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Review of chapter "Rife" from (Past Donor)Charlotte
Review:
I really enjoyed this and am hoping that you will update soon.
Comments from author:
I'm glad you enjoyed it.

I am three and four fifths chapters away from finishing my first original novel, and I'm planning to return to fan fiction during my "break" between novels. This one is actually my first story on the list to finish/update once Right of Succession is available in print.
Review By [(Past Donor)Charlotte] • Date [14 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Tea's the Thing" from VillageOrchid
Review:
Interesting.... non-crossover I'm guessing. Well haven't seen the new show, but from all of the fan fics I've read so far modern!Sherlock is annoying. Original!Sherlock was interesting not just for deductions but also for the fact that he "pioneered" forensics specializing in London specific details. I'm not sure how they picked up his advanced knowledge for that and how he is distinctive in the modern day.
Comments from author:
Not a crossover, this one, no.

Moffet seems to have played down Sherlock's drug use and exaggerated his autistic traites for the modern retelling. It makes sense given the attention to drug use and the prevalence of autism in today's world. He seems to have the layout of the entire city memorized, possibly one of his obsessions. (Asperger's is marked by a lack of understanding or control when it comes to social interactions, amassing an incredible amount of knowledge about their obsessions, as well as the sensory integration issues found in every variant and functionality on the autism spectrum.) He still has his network, having befriended many of the homeless and being owed favors by many in the city, and he's continually conducting experiments for new forensic data both off and on cases.

And yes, those tendencies can be rather annoying at times, even knowing someone with them well enough to read them. Though once you get to know them and have an understanding of where they're coming from, no more so than anyone else. You see that with John as the series goes on.
Review By [VillageOrchid] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Tea's the Thing" from misdom
Review:
I'm really liking this. Only real comment would be that it would nice if you said it was based off the new show, and not the movie or the books or the old show.

But the story is good. I was worried about a Mary-Sue but she isn't.
Comments from author:
Good point. I tried to file it under the Sherlock in the television section, but it kept redirecting. The fact it's based on the BBC series has been added to my author's note.

I'm glad you're enjoying it. And being Mary-Sueish is always a concern with an original character. I'm happy to hear she isn't coming off as one.
Review By [misdom] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The Tea's the Thing" from draconis
Review:
You're doing fine on the low-key humor, and on capturing the essence of the new show.

It seems very, very odd that the first thing they turn to...and more importantly wait on...is a field book for information on "borage" when they obviously have access to the internet. One might also think Dr. Watson (as many doctors do) might have "professionals only" access to specialized medical websites on medicinal and homeopathic compounds.

I would also think that the crime lab has online access to a substantial database on toxins, and more specifically, how they might be used for murder...including doses, delivery forms and mechanisms, sources (commercial suppliers, hospitals, private labs, in nature, etc), list of criminals who have used them in past crimes, etc.
Comments from author:
Thank you.

It is, yes, but in the series the two don't seem to actually have access to Bart's database. Neither actually work for the hospital or Scotland Yard, so it's doubtful they'd be allowed in. I rather get the impression they only get into the morgue and labs at Bart's because of Molly's good graces. They work almost exclusively on their laptops and phones when it comes to research beyond lab equipment and dead bodies. I had in mind with Sherlock turning back to the laptop that he was looking up further information on borage after filing the information on McDoogle's career as having a possible connection but irrelevant with the current information. But the story's told from John's point-of-view, so we don't hear that. Sherlock simply ignores the information John finds in the field guide because he'd already come to the same conclusions in his own research and even found how it caused the reactions in his own research, which is how he explained it to John in chapter five. And it does take a while to dig through and find anything on it beyond it's uses as an herb and in beauty products.

Besides, later in the series, John strikes me as one who'll mostly step back and let Sherlock work things out on a "one off" case like this because it keeps him happily occupied. If there were additional lives on the line, no, but with the damage already done and no reason to think the killer will strike again, he'd get distracted by other things and not even think of a reference he rarely if ever uses in his day job as a GP.
Review By [draconis] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The Northton Connection" from Sahugani
Review:
Like what you've done so far, keep it coming :)

So Jennifer is from good old Huntsville eh?
Comments from author:
Yep. Given how unexpected some folks find the way Huntsvillians talk, I couldn't resist. Plus, I figured it'd make Jennifer's reactions to Sherlock more believable. R&D towns end up with a large percent of their population falling somewhere on the autism spectrum, and a lot of Sherlock's behavior is classic Asperger's.

I'm glad you like it. Thanks for reviewing.
Review By [Sahugani] • Date [29 Mar 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Mrs. McDoogle" from tosca
Review:
Interesting start (and a very funny Sherlock reaction!). Looking forward to seeing how it unfolds.
Comments from author:
You mean I actually got a chuckle or two? I've always sucked at writing humor, so that means a lot to me. :)
Review By [tosca] • Date [28 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mrs. McDoogle" from Jazzibear
Review:
I’ve contrived to submit the review twice. Sorry!
Review By [Jazzibear] • Date [27 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mrs. McDoogle" from Jazzibear
Review:
This looks to be very interesting and I much look forward to reading more. There are tantalising hints of things going on, and no doubt in time we shall discover which are genuine leads and which are red herrings – just what is needed to captivate readers. Consider me captivated, if you please.

A few points have caught my eye (I have spent many years straightening out scientists’ scripts, and by now the process is entirely automatic). No criticism is intended.

I had got a good deal further on setting down my thoughts earlier, at which point my computer ate the whole review, so I’ll mention just one thing for now. I’ll return to the review with further thoughts if you give me the slightest encouragement.

Conan Doyle is absolutely never to be Sir Doyle. He was/is Sir Arthur Conan Doyle or, less formally, Sir Arthur. I suspect the use of knighthoods started before people had surnames. It occurs to me that as a qualified physician he could have been styled Dr Sir Arthur Conan Doyle. (This sort of thing can become somewhat or even distinctly cumbersome – in my church-organ-playing days I encountered the music of the Reverend Dr Sir Frederick Gore-Ouseley. Such a mouthful!)
Comments from author:
Fixed, thank you. I had something nagging me it wasn't right, but I wasn't sure on that one.

And if you see a few points, please do point them out. I'd originally planned to go into biochemistry, but unsteady hands and dyslexia/dysgraphia kept me out of it. Other than what I can get from the odd and end papers and articles I read, most of my information is a decade or more out of date. Even then, the most I managed in the sciences was a minor in biology.

I know what I'm wanting to do, but I'm struggling with the technicalities of it.
Review By [Jazzibear] • Date [27 Mar 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Mrs. McDoogle" from Bugeyedmonster
Review:
Eagerly anticipating the rest.
Review By [Bugeyedmonster] • Date [27 Mar 12] • Not Rated
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