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Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from Lolaisawesome
"Business and family might bring her back here, so the idea of ratting her out is out. Not to mention, it isn't something I could live with doing. As for taking someone else's credit - that isn't impossible, normally, she does have a complex of seeing herself as the important one, but . . . in this case, no. Someone else actually did show up to help, but she refused more than a token of a helping hand, wanting to do it herself."

This is a review of the overall story which I loved by the way, but I felt this line came out of nowhere and was out of character. I understand some people see certain characters as self centered so I didn't stop reading just because of that one comment.

Just my opinion, not meant to offend just to give you something to consider.
Comments from author:
No, that's fair. I was trying to show how he saw the end, here, years later. But, your review is more than fair.
Review By [Lolaisawesome] • Date [29 Jan 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Explanation of the Bones." from HebiR
Radiocarbon dating gives a date plus or minus thirty or forty years, and is best for bones hundreds, or even better, thousands of years old. While using radiocarbon dating might help identify Anya's original age, the deviation between 25 and 5 is is completely standard. Due to the rate at which carbon-14 decays, the Smithsonian would use it to identify ancient corpses; they would not use it on a body as recently deceased as Anya's.
Comments from author:
True, and I did know that. I just went with the ridiculously accurate readings they often claim on the show, and it made the story flow slightly better. But, nice to know I'm not the only one that knows that!

Thanks for readinga nd reviewing!
Review By [HebiR] • Date [3 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from Bobboky
Very good
Review By [Bobboky] • Date [30 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from (Current Donor)vidicon
An interesting ending. Hopefully those bones can be destroyed, it seems they did enough damage as it was. And hopefully Buffy can be cleared of what she's been accused of. I wonder if a certain Public defender did not have an ulterior motive with this...

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Oh, Caroline absolutely had ulterior motives - if you look at the solution from her viewpoint, it is a good one. She gets a technical win, allows the Slayer to stay out of prison, and doing her job, and from her knowledge of them, the slayer won't last that long anyways. And it's a good thing for Xander, as he will no longer be held by the FBI.

It's just not the best solution for Buffy.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [3 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from serenityselena
the girls did their job well...
the big clean up remains but they will be ok ^_^
Comments from author:
I hope so.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [2 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from sjyu
I know nothing about law, except for what I see on TV. So I personally don't care that it's not accurate...I say call it your own personal universe and in your universe this is the way the law works. It's fiction people, the author is not being paid to write for us. We enjoy what they share with us.

I enjoyed reading your story. I need to re-read it later to figure out the Andrew thing.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the support!

I hope it makes sense in the future readings; I was trying to make it subtle but clear once you knew what had happened.
Review By [sjyu] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from Rich
I'm going to play devil's advocate here (on your side). The reviewers who point out that Xander's "deal" is nonsense raise many good points; Caleb's death was clearly self-defence, and there are jurisdictional questions, and Monica probably did give Xander bad advice, which might get the whole thing overturned on appeal. OTH, rejecting the deal might have led to a trial, in which Xander, or possibly Buffy, would have had to choose between A. perjuring themselves, or B. telling the court exactly what went down in Sunnydale - who Caleb really was, what he was doing there, why and how Buffy killed him, etc.. The last thing that the Scoobies want to do is go public; Caleb's death might be explainable (explicable ?), but how would they explain all the rest of it ? As I posted earlier, no normal human would have the ability to cut a spine precisely in half lengthwise, and no ordinary weapon could do it. "Yes, I cut him in half with a mystic scythe so that I could go on to destroy the whole town with a magic amulet worn by a vampire" is not something they want on the record. They need this to go away, and the deal is a way to accomplish that without attracting even more attention. Not the best way, certainly - if Xander had just kept quiet the case would probably have collapsed due to lack of credible evidence - but once the cat was out of the bag they had to settle for what they could get. So your resolution of the situation may have been the best one available.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

Yes, there are several things at work here. One of them is also that I have that old trait of empathy. not the ability to feel other's emotions, but to put myself in the shoes of others. And, when I put myself in Caroline's shoes, she wasn't going to let this go, but didn't want to hurt things too badly, re the Slayer. Thus, her deal offer.

And, while Caleb's death was self-defense, where's the proof? Time, the elements, and the like have erased most of the proof, and what is leftover doesn't actually look good; just because a person is a murderous serial killer doesn't allow another person to kill them out of hand, only in actual self-defense. And, the death by vertical slice isn't usually a sign of a fight, but of premeditation.

And, you caught the big one. Yes, the Council is powerful. Yes, the Council has contacts. But, the Council also doesn't want the secret to get out! It would ruin their effectiveness, and may [or may not, but they're not taking the chance] make things worse. So, they have to keep things secret, as much as they can.
Review By [Rich] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from burmafrdnow
you did the smart thing in ending it; your big mistake was not doing a little research into the law; and another was forgetting that the Council has a lot of clout.

Not sure why you did not figure this out ahead of time; but once you wrote yourself into the mess the best way out is fast as possible.

