that doesn't seem scattered. It's easier when it's just day to day stuff but when it's the big stuff you start wondering where the characters are.
Review By [Mordare] • Date [19 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Two" from jimk
Review:
You know I have to agree with the one reviewer who basically said it seemed kind of lame to use dice to decide where your story goes. Now since you say in the response you only used it to decide which minor characters die or were otherwise affected that is not so bad and within fairly tight limits might be perfectly fine. What truly would be lame, would be plotting the whole or critical parts of the story based on die rolls. In your case, perhaps the real mistake is telling people you used dice! Seriously, people want to think the author has a plan and a story to tell versus just random crap being spouted. Very few people would have the patience to read a story with literally a random plot that has no plan. Sure it might be good, but more than likely would turn out to be crap. Sounds like that's not what you are doing at all, but initially and until I saw your response to the other reviewer, I pretty much thought the same as they did.
Comments from author:
Plotting out whole arcs based on the dice is problematic as the dice often do something horrible and send things spiraling. Losing a main character at this stage would also screw up the series plot and I don't really want to do that right now. That being said there needs to be a bit of risk in any story otherwise it doesn't have that hint of danger that keeps things interesting. Thanks for the comments and suggestions.
Review By [jimk] • Date [19 Mar 12] • Not Rated
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