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Review of chapter "Two Steps From Hell" from CaptMcIntyre
Review:
*...for a few moments, the crowd sits in stunned silence, before rising as one as they go wild!!!!* That scene is well and truly NAILED! Absolutely spot on! About the only way that chapter could have been better is if you included a few more scenes, like her coming out with the other contestants (in her swimsuit...what can I say, Dawn is hot! lol) Or her backstage, feeling a little nervous before the Xan-man comes in to give her the pep talk (cause hey, it's what he does.) But for the scene itself, and the music that went with it...perfect!
Comments from author:
=D

Well... I didn't say I wouldn't revisit the rest of the show ;)

I'm thinking, though, that my next chapter is going to be called 'Code Tuesday'... which should be a huge hint as to what is going on.

One thing I did do when making these choices was to watch the eps and pick out actual 'drawn characters' to represent the Scoobies where possible... For example, there's a scene in the engine room where Dr. Lang is talking to Captain Gloval, and there's a red-haired engineer in the background...

And one of the contestants in Miss Macross is a tall, thin, long-haired brunette in a green one-piece ;) (As I recall, she's near the left end of the lineup when they announce the winner)
Review By [CaptMcIntyre] • Date [17 Feb 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Two Steps From Hell" from skychan
Review:
I did not actually read them with sound, I'm afraid I can't do so where I am at the moment.
Comments from author:
No Problem. If you get a chance, I'd like to know if they work with the descriptions as well as they seem to in my head.
Review By [skychan] • Date [12 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Two Steps From Hell" from skychan
Review:
Nice little chapter, though I'm a little confsued as its been a bit since I read the rest.

Was this Dawn's "skill?" and is the population aware of demons generally?

I think I've forgotten and may need to reread from the begining.
Comments from author:
Dawn's talent was 'Martial Arts', something notoriously hard to demonstrate solo effectively. And while Dawn is not a slayer, she trains alongside them and against them.

I was going to do an intermediary chapter setting up the talent portion of Miss Macross, but I couldn't come up with anything that really worked. (Minmei's 16th birthday is the ep between 'Bye Bye Mars' and 'Miss Macross' and nothing of worth happened there to build off of.) Dawn decided that she would use her talent to tell her sister's story. I haven't gone into things with the decision to reveal the supernatural openly, but that is coming in the story. This is just laying the groundwork for that.

Out of curiosity, did you read each chapter with the music playing?
Review By [skychan] • Date [12 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "God of War" from Barona
Review:
Nice to see a good Robotech/BVS crossover. Slayer Squadron does seem to be quite the match for Veritechs, especially as you write them. Hope you can find the mojo to continue this.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review... and I hope you like the latest chapter!
Review By [Barona] • Date [4 Feb 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "God of War" from skychan
Review:
I love it. There really do need to be more Robotech stories, and the way you integrated this one is perfect. I hope that you will continue to write and look forward to seeing more come out of it. Especially with Miriya and Max. How those two get involved will be interesting with slayers aboard.
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review!

I need to rewatch a couple of Robotech eps before I dive into the next chapters... I'm getting close to closing out one of the early arcs, as 'Talent Show' will be coming up soon (or Miss Macross). Of course that entire chapter will be one huge-long sparing match and I definitely want it to come across smooth and artistic, so I'm really taking my time on crafting it. Mainly because it becomes the 'big public reveal' on the slayers...
Review By [skychan] • Date [23 Aug 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "God of War" from DarthTenebrus
Review:
HOO-rah! That's all I gotta say about this! That got my blood pumping and took me back to the good ole days!
Comments from author:
Glad you enjoyed it DT! Now if I can just get Dawn's talent for Miss Macross to flow properly =D
Review By [DarthTenebrus] • Date [20 May 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "God of War" from Vianca
Review:
Might I suggest you watch/read 'Eureka 7'?
http://mangafox.me/manga/eureka_seven/

As for why?
The mechs in that serie have a flight, robot & verhincel mode.
The verhincel mode looks the most like a six wieled(?) racecar, but they should be able to pull a trailer like rig if it's been given a tractor adaptor (those roadtrains use them for the trailers behind the first one).
It might even be possible to give them a diving mode, so it's a shape with potential.

