Great. Alec/Xander the assassin is going to like Danny the cop. I can't see this working out to well. Espicially since Danny's friend and partner Steve 'Superseal' McGarret is going to be around. Should be interesting though.
Review By [kayron] • Date [14 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Good story. I like how you drop hints of the back story as you go along. When he had his childhood memories swapped for Alec's he performed a travesty on himself that will be very hard to even partially rectify. Interesting to see how you deal with it.
For one thing retrieving his capacity for joy, (not just interest in sex), might well be impossible. He is going to have to recreate himself. Sort of like the Shadow, who started out bad and ended up good.
Could result in being someone who would make 007 green with envy, if he isn't already.
Looking forward to more.
Review By [oldgirllost] • Date [13 Dec 11] • Not Rated
An interesting back-story explanation. I like that Xander wants to give it up, but the deal he made to change one set of horrible childhood memories for another -- well at least he's living with his choice.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [13 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Exciting, fun.... eager to read more! :D So, Xander is off the map, disappeared.... and living in Hawaii - just awesome! Eager to see how it goes with Danny. I think they would make a great pair. Congrats!
Review By [msdarque] • Date [13 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
I really like the idea of the story. But unfortunately I found it very difficult to read with the spelling & grammar mistakes. Hopefully you will either get someone to assist you with your proofing & editing. Don't give up! The plot for this chapter was interesting.
Review By [jcon] • Date [30 Nov 11] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Really enjoyed this and looking forward to more. I don't mind at all the fact we have no background yet, showing us Xan how he is now and then showing how he got to this point I find hooks me in better. I'm guessing his halloween soldier was an X5, Alec maybe? (or ? Zack I guess) Which would explain his attitude changes, morally ambiguous but still a good guy as much as he trys not to be. Wondering who the pairing will be, hoping for Xan/Auggie. Yum!
Hoping for more soon.
Review By [Mel] • Date [29 Nov 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Am kinda mixed on this. While there seems to be a decent to very good story here, there needs to be more fleshed out to explain the vast distance from canon you are approaching things. From what you mention, it seems that Xander went as Hitman for Halloween and that set off changes. The sexual orientation one is a bit jarring and odd. That he would take the time to chat the assassin about how hung he is seems very out of place from the rest of the story and makes me think you either did it for yourself for some reason or just to honk those that hate Xander slash. Unless it is important to the story and plot, just leave it out and keep him a eunich for all I care, but don't add it just because you like him gay or want to bait others. It cheapens the story.
Now you hint at the Glory plot going differently and best guess would be that this isn't the only deviation, but more likely the tipping point. Xander shooting Ben cold bloodedly would set in motion the fall out you describe, so that is my guess as to the split. But if Buffy didn't die the second time and get brought back by Willow, then how did the slayers get activated? Buffy's resurrection was the catalyst for the First making it's move which lead to the scythe and the activation.
Main thing is you have an intersting drabble for now. Will be interesting if you continue, but if you do, you have some backstory that needs if not explaining, at least acknowledging.
Will see what comes next, but please consider what I mentioned above and hopefully you have these bits already worked out. Hope this helps. Best of luck! Later.
Review By [missinglink] • Date [29 Nov 11] • Not Rated
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