Large PrintHandheldAudioRating
using
 paypal
Twisting The Hellmouth Crossing Over Awards - Results
Rules for Challenges

The Chicago Slayer

StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking
Review of chapter "The Week of Searching." from AllenPitt
Review:
I suppose Willow could find Fiona if she used magic, but with hundreds of slayers already working for the council, it's just not worth the effort. Plus Fiona would say 'no!' anyway...
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [13 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Sunny Sunday!" from AllenPitt
Review:
Poor V, even finding Fiona will be tough, let alone giving her the whole spiel on slayers. I wonder what the policy is on slayers who don't want to sign up? I think Buffy would insist that that's a choice they should have, but there are probably warnings about misusing the power. But to Fiona, cashing in on it wouldn't be misusing. i.e. she could go into boxing/wrestling, stuff like that and make some good money. But that would risk exposure, so I can see the new council being against it....
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [14 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Chicago Slayer." from burmafrdnow
Review:
I really hate stuff like that.

as regards the story, need to tighten it up a bit and move it a little faster, as right now unless you have a real interest in shameless it is kind of boring
Review By [burmafrdnow] • Date [14 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Sunny Sunday!" from Gideon
Review:
Well I see that crime doesn't pay
at least not for these kids anyway,
collecting and searching and clipping galore
but still they seem to need more!

If Fiona keeps hiding I don't think Vi et al will find her, she has had too much practise at hiding! And if they come on too strong she will just hide more :( Seems like their best bet will be to follow Frank home from the Alibi room.
I don't think flashing money around would help - it would just be another reason to be suspicious.
Comments from author:
When it's one 19-20 year old, one 17 yo, one 15 yo, and 3 more younger, with no other income, well, they have to do all that just to get by.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [14 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Sordid Saturday." from Gideon
Review:
Oh dear, I Fiona starts hiding it will be even more difficult to find her :) I wonder what the Slayers will think when they track Frank down to the Alibi room? Please continue with your very engaging story.
Comments from author:
Thank you for reading. It might take them a while - since they were sent to bars in a different direction, that haven't let Frank in for years.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Sordid Saturday." from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Still unfamiliar with the series... though the descrioption of the family is slightly worrying...

I look forward to see what you'll do with it.
Comments from author:
These are the poorest of the poor. You've heard of white collar and blue collar? These are no-collar.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Sordid Saturday." from CPTSkip
Review:
Very good job. Your characters read like the canon ones on TV, poor darlings. I look forward to seeing where your story goes from here.
Comments from author:
Ah! someone who has seen it! Thank you. that was one of the things I was going for. Trying to remain totally in-character, especially as the two series collide, and what will happen there.
Review By [CPTSkip] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Sordid Saturday." from AllenPitt
Review:
They should have brought Faith with them, she'd understand the mindset a lot easier. Willow is too upper middle class to understand the concerns when someone shows up asking for them.
Comments from author:
It's not Willow. She found out about Fiona, but sent Vi.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Screwed Up Friday." from AllenPitt
Review:
This will be a tough recruitment, for sure. I don't see Fiona leaving to go to Slayer Academy, for sure. Will ask if there's a salary for slaying. Who knows, now there might be one. Also since there are so many slayers now, there wouldn't be a lot of pressure to get every single one of them to 'sign up', I'd think.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [13 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Screwed Up Friday." from Gideon
Review:
More connections to the darker side of life. I love it! The universe building is very good and the different voices of Frank and Fiona were pretty distinct. Looks like contact is about to be made.
Comments from author:
Yeah, I was trying to fall asleep, when the idea that Frank [in canon pretty much as described here, or even worse] might actually have a reason to drink so much. The rest just fell into place.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [12 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Typical Thursday?" from Gideon
Review:
Looks like a family that could use some help :) That is much more likely now than before when becoming a Slayer meant you were taken from your family. I hope Buffy is able to approach this one with some sensitivity.
I liked the subtle touches on senses and strength that have changed for Fiona, even if she hasn't realised it yet.
Comments from author:
Yeah, if you never have need of those abilities, never have abrupt adrenaline surges, they might come on gradually. And, while the Gallaghers might accept pay, there is no way Fiona would leave the rest alone. Which could cause conflict with the recruiters. Which is the basis of a decent story, conflict, yes?
Review By [Gideon] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "A Typical Thursday?" from AllenPitt
Review:
Surprise crossover. I like it so far. She is not going to be happy to have all that "You are a slayer!" stuff. Might ask if it pays well. 'cause she's barely making ends meet as it is, no time for extra un-paid stuff. Hm, shouldn't she be having the dreams? Maybe she is and just ignores them?
Comments from author:
I recall that some potentials got the dreams too. So, if she's always had them . . .
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "A Typical Thursday?" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Completely unfamiliar with this series. I will see where it will lead me.

Thanks for writing
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [11 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Chicago Slayer." from Gideon
Review:
I don't know anything about Shameless or Fiona so I hope there is more coming so we can learn how "different" she is :)
Review By [Gideon] • Date [9 Mar 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Chicago Slayer." from Valandar
Review:
If I knew the slightest thing about Shameless, I might understand why this is more than it seems. :P Well writen, but "Surprise Crossovers" tend to work better with really popular stuff, not relatively new stuff (unles they're blockbusters, etc).
Comments from author:
I recommend it, but only to mature audiences. Still, there was no Shameless category, and I found this one first. But, I'll keep that in mind.
Review By [Valandar] • Date [9 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Page: 1 of 2 next end
StoryReviewsStatisticsRelated StoriesTracking