Ok not a bad collection of snippets, but not really a story with a plot. Hopefully these will help you set little background things for the hogwarts years, but all I really got from them is that Harry is with Aoife, Colin Hermione and Harry know each other from prior to hogwarts and a noodle incident happened in the Shara between Snape,Lupin, and the Fae. That's about it.
You haven't shown how Harry was raised; what changes in his outlook, etc. I look forward to reading more, but hope you tighten (and include) the plot exposition a bit.
Comments from author:
Fair enough. Thank you for your honest review. I'll try to follow your advice in the future. Good luck with your own works!
Review of chapter "Hermione's night-time adventure" from SamDragon
Review:
I wonder where she landed?
Comments from author:
I have no idea, your guess is as good as mine.
Review By [SamDragon] • Date [7 Apr 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Hermione Grainger" from firehedgehog
Review:
at this rate harry will know all the muggleborns of his year before he even goes to hogwarts
Comments from author:
Yup. Maybe...
Review By [firehedgehog] • Date [2 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Hermione Grainger" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
At this rate, I have to wonder how long it'll be before the Weasleys or Malfoy show up...
(Just to clarify, I was aware that Lupin was just considered an 'honourary' Fae; I just meant that I would have expected people to recognise that he was trying to suppress his wolf because he couldn't control it rather than because he hated the concept of becoming a werewolf in general, and hence might accept that part of himself if they could provide him with some way of ensuring that it wouldn't start tearing everyone around him to pieces)
Comments from author:
Hmm. Maybe you have a point. And the Weasleys & Malfoy aren't going to be around until the next couple of chapters or so.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [2 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Unpleasant developments" from MarcusSLazarus
Review:
Shouldn't there be a distinction between Dyson's breed and Lupin's, given that Dyson can definitely control his wolf-form where Lupin only suppresses his wolf because he can't control it?
Comments from author:
There is: Lupin is something of an 'honorary Fae' at least by some Fae standards (Lupin would disagree, probably.) I believe I've mentioned it in this text. Sorry if it's unclear.
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [28 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Neville Longbottom and his relatives" from justapiranha
Review:
I don't know to much about the fea in this fic but you put in enough detail to figure it out all-in-all a good fic so far.
Comments from author:
Why, thank you!
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [27 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Amanda Bones" from SusanAnthony
Review:
I am not familiar with Aoife but I am enjoying this story very much.
Comments from author:
Thank you!
Review By [SusanAnthony] • Date [25 Mar 12] • Not Rated
I'm actually clueless when it comes to the cross but it's still got me curious that I read every update to see what is going to happen and where this is going to go.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review. I really appreciate it!
Review By [Jaylynn] • Date [23 Mar 12] • Not Rated