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Review of chapter "Ch - 8 the meeting" from Ravenmore
Review:
Great ending! A little rushed but a nice conclusion overall. I like Sacrow and being the only male slayer in a world of female slayers. Talk about being singled out! (laughing) I really think you should explore that more with Sacrow and how he deals with this and his interactions with his fellow female slayers. So far we have only seen him interact with Vi. Maybe some others slayers like Rona and Kennedy would be nice. Do you like that idea?

I think the other females slayers would be protective of him knowing how many demons and vampires would want to kill Sacrow to make a name for themselves. Can you show their thoughts on that? I think that would be quite funny!

Stay awesome! XD
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading. I'm working on the sequel but it might take some time for me to post it. Thanks for the ideas and take care.
Review By [Ravenmore] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Ch - 8 the meeting" from Knightmare
Review:
Great chapter! Glad to see you back! I was depressed waiting for a update! You did not disappoint! Dawn with help from Angel was able to save Sacrow. The Creator got away but he will think twice before trying anything again soon.

I am glad Dawn and Sacrow finally realized their feelings for each other. As Sacrow's Watcher it will be up to her to keep him out of trouble. Of course I have a feeling that is not going to be easy for Dawn at all! (lol) Am I right?

There is still the matter of punishment Sacrow will face from Buffy and Willow when he, Dawn, and Faith get back to Cleveland. Please if you can address this in a sequel. Just because he averted one crisis doesn't mean he is off the hook! :)

I also hope we see more of Dawn and Sacrow training and patrolling together. They are a team but with Dawn calling the shots. Hey somebody has to!

Hope you like my insights! Please update soon and don't forget you are very much admired for what you bring to us! Take care! :D
Comments from author:
Thank you for all the great ideas, once again :-) my sequel is in the works now but I'm having a few delays... it'll be up by next week though. I'm thinking about making it a cross over story. maybe with supernatural
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [17 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Real Lead" from Knightmare
Review:
Please update! I am dying here!
Comments from author:
I updated it. Tell me what you think.
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [6 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Real Lead" from Kindleflame
Review:
Great story you have written here! I honestly have never read a story about a male Slayer before. Sacrow seems to be a contradiction of determination and vulnerability. I also like Dawn Summers as a love interest. A Watcher and a Slayer. Now that seems destined to work. Beats a vampire and a Slayer that's for sure! (lol) Please update soon and have a great weekend! XD
Comments from author:
thanks for reading. I never saw any other stories about a male slayer so i decided to write one. :-)
Review By [Kindleflame] • Date [25 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Real Lead" from Knightmare
Review:
Your back! You were missed! (lol) This was a great chapter! Finally Dawn realized her feelings for her Slayer. Now she just has to act on them since Sacrow seems clueless. They are both the same age so Buffy can't object and with Dawn as his watcher hopefully Sacrow will have some level of protection since every vampire and demon it seems is out to get him. Talk about being most wanted! I do look forward to the continuing adventures of Sacrow and Dawn trying to keep track of him and out of danger. That certainly won't be easy! (lol) Update soon! :D
Comments from author:
thanks for welcoming me back with your very insightful comments lol and making me feel missed. i've been a way too long and i need to start my stories again once my internet modem gets here. thanks for reading :-)
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [24 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The First Real Lead" from Ravenmore
Review:
Awesome story! I love the chemistry between Dawn and Sacrow. I do think Dawn needs to be more aggressive in her feelings with Sacrow though. As a girl myself if I saw a boy I fancied I would walk up to him and ask him out. No reason why Dawn can't do the same here. This is the 21st century after all. They are a good match provided Sacrow stops going lone wolf and let's others in. Keep up the good work and I will be following you to see what happens next. Toodles! :)
Comments from author:
thanks for the review and thanks for reading. i was lost in many thoughts of how to start the real relationship between sacrow and dawn, so any ideas would be greatly appreciated :-)
Review By [Ravenmore] • Date [24 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "This is how I feel" from Knightmare
Review:
Great chapter but where was the spanking? (lol) Sacrow didn't even attempt to run. He froze like a deer in headlights. At least seeing Faith tackle him would have been fun. Promise me he will be punished by Buffy when he gets back to Slayer headquarters and I will be happy!
At least seeing Dawn acting all forceful like was cool. I loved how she told Sacrow to get in the damn car and shut up in a sense! Priceless! Well with Dawn calling the shots now Sacrow won't be able to sneak away again. Though if he did Dawn would hunt him down to the ends of the Earth! Then chain him in the basement! (lol) Please can you use that line in the next chapter as Dawn issues him a warning to never try this stunt again. I would die happy! :-)
At least Sacrow is finally looking at Dawn in a new light. It is a good first step. I still believe they are good match and hope to see it happen. Don't let me down! :-)
Please update this captivating story soon! Take care! XD
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading and i wanted it to be a more serious chapter
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Your future is..." from Knightmare
Review:
Please update this wonderful story soon! The suspense and waiting is killing me! I want to see Sacrow get his spanking! (lol) Take care.
Comments from author:
Sorry its taking so long to write this story. My friend and i just started a new series and were seeing how that goes but it will be up soon.
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [10 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Your future is..." from poet
Review:
Not bad. There were some minor grammatical errors that I found. Also, When he was walking home on his birthday it was night, but when they show up to get him you say that willow's hair shone in the sunlight. Spike getting beat so easily doesn't seem right to me. He was always more creative when it came to killing which is why he was able to best two slayers in his lifetime. The flow of the story is a little rough but with a little reworking it will be a great story. You have an original idea which is good. I like that there is a male slayer. I can't wait to read more.
Review By [poet] • Date [7 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Your future is..." from Knightmare
Review:
Sacrow is in for a spanking now! Please have him start running and Faith and Dawn chasing after him! He wouldn't get very far and Faith and Dawn hitting and yelling at Sacrow is so funny!

