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Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Balder
Review:
I loved this story. I wish it were longer.
Review By [Balder] • Date [29 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Nuala
Review:
I liked this & your writing style. Would love to see the concept turned into a story. Thanks!
Review By [(Past Donor)Nuala] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Past Donor)Jewel
Review:
Nice as a short - would love to see it expanded :)
Review By [(Past Donor)Jewel] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from gaulty
Review:
interesting, byes
Review By [gaulty] • Date [12 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from HarmMarie
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Loved this.
Review By [HarmMarie] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from SnakeFox
Review:
I get that this was just a random one shot, but it seems like it'd be so good as the first chapter in a longer story. Really well done ^^
Review By [SnakeFox] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from BillieBog
Review:
Great, great start. Could be a really good long story.

Thanks so much for sharing.
Billie
Review By [BillieBog] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
This would be a really great story to make into an epic. If that wormhole was somehow 'connectable' to the one in Sunnydale (season 5, top of a tower?), that would be even more interesting...

Very good chapter 1. Hope you'll consider it.

Blue
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from PsychoWing
Review:
This is very interesting. It certainly isn't something I would complain about seeing continued. =D
Review By [PsychoWing] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Kremer
Review:
Interesting premise and plot, but a couple details are wrong.

- Serenity won't fit into a Daedalus-class fighter bay. A Firefly-class ship is 15m tall (about 17m with the landing struts out). It's way, way too high for the fighter bay (7-10m max).
Matching courses (with a tractor lock from the Hammond) and using Inara's shuttle would have been a more realistic scenario.
Not to mention there's no reaction at all to the bay being still 'open' to space yet having normal atmosphere (shields and force fields are fantasy to them).

- SG ships do have at least a platoon of Marines on board for security at all times. Plus the pilots and other crew are trained in security and ship defense (Cam, Sheppard, and Carter aren't unique in both pilot and SF skills for SG/Pegasus personnel.)

Other than those nits, it's a great premise and resolution. Too bad it's only a taste of what could be an interesting meeting of characters and world-views.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from Martin
Review:
This is really good. I could definitely see this as a full story, although it would probably work best as a short 20k word story.
Review By [Martin] • Date [10 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from GraysonPaladin
Review:
It may just be me, but I wouldn't have McKay there for First Contact seeing that he lacks little thing call people skills. Still a good one-shot? Or is there going to be more?
Comments from author:
There may be a Five-Times thing between Rodney and River, but that wouldn't be posted until next year, if it happens. Other than that... Who knows.
Review By [GraysonPaladin] • Date [9 Dec 11] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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