Oh and by the way Angels are given all the knowledge needed to take care of each case; so your claim Monica would not know much is also pretty lame.
Comments from author:
Angels are given the knowledge when on an assigned case; this was Monica seeing a situation and trying to help herself. And, she did have knowledge, just not all of it.

And, the law thing is complicated - among other things, until they got the news of Caleb's tangles with the law, it was a "he said, she said" where one of the sides was dead; and the scene had been destroyed, removing most of the clues that way. Additionally, Caroline's deal would have ended the matter in time, and looked like a win on her own record, from her view, a win-win scenario. Plus, I kinda felt that was how Caroline would act, always trying to be on the winning side, bulling her way through.

I didn't plan all of this out ahead. I mostly get an idea, and start writing, one chapter at a time, freeform.
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from AllenPitt
Good wrap-up. And they still don't realize how much damage 'Andrew' did to the LA Fang Gang; they think they're not trusted & don't trust Giles and all that. Think Buffy & the Immortal are together... meanwhile Spike's back and 'Andrew' prevented contact with Buffy. Neat.
Comments from author:
Thank you. Nope, figuring out everything 'Andrew' did will take some time.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from msdarque
Great chapter. I enjoyed reading it. :)
And I'm glad the First is defeated, though sorry for the loss of watchers and slayers.
Poor Wendell though...
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it. And, I was trying to be true to Bones' canon, and Wendall was in a much different place at the start of season 6 than he had been left at the end of 5.
Review By [msdarque] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
Ok, I'm confused. Did she take the stupid deal or did the Council's lawyers explain to the FBI that it would be lots of fun to watch them actually try to bring this case to court? That seems rather vague here.
Comments from author:
No, the lawyers are fighting it. Sorry that wasn't clear.
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Slayer in the Museum." from JediKnight
Very interesting ending to the fic, wish there was more though.
Comments from author:
Yeah, but I found myself in a crunch in-story timewise, and it had been kicking my butt for like a month. So, I tried to end it, explain the ideas I had, and make it mostly tie together, as best I could.

Thanks for reviewing!
Review By [JediKnight] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Deal in the FBI Building." from Downery
I refuse to believe a geek would start talking to the cops without a lawyer present. Anyone who watches movies and/or tv would know how stupid those shows are because most of the criminals talk themselves into prison time.

Been to prison, a few friends been to prison.. you learn a lot about the law while locked up. And Xander isn't some suburban scrub anymore he should know things too. Shut up and ask for a lawyer, always. Cops can't make deals with you no matter what they promise. Only the ADA or the DA can do that. So even if you intend to snitch get a lawyer and don't say a thing.

Enjoy the story other then Xander just flapping his gums like he's still the naive suburban zeppo.
Comments from author:
I did kind of write myself in a corner, and had to try to get out. Didn't want to edit the story, but it took a while to wrap it up.

And, while he isn't the Zeppo so much anymore, he does still have issues with thinking he can do more than he can, or not thinking things through all the way. Plus, the distraction of the timing, and the fact he was near Caleb's bones, which enhanced parts of his personality, and not the best parts. He wasn't affected like Perotta, theinterns and Camille, but he was affected.

At least, that's my story, and I'm sticking to it.

Thanks for reading and reviewing!
Review By [Downery] • Date [1 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Deal in Washington." from SariLane
I was curious about the third face... can't wait for an update. To the other stories as well.
Comments from author:
by now, it should be clear it was Andrew's face.

Thanks for reading!
Review By [SariLane] • Date [31 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Face on the Computer." from (Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood
"And, Self-defense is a defense, but the person is still charged with manslaughter, or one of the variants of murder, as I understand it. However, I admit, my legal understanding is limited."
----- If someone, say, breaks into your home, yells out that they are going to kill you, and then you blow them away with a shotgun, it's an *open and shut* case of self-defense, and you will not be charged with anything; you’ll even get to keep your shotgun (after it’s admitted for evidence and examined).

In the case here, Buffy was facing a psycho murderer who had repeatedly declared his intention to kill her (and her friends), had successfully killed some of said friends, and was in the process of having declared his intention to kill her yet again and trying his darnedest to do just that when she killed him. And this in a town where every law enforcement officer had deserted their posts and run away along with the rest of the population of Sunnydale.

I absolutely assure you – she has nothing to fear in a court of law.

The defense, and quite likely the presiding judge, would repeatedly *bitch-slap* the prosecution in this case all over the courtroom for even bothering to bring this case to trial. No sane prosecutor would even want to try it, for the damage it would do to their careers.

Accordingly, Xander and Buffy's response should be "Kiss our asses, FBI bitch," not "I'll take the deal."
Comments from author:
Ugh. Thanks. I've now had to rewrite the last chapter three times!

And, neither Xander nor Buffy would really know how to react to proper authorities.

Giles, on the other hand . . .
Review By [(Current Donor)JanessaRavenwood] • Date [26 Apr 12] • Not Rated
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