Even if Sacrow was created by evil, doesn't mean he is evil himself. It's our choices that define who we are and what we do. If Sacrow's will is strong enough, he can change his destiny just like Willow did when she tried to destroy the world. Of course having friends help you and ready to kick your ass to stay on the straight and narrow is always a plus in my book as Sacrow has Dawn and the other Scoobies.

I think someone is in denial. I believe Dawn does have feelings for Sacrow but keeps it hidden because she is hurt right now. I do think she is overreacting just a little. For one think if Sacrow had told her, Dawn would have tried to stop him from going in the first place. She has to realize that Sacrow doesn't really trust Vi more then her because for one thing he barely knows her and they just met. Another thing Vi was just a means to an end for Sacrow to keep her silence because it was convenient. Not exactly right but something he will have to answer for to Vi when they next meet. Like I said Sacrow is a teenager boy and like a lot of boys that age is dense as brick wall and rubbish about expressing feelings in the right way. I honestly believe he does feel something for Dawn also but doesn't know what it is and so he buries it. Typical male response. Why do you think it is so hard for girls to get their boyfriends to express their feelings? It is like pulling teeth. Given time Sacrow will come around and after Dawn smacks him upside the head and says " I like you, you idiot, now kiss me!" (lol) ( Same way it happened for my brother! )

As for Sacrow beating Spike this go around , I think Spike was going a little easy on him. Don't forget Spike is a master vampire with over a hundred years of fighting experience not to mention he has killed two slayers in his time, something not even Angel did when he was evil. While Sacrow is good in a way, he is just a rookie with hardly any fighting experience under his belt. The reason Faith and Buffy beat him so readily is because of years of combat experience and as proven on the show slayers get stronger as they get older. A fact confirmed by Joss Whedon, the creator of Buffy.

