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Review of chapter "Bad Things" from DieselDriver
Review:
I'm really enjoying your story but there is a niggling little problem that is driving the proofreader in me crazy.

You use "were" when you mean "we're" and vice versa. "Too" means also, "to" doesn't. Example:

"We're going to where the good times were."

"We're going to take some friends too".

I've also seen "your" where you needed to use "you're".

Easiest way to remember when those are right is that "your" mines it belongs to you and almost rhymes with "oar" and "you're" means "you are" and should technically be pronounced more like "u er".

I don't remember if I've seen the more popular mistake "They're", "There" and "Their", but I think there's one spot so far.

Fix these problems, which a lot of writers have, and your story will sound much better. Or not, maybe nobody else is as picky as I am but I get a jarring sensation when I find one of these and it distracts from the flow of the story.

Still it's been definitely one of the better stories on this site and I don't know if it deviates from canon or not and don't care. I'm just enjoying it.

Thanks for posting it.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [24 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Verbal Confrontation" from DieselDriver
Review:
Jeez! Of course I don't need to guess. It's stairway to heaven by Led Zeppelin.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [23 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Author's note" from (Current Donor)vladt
Review:
fine tale, thank you for the enjoyable read.
Review By [(Current Donor)vladt] • Date [6 Dec 11] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Falling" from serenityselena
Review:
awesome story ^__^
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [17 Feb 11] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Author's note" from lorwen
Review:
good story...
:)
Review By [lorwen] • Date [18 Nov 10] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Falling" from purrfus
Review:
Very interesting ideas, and a unique set up. I've read a lot of BtVS / SGC crossovers, but this is way different from how the groups are brought together to Jonas, etc.

Some spelling and grammar errors, also some language / terminology differences between traditional English and American English.
Comments from author:
Thanks, I hate doing anything standard.

I'm Aussie and so's my spelling (traditional English), but I didn't actually get a beta reader until about half way through. He picked up as much as he could.

It's really great to get a review so long after I finished this particular story.
Review By [purrfus] • Date [19 Feb 07] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's note" from Ansku
Review:
Very nice :) Gets better towards the end but especially in the beginning there were sentences a bit difficult to understand due the lack or erratic use of punctuation. I honestly have no idea about this language's punctuation rules, but at least to me it took sometimes a few reads before I figured out what happened there, places where I think the meaning actually changed without the comma etc. But like I said, it got better towards the end.
Liked the bit about Willy :)
Review By [Ansku] • Date [23 Dec 06] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Author's note" from (Past Donor)exiled
Review:
Just found this in the Buffy centered list. Pretty good plot and I hope the next story finishes it.
Review By [(Past Donor)exiled] • Date [30 Oct 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Falling" from BlameyFomorrii
Review:
That was neat. I never liked Faith in the show-but I like her in fics like this.

Also-I completly understand what you mean on season 6/7-the scoobs pissed me off soo much.

Cool beginning!
bye
Review By [BlameyFomorrii] • Date [5 Sep 06] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Falling" from RevDorothyL
Review:
This is a great combo of some of my favorite characters, and I'm especially pleased at the way Sam Carter comes through for Buffy, even with Jack and the rest of the SGC yipping at her heels -- not to mention bringing in Sarah MacKenzie for good measure. I like the absense of 'shipping in this story and the focus on the characters just coming through for each other, and helping Buffy to save the world. I'm also enjoying the fact that the Scoobies don't get let off the hook very easily in this universe, since I think not enough responsibility-taking or amends-making went on in canon (at least when it came to the Scoobies making amends to Buffy for turning on her whenever she showed any human feeling or weakness).
Glad Buffy knew the answer to "who ya gonna call?", and that the answer was "Carter."
Review By [RevDorothyL] • Date [4 Jun 06] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Falling" from CaptainTuttle
Review:
A fantastic story... so good in fact, I coundn't stop reading even though I should go to bed, I think I'll read it again when I'm more awake! Thank you kindly :)
Review By [CaptainTuttle] • Date [17 Apr 06] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue: Falling" from Dragonlove
Review:
This was a really good story and I am excited to read the sequel. I agree about the STRONG dislike for Kennedy. I never did like her and never understood why Willow would be attracted to someone like that after she had such a great and loving relationship with Tara. I am also glad that you have made the scoobies and potentials pay for their treatment of Buffy.

I love the way you are tying the SG1 characters into the story. I don't watch JAG so I have no idea about who or what Mac is and what motivates her. But she does not seem to be too big a part of your story. I only wish you had moved the time line for SG1 up a bit to the couple of episodes (or was it only 1... I can't remember) when Daniel was back and Jonas was still on the team.

Keep up the good work and I am going off now to read the sequel.
Review By [Dragonlove] • Date [1 Dec 05] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Dreams and Babble" from RedDeathLV
Review:
At this point, I'm reading for the Stargate angle. One can only stomach so much Saint Buffy.
Review By [RedDeathLV] • Date [28 Oct 05] • Rating [3 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 1" from RedDeathLV
Review:
You've developed a problem with your punctuation, most especially commas and periods.
You're missing them in most placed they ARE supposed to be, and putting them in some places where they're not needed.
Review By [RedDeathLV] • Date [28 Oct 05] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Falling" from RedDeathLV
Review:
Why are there so many blank lines between paragraphs?
Major reduction needed.
Review By [RedDeathLV] • Date [28 Oct 05] • Rating [4 out of 10]
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