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Review of chapter "Airplanes and meetings" from (Moderator)acs
Review:
Interesting fic. Trying to merge three fandoms like this is a big challenge.

The updated version here makes more sense than the version on fanfiction.net. But you might want to watch out for continuity problems while you are revising it. You have Giles mention Joan seeing a vampire 3 days after her parents die but 3 weeks later in this chapter, when they all arrive in Cascade, she has no clue about such things and doesn't seem to be aware of Buffy & Faith being slayers.
Comments from author:
Okay, Joan is purposefully acting like she has no clue. This becomes a whole lot more apparent in the newer chapters that follow the already written ones. The reasons also become clearer. And I'm slightly mad at FF.net at this moment due to the fact that I *have* uploaded these changes over there, but they don't seem to have taken effect. That bugs me because I changed that one before I changed this one.
Review By [(Moderator)acs] • Date [15 Jan 05] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Sounding board" from Saphrine
Review:
ok you cannot stop there! I am really looking foward to the next part
Review By [Saphrine] • Date [15 Jan 05] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Tragic coincidence" from CPTSkip
Review:
OK, this has to be one of the weirdest crossovers I've ever read. But I like it. You've got a good handle on the characters and I can see them being played by the actors on the shows. I like the way they all interact too. And your dialog makes me laugh a lot. I know this hasn't been updated in a while, but I hope you come back to it some day and write more.
Comments from author:
Well, as of right now (11-21-04), I am going back over what I have written and fleshing the story out. I hope to get the brand new prologue out soon as well as the fleshed out first and second chapters and several new ones as well very soon.

My sister, who this was originally written for, is celebrating her birthday soon and I'm giving her this along with something else (the way she's going, probably a set of tarot cards). But I want to give her something good so I'm reworking it.

Thanks for the praise, and I can be pretty sure that your jaw will drop when I introduce the fourth and final crossover into the mix. That will be several months along in the story though; it'll be a while. *cackles evilly*
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [30 Aug 04] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Tragic coincidence" from Nightwind
Review:
I love it! I can't wait to see how Jim reacts to Buffy and Faith kicking his ass when sparring. This has so much potential, please write more ^-^
Review By [Nightwind] • Date [6 Apr 04] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Tragic coincidence" from Cutiepie
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OK, read it a second time, and it still confuses me a lot. I have to agree with the other reviewers about the slash stuff (seems very unlikely, and doesn't work for me) and you need to make note of it in your description, or else take it out completely (which I'd prefer). Please go back and try to explain more clearly what the he** is going on? Introduce each character like we have no prior knowledge of them, and so forth. This has a potential to be good, if you work it. =]
Review By [Cutiepie] • Date [5 Apr 04] • Not Rated
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
Having no knowledge of Sentinel, but being a fan of both Buffy and Joan, I can mostly follow this story. Got confused a few times (especially with all the people and the poker game, don't know what was really going on there) but have to say that this is rather an entertaining entry in the worlds of cross-overs. I encourage you to continue writing. As for the title, I like both options. You should go with what you like best, since you are the author. =]
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [30 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
Nice look at the personality of your Buffy and the added background was nice to know. I say you can name your story whatever you think is best. You're the darn bard! Lol!
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [28 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
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Please include a SLASH-warning in either the summary or the disclaimer.
While the story is well written I don't like slash stories that "slash" characters who never showed any inclination to homosexuality in the show(s) [in this case I'm mostly speaking of Xander as I haven't seen enough of The Sentinel to judge that part]. While I won't continue reading this story I hope others will enjoy the potential that lies in your story.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [28 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
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I'm sorry to say that this story really isn't working for me; there seem to be some fairly obvious problems with the characterisation. I'll concentrate on one aspect, the simultaneous death of two sets of parents. Firstly, none of the children seem to be particularly upset by this, secondly, neither Buffy nor the detectives in the story seem to be bothered by the coincidence. I don't know the other series at all, and can't say how their characters react to family problems, but we've seen how Buffy and Dawn reacted to their mother's death, and how Buffy behaved when she thought that Joyce or Dawn was under threat.

I know that you've changed their circumstances considerably (the extra sister and cousins etc.) but you've changed them so much I find myself wondering why you used the BtVS characters in the first place.

I'd also wonder what the social services would have to say about dumping six children on someone who is a bachelor and (as most of the characters seem to believe) gay and lives in a small apartment.

Apologies for being so negative, but I think the story premise needs some serious work; maybe you can write around these problems somehow, but I think they at least need to be thought about.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [28 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
You forgot the Slash warning, though it was almost all off camera.

I liked the characterization and the dialog with the teens and
the idea that the social worker was incompetant.
The Blair and Jim and MC interaction was very good too.
I found the amount of slashyness somewhat improbable,
mainly because of the lack of a slash warning;
and thought it might have been funnier if everyone was wrong about Jim and Blair.

So... good, but not great. I hope that will do you for the time being.
Your use of dialog and plot being strengths. A few run-on sentances,
but most of the writing was clear.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [27 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
This fic looks like it can be promising. I like what you've done w/ it so far. :)
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [27 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
Review of story "Intertwined Destinies" from Anonymous Reviewer
Review:
Well, I walked into this fic with no idea of what you were going to do and I very much enjoyed the first chapter (of many, I hope). Your characters weren't the same as the TV ones, but then they aren't those people. The idea of making the Girardi and Summers kids cousins was nifty. And I'm glad to see Faith is one of the Good Guys. I liked the interaction between everyone and I laughed several times. I give it two thumbs up and am looking forward to more of the cousins' adventures.
Review By [Anonymous Reviewer] • Date [27 Dec 03] • Not Rated • Add Comment
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