As usual I hoped you liked my insights and thoughts. Update quickly and have a good week. Take care! :D
Comments from author:
Thank you for your insight it's very helpful. The reason Sacrow beat Spike was because Sacrow actually has a little more power than a regular slayer, though he doesnt know it yet. I will explain all of the inner workings of the male slayer later. And i have never had that problem that you mentioned guys do lol
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [4 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Fearful in LA" from Knightmare
Review:
Great chapter! Can't wait for Faith and Dawn to catch up to Sacrow and lay the smack down as Faith puts it. (Willow should be able to teleport them to LA. She is the most powerful witch in the western hemisphere as she is fond of saying. ) Sacrow may not have feelings just yet for Dawn but she has feelings for him. Dawn has always been independent and headstrong and gone after what she wanted. If she has a interest in Sacrow, she should just tell him. I believe they are a good match and hope you put them together. Sacrow is just dense like all teenage boys are. It is up to Dawn to smack some sense into him and keep him out of trouble. Can you write a scene please where Sacrow sees Faith and Dawn looking for him and panics and starts running? They spot him and give chase! I would find that hilarious and a treat to watch! He thinks he loses them when all of a sudden Faith and Dawn tackle him from behind and pin him. Then the yellings and beatings begins! (LMAO) On a side note Angel is taking him to see Lorne to find clues about his destiny. That should be something watching Sacrow trying to sing. My suggestion is have him sing YMCA from the Village People. He would be so embarrassed! Plus it adds a little humor. Can you have Cordy make an apearance to? She is smart and sassy and would be able to give some advice on love and other things to Sacrow. Update soon. Until next time, take care! :)
Comments from author:
I would put cordelia in the story but I already wrote the next chapter and she's still dead. But i made it so Fred never died so you might enjoy that. Thanks for the support :-)
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [1 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Growing up is never easy but usually not this hard" from Knightmare
Review:
Somebody is in trouble! Buffy, Willow, Faith, and especially Dawn are going to be pissed off beyond belief that Sacrow just took off without telling any one and knowing he is a target for the bad guys! Talk about being reckless! Rule 1 in the slayer handbook is Don't Die! Rule 2 is slayers never go out alone without any backup! Sacrow broke rule two so somebody is getting a spanking when Buffy and Dawn catch up to him! (lol) Should be fun to watch!
I love the idea of Sacrow and Dawn as a couple and as his watcher. Somebody needs to keep Sacrow restrained for his own good as demonstrated here by his sneaking out. Dawn is just the person for the job! I have one request. Can you make Dawn a magic user or practicing witch please? In the tv show she was shown capable of casting Wiccan spells such as the time she summoned her dead mother back to life in the fifth season. Tara along with Willow did teach her some magic such as seeing past glamours and casting locating spells which she used in the seventh season. Combined with her extensive fighting skills she learned from Spike and Buffy and used fighting those Ubervamps in the last battle against The First, she is a formidable Watcher and not to be taken lightly.
After they retrieve their wayward slayer, can you have Dawn LoJack Sacrow with a tracking spell so she always knows where he is? I would find it so funny watching him protest this but Dawn telling him to stuff it! (lol) She is calling the shots now!
Since he is the only male slayer in history that makes him a high value target hense the need for the extra protection. After this all the other slayers will be
watching him like a hawk. One thing you can say about slayers they are real protective of their own and heaven help any demon or vampire stupid enough that tries to do them harm. They would destroy them!
I also liked the introduction of Vi and hope Sacrow and her will be great friends once she gets through smacking him upside the head for taking advantage of her being nice.
I hope you make this into a long story and my insights were helpful to you for this wonderful story. I always believe in helping the writer in the best way possible if able. Know you have one loyal reader who looks forward to what you write and will as long as you continue to do so. Keep up the good work and update soon. Take care! :)
Comments from author:
I love these ideas soo much... I will probably use some of these but I'm not going to tell you which ones but you will know them of course. keep reviewing and tell your friends to read :-) thanks for reading
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [28 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Growing up is never easy but usually not this hard" from Blackett
Review:
update, yuppy!!

He just had to go follow the strangers clues didn't he?
Comments from author:
yeah, it wouldn't be an amazing story without some mix up thrown in would it?
Review By [Blackett] • Date [27 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter two - Living in a Girl's world" from Blackett
Review:
Loved it:)
Comments from author:
Thanks for reading :-)
Review By [Blackett] • Date [27 Feb 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter two - Living in a Girl's world" from Knightmare
Review:
Great story so far! You mentioned he wouldn't have a romance with Dawn, but can he have a romance with one of the other slayers like Rona or V? That would be cool. Also that evil wizard or what ever he is will have a hard time getting past Willow's magical wards guarding the Council's headquarters. Keep up the good work and update soon Take care.
Comments from author:
I never said he wouldn't have a romance with Dawn, but he is not romantically attracted to her as of yet. I don't know about the pairings yet either but those are all great ideas thank you. and i knew about Willow's magical guard, which is why he had those two guys steal it for him, also those two will make a reappearance in the next few chapters.
Review By [Knightmare] • Date [24 Feb 12] • Not Rated
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