This would give Xander his salvage crew the ability to salvage the battlefield more easily and way earlier, meaning the SDF-1 could leaf that aria way earlier then otherwise.
You would only need to think-up a multi-enviroment(?) trailer, so you can keep their amount down and thus critical.
I can see some of those trailers being used as mobile suit trailers like in the serie's Gundam (all versions) and Patlabor.
Later you could use a version of them as a police verhicel, if you would want too.
I mean, when it's possible to buy mechs, the law might just buy a few as a swat style counter team, at the minium.

I never thought about it before, but something just clicked because you made Xander the leader the Mars salvage team, I can't see him not wanting to have the ability to fight if needed.
And it would have to be multi-purpose(?) from the start.
It even gives you a way how rebel groups could later get their hands on mechs, when almost every one on Earth was trashed.
But at the same time, they could stop some of the Zentreadi going rouge at a later date.

Anyway, till the next time.
Remember, it's your story, nobody's else.
I just ask that you keep a eye on the ripple effect the Btvs crew might cause with their precents.
The above was just a suggestion to keep Xander quite.

Edit:
I was suspecting something like that already, but thought I might as well tell you off my odd thought.
Perhaps something for a omake?
Atleast it shows you a direction were some of Xander's frustrations come from.
Hell, how do they transport malfuntion destriods anyway?
They would have to start with destroid to car mode, so if that is a failure, Xander will be very frustrated, I think.
http://www.mahq.net/mecha/eureka7/eureka7-tv/index.htm
Comments from author:
Nice idea Vianca, but this is a Robotech cross only and while I'm playing fast and loose with weapons systems names, I'm not incorporating anything that didn't visually exist in the series.
Review By [Vianca] • Date [19 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "God of War" from Nightscream
Review:
Nice, "The Last Star Fighter" reference at the end! :D

Glad to see you updating again, I love this fic!
Comments from author:
Yeah, I needed something to call the system Willow came up with... and then 'Andrew the Geek' in my head sat up and made the call...

Of course he had /no/ idea that Dawn had watched that movie with Xander several times and would make the connection she did. ;)

Not sure how soon the next chapter will be out. I need to pull out by Robotech DVDs and figure out if I need to slip another chapter in before the Miss Macross competition. =D
Review By [Nightscream] • Date [19 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Raw Recruits" from LFW
Review:
I like the building of Buffy and Dawn on the SDF but what about spending sometime on Giles, Andrew, Xander and Wood?
Thanks
Looking forward to more
Comments from author:
*nods* I've done some work with Willow and Xander, but I agree, my focus has mostly been on Buffy and Dawn. Though the heavy Dawn focus should let up in a couple more chapters... I think there've been enough hints for the Protoculture Addicts out there to know what event she's prepping for, but the portion I'm going to show, well it wasn't covered in the episode... I just hope folks like it!

I've got some direction for Andrew as a result of his pairing with Dawn for the Slayer Squadron recon/control element (CatsEye Radar bird) so I should be able to do more with him as I get more comfortable with his character. Andrew will have a slightly larger role to play in Dawn's little game with Buffy soon too.

Giles, I'm a little out of my depth currently. I know I have some important scenes planned for him (Comforting Claudia after Roy's death *rbtch ep 'Goodbye Big Brother'*). If I can get comfortable with writing him, I intend to work him into the official liason with the RDF. (A role Roy is currently filling.) I really want to have a scene with him explaining Vampires and Demons to Exedore, which is one reason I've kinda glossed the explanations with Gloval and Claudia... I'm saving it for the true skeptic.

As to Wood, I may have made a mistake incorporating him into the story, as I'm not really sure what to do with him... unless I make him the Principal of one of the Macross schools. Could you imagine him having to deal with the Minmei fallout, especially /after/ she becomes famous? ;) In the meantime, I think of him as running the IWC HQ in an operational capacity (COO).

