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Review of chapter "Strong-arming the competition" from CrystalBlaze
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Well, it certainly explains the nickname "Jax"..
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [21 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Strong-arming the competition" from TruthIsWhatUMakeOfIt
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Next chapter should be Raiden.
Review By [TruthIsWhatUMakeOfIt] • Date [19 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Strong-arming the competition" from thsunami
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i think the idea is great, if the government keeping on eye out he would be the ideal target for a black ops especially if the leran to enhace or fully combine whats already there. a fully trained soldier with no possible links to any training facility in the us. from that you can make any story
Review By [thsunami] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Strong-arming the competition" from deamon
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hey when you go through the evil characters will you be making him evil as well? or a good xander with the evil guys powers
Comments from author:
To be honest, that depends.

Right now, I'm just doing intros for the transformation of Xander into a MK character. If I went more in-depth then he would definitely be darker. For example, in the third chapter where he transformed into Noob Saibot he had the humanity burned out of him. So if that one was continued he would DEFINITELY be darker. I'll try to do one soon that is more along the lines of what you want.
Review By [deamon] • Date [18 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Best Served Kold" from DarkFaerieYumi
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Awesome. I dont know if youre taking requests but....can you do Scorpion next? Or an interesting YAHF of Sonya or Kitana? Ooooo! Jax! I'm gonna stop now.
Comments from author:
I never thought of taking suggestions, but I'm not opposed to them.

As for YAHF, I kinda used that with Sub-Zero and am trying to use a different method each time. I'll try to figure something out for Sonya or Kitana though.

Jax should be simple enough though. I'll try to do him soon.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [17 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Best Served Kold" from deamon
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you should try a boss next. Like how would he become shao kahn?? would he be good or evil?
Review By [deamon] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Soul Stealer" from deamon
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I actually got that it was shang tsung from the title lol
Comments from author:
I thought it might be a little obvious but I wanted to be sure.
Review By [deamon] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from TruthIsWhatUMakeOfIt
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You should continue this.
Review By [TruthIsWhatUMakeOfIt] • Date [16 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from DarkFaerieYumi
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XDDDDD Love MK to death. Sub Zero is my absolute fav. So happy.
Review By [DarkFaerieYumi] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from SnakeFox
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Okay... REALLY not getting the gripe from the reviewer who couldn't tell it was Sub-Zero. Seriously, a ninja dressed in blue who uses ice attacks... sure, because there were SO MANY of those in the arcade games and the movies he claims to have played/watched. Don't take it personally man, it was blindingly obvious who you had him dress as. Well, okay, the difference between Bi-Han and Kuai Liang, that wasn't obvious, but let's be fair, for all intents and purposes they're basically interchangable as Sub-Zero.

Anyway, now I'm done reviewing your other reviewers, might as well comment on the story itself. I thought it was really well written, you've got nothing to worry about in terms of spelling or grammar. My only gripe was that not much happened. No kombat, mortal or otherwise, he basically just hid the entire time. I would've liked to have seen more of Sub-Zero interacting with the Scoobies, dealing with the idea that he wasn't in his own body or reality. I could accept such an action-free possession if it was a prologue chapter of a Xander-Zero YAHF fic, but since it's just a oneshot... I dunno, just felt like it should've had more. Still, it's an interesting idea, of all the YAHF stuff out there, not sure I've ever seen this one done.
Comments from author:
This is actually one of the best reviews I've gotten.

You're right, not much happened. I suppose I could have had Sub-Zero be more involved instead of merely observing but in all honestly all the research I've done indicates that Bi-Han was distant and icy. I used artistic license and displayed him as logical. It actually read "stern, distant and cold man who goes about his business silently, without attracting unwanted attention." Given the fact that he was supposed to be a ninja/assassin I took that to mean stealth.

Thank you for your review. It pointed out a flaw.
Review By [SnakeFox] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from Amberdrake
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Sub-Zero wins. Flawless victory.
Review By [Amberdrake] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from djhardim
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Based upon the description of the character, I would say that Xander went as Sub-Zero. Is this Bi-Han, or his younger brother, Kuai Liang?

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Sub-Zero_(Mortal_Kombat)
Comments from author:
The older brother, Bi-Han.
Review By [djhardim] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from (Recent Donor)DeacBlue
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If this is Kombat, then the ninja should have a name. Use it. Separately, was there any fighting going on?

EDIT: Well, I'll tell you that I played MK when it was in the arcade, and I watched at least two of the movies. From what you say, I'm one of your prime potential readers. And I didn't recognize him. You don't have to repeat his name, just say it once.
Comments from author:
Why?

What value would be added by the character repeatedly thinking his own name? The reader should know who the character is through my brief description of his attire as well as his abilities. If the reader has no idea who the character and crossover are, then giving a name isn't going to help. Instead showing the character's thinking patterns may help the reader understand the character.

As for the second question, if it's in reference to the story codes then my answer is this is the first chapter of a crossover with a videogame that is notorious for its gruesome violence.
Review By [(Recent Donor)DeacBlue] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Kold Embrace" from RafMereC
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Interesting, but need more to decide.

Raf
Review By [RafMereC] • Date [15 Dec 11] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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