Wow, I really loved the Force Recon and all the Trials. Great job with those.

EDIT: Not sure. The fact that Hermione is pregnant? Kinda hit us over the head with that one.

Thanks. Did you spot the Chekhov's Guns I planted?

Edit: No, I meant in the 'force recon' and 'trials' parts. Okay, maybe I do kind of stick a lot of little junk into my stories.

So I was re-reading this story (again) and I finally see what so familiar about Alex's inner voice : it is basically halfway between your Buffy Summers and Anna Parsons inner voices.

That's why so often I pause wondering "wait, doesn't she sound like someone else ... no after checking that's definitely Alex".



And if you're a reader looking for reviews on the story : it's awesome, read it. Now.
If you need actual reasons for that, those includes (but are not limited to) : spot on characterisation, very well planned from the beginning to the ending, excellent pace, witty dialogue, clearly described and exciting action scenes, endearing characters and banter, brilliant plans and ideas, very high coherence of the story and the setting, epic story, Attack of the 50 Foot Willow, Xander and Jack O'Neill challenging Batman's composure with their jokes ...

:-) Well, Alex does have a few elements of the voices from Buffy, Anna Parsons, Jade Sinclair, and my daughters. Plus I tried to make her sound like the Alex of the tv shows, but with a little maturity.

Daniel's favorite barista? Hmmm... Are you the person who wrote the Barista series of stories or have you read them? Or is that just a chance mention of a barista in the story? Yes, my curiosity is boundless and drives me batty if I don't at least ask. *sheepish grin*

Also, this is definitely an interesting premise. I'm not going to red this one in one sitting, however, especially not at this time of night.

Yes, I admit it, I read all the Barista series too. And some of my stories are extremely long, so I don't expect people to stay up and read the whole thing in one sitting. Case in point: I have several Phase novels that are longer than the *longest* Harry Potter novel.

Really hate these crap dream/or badly designed chapters. They're either dreams or author crap because there is almost no chance that evil Willow could actually find the right dimensions... all of the people... and such... let alone within a couple of days...(Mostly cause some of the enemies weren't talked about... maybe she could have worked something out by seeing the portals... but that still leaves a frightening lack of information) basically this comes across as a let me kick the characters around because it's a dream and it's stupid and it's been dragging on for four damn chapters...

That said the rest of the story has been interesting and amusing.

That said, you have a valid point! Because - as you'll see in a couple chapters - that's not what's going on at all, and part of the process is precisely what you already thought about.

> And I can’t wait to see what happens when she does it with some cold iron the next time we’re facing one of those
> stupid Sidhe jerks.

Unfortunately, it probably wouldn't be cold iron anymore after the melting. Cold iron is pure iron that has not been refined or forged with human-made heat. If Willow's magic counts as "made by humans" then cold iron would stop being cold iron and simply be regular iron after she melted it.

> If Dirac’s hypothesis about the non-constancy of universal constants across huge deltas of space and time is correct,
> then a minor change in the fine structure constant could cause all the matter inside the pouch to go off with the
> equivalent force of an antimatter blast.”

Don't forget air volumes. Air has mass, and even a few grams of matter converted to energy produces a yield measured in kilotons.

'Cold iron' changes its technical definition in every setting. SO you're probably right (since it was said by a non-expert), but we have no way of telling in the Buffyverse.

Great story! Recommended :)

Thanks! I'm always happy to get recommendations. And constructive criticism. And thoughts about stories.

I actually had trouble getting in to this one but came back to it today and couldn't put it down.

Really good... Really Really :-)

Cheers.

Rec'd

Thanks, and thanks for the Rec. I think the problem is my writing style. I'm verbose. I like to world-build. I like to retcon things that should have been explained in the original fiction. That often leads to a slow start.

Maybe, from now on, all my stories should start with "the building was on fire, and it wasn't my fault". :-)

This was a fantastic read. I enjoyed it immensely, loved all the characterizations, and just had a blast. Thank you for sharing it!

Thanks for the review, and thanks for the rec!

Far, FAR better than "The League of Extraordinary Gentlemen." I really enjoyed the team spirit that you worked into the novel. There was a distinct lack of the "Xander-Stu" phenomenon, which was impressive given the range of characters involved. No limelight-stealing here. I am looking forward to the next stories in the series.

Thanks. There were places where I had to re-think the situation to keep it from devolving into 'one hero dominates the setting'. And I decided not to go with the classic solution to the 'heroes each face their greatest enemy' trope: the team switch-up to get more favorable match-ups.

Impressive... and quite fun. Thanks for sharing!

Thanks for reading. If you enjoyed, I'd appreciate a Rec.

Percy has someone very special! Wonder if she's a counter-part of anyone we know?

Actually, I had in mind JKR's statement that Percy would eventually marry a British witch who was not one of the main characters, and not Penelope Clearwater.

Good storytelling and good vehicle for the characters not having an unlimited time together... at least not so easily.

Oooh. Lots of stuff going on.

Stuff can pile up in my stories. It's a hazard of adding in a complaication here, a Chekov's Gun there...

I like the stuff you're doing with Jamie who is an emotionally developed character but a plot-wise under-developed character. If she's in California - it will help for her to know valley girl speak. It was hard to tell in the show if she was teaching near a base in Washington DC or near her home in rural California... near a military base.

In theory, Jaime lived in Ojai California, but that wasn't where she did her student teaching (which was never specified).

Some interesting stuff going on here. The HP former Prisoner Wizards are apparently real - Willow wants to see her friends get torn apart by Zombies, but is basically having fun - so that has a slightly light side to it.