I appreciate the questions... it's the kind of thing I would expect a beta to ask me if I had one. =D Thanks for making me think harder about the broader story! (Hint hint to potential betas! I don't want a copy editor, I want someone to tell me 'Hey, this is missing! Give me more!')
Review By [LFW] • Date [4 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Fokker" from Bushranger
Review:
I approve of this and wish to see more.
Comments from author:
Wish Granted
*Cheeky - Vengance Demon for readers of abandoned fanfic stories*

D'Hoffryn approves of your terminology
Review By [Bushranger] • Date [23 May 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters in the Dark" from AlphaBeta
Review:
I am a HUGE Robotech fan. It is great to see more stories for Robotech, as there is not a lot out there. You are also seeming to do a good job bleeding the two. Please keep up the great work and update REAL soon!
Comments from author:
Hmmm... the old saw... quantity or quality (or rather speed or quality)...

Uh... Quality ;) I can't say the next chapter will be 'real soon' but it will be... period. =D


Yeah... Cyclone started an interesting story and then left it hanging back in '03... I felt like there should be something that actually explored that concept fully. Especially since Robotech is such a natural sequential fit (much like Stargate is a natural concurrent fit).

As to 'bleeding' the two ;) Hey, we SLAY the vamps! (lol!)
Review By [AlphaBeta] • Date [9 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Encounters in the Dark" from Mcspender
Review:
What??. I know Roy knows about a looot of things, but how come he knows about the Slayer???.
Cool chapter, see ya!!.
Comments from author:
Wait and see :D
Review By [Mcspender] • Date [8 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Encounters in the Dark" from cjcold
Review:
Nice story.

I really like how Xander was able to give them a faster way to salvage Macross city. I also like the idea of Willow once more embracing her science roots and being in the engineering staff.

I think a lot of easy solutions were overlooked in Robotech. For such a large ship they did a poor job of truly utlizing it to its full capabilities.

Liked the newest chapter, was surprised that Xander didn't end up giving Rick some wisdom from his own years of experience with women.

Interesting twist with Roy knowing of vampires and about the slayer but obviously not being up to date with the latest happenings in the underworld.

More soon please.
Comments from author:
One big thing with Robotech is that they are kinda like the SGC in that they've acquired technology they can use but don't completely understand, and so they're kinda controlled by the technology rather than controlling it.

Would you really want the guy who's dates commonly try to eat or sacrifice him giving advice on women? ;)

And yeah, Roy's an interesting character both in Robotech and also in what I have planned for him... we should learn more about his connection to the slayers and watchers in the next chapter...
Review By [cjcold] • Date [7 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Moving In" from CrystalBlaze
Review:
Vampirism probably won't occur among the Zentraedi and Meltrandi, since (at least in the Palladium game) they are somewhat hypertoughened in their fully enlarged forms. That might not apply as this is the Macross continuity from the UN SPACY references, but they would still have way, way too much blood unless the whole nest got lucky.

Macronising a human-sized Zenvamp or Melvamp is out, too, as I doubt the demonic rider of the moving corpse would survive the process.
Comments from author:
Uh... some things you touch are are currently classified. =) There will be Zentradi vampires and the method will be internally consistent to the story. That toughness will come into play as well. I do, however agree about it taking more than a whole human sized nest to drain one full-size Zentradi.

I'm doing the Robotech storyline rather than any of the original Macross series storylines and my technical backgrounds will come from the novelizations that were written to accompany the series and not from any of the RPGs that were based on the various series. Namely because I've read the books and never played the games.

Thanks for the comment... you've got me plotting how to make it work so the hyperfans will buy in! =D
Review By [CrystalBlaze] • Date [20 Apr 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Shelter" from (Current Donor)Blackswordzero
Review:
Interesting,i just hope you will update soon.
Comments from author:
That's the plan... have about half of 'Moving In' (the next chapter) written now. I was able to put up so many chapters because I already had them done over on fanfiction.net before I found out about this place... If you're familiar with the first series of Robotech, then my intent is to weave the Buffy characters into those events from a different angle, seeing the events through those eyes. So I'm kinda bouncing back and forth between writing the chapters and rewatching the pertinent episodes :D
Review By [(Current Donor)Blackswordzero] • Date [12 Apr 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
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