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Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from Arkaedia
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Read your other new stories. The one with Buffy as Sam and Dean's little sister has definite possibilities. And I'd like to see where you take a SPN/BtVS/SG1 cross. But really the note that you were half done with the next chapter of this baby had me giddy, so I re-read the series...again.

You know what I realized midway through this chapter? I was waiting for Lizzy to go off on the other chosen. "I'm alone, I don't have my shield, everybody is taking my power! Boohoo." When was Buffy ever aloud time to wine like that? She was generally being told that having anybody at her side would just get them killed. Seriously, I felt like she should tell the old chosen that if she didn't like being powerless, then she should Slayer up and Take. It. Back! No friends. No family. No hope. When the chips are down the slayer stands alone. And Wins. No whiners permitted.

Then somewhere along the line I realized something. If the theory that the chosen in this dimension was created to stop the demons from invading from Buffy's dimension was correct, then Buffy's chosen line predates this dimension's entire lineage. After all what else would the demons have been fleeing from? Buffy's not a NEW line, she's the ORIGINAL line. Wow is this council about to get a schooling.

I hope Babs has her cameras running during the next fight. Even weakened Liz is going to unleash havoc among the assassins. Also as her trainer Dick is going to need to see the video. Her training is all Head and Heart: How best to end the undead. This doesn't translate well to an "I don't kill humans" policy. She's having to think her way through every fight. No relying on her instincts or she'll end up with an oops like Faith did. Nightwing is going to have to adjust all of her kata to something less lethal and drill her in it until it's her first response in a fight. I do not envy him this.

See what you do to me! I need the next chapter!
Review By [Arkaedia] • Date [21 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from raxadian
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Relax, at least is not a Monday.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Seven: Counters" from raxadian
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I wonder how she will react to the bonded pendants.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [9 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Six: Connections" from raxadian
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Honesty Buffy, haven't you learned to not trust things from strangers?
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Five: Revealing Shadows" from raxadian
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This is gonna backfire on the immortal somewhat.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Four: Between the Lines" from raxadian
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Better new life? Yeah sure. Without her old memories and slayer powers, her new life would have ended being quite bad. They made her the Joker's daughter after all. And they made her powers magical. No wonder some call them Jerk that Be.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Three: First Blood" from raxadian
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She was a tad overconfident, wasn't she? True, most demons and vampires don't use guns.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Two: The Date" from raxadian
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It seems that DC world watchers are more of big jerks than the originals.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: The Comings" from raxadian
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Bastards, all of them...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [8 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from Morgomir
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Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [4 Jan 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from bradsan
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Big mistake. Buffy/Elizabeth is The Chosen One maybe from a different dimension but she is The Chosen One. So we have two Chosen ones in one world. One is chained and bonded and the other one not.

Wonder which powers will survive because I can't see Buffy's own/old powers let go of Buffy. They didn't leave her when she died several times and came back, so I can't see them giving up this time. They want to stay with her they choose her freely. The visions showed it and her deaths proves that much.

When Elizabeth and consort will find the solution to cut of the new powers her own powers will gain their strength. Oh boy are they in for a surprise. They will facing a different Chosen One than they are used too. This one knows how to fight dirty, can think on her feet, is a really good strategist, rather intelligent and has a knowledge from her former live which gives a different and probably unpredictable Chosen One/warrior. One who will beat the shit out of them. Oh and they try to mess with her 'boyfriend' and the ones she considered hers. Oh boy they are so screwed.

Loved the interaction between Buffy/Tim and Alfred and she is so right. Alfred controls everything just like a mom. 'lol'

When this story is finished I'm gone read it again.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [7 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from Eureka
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Good chapter! Would have been nice if it hadn't have taken so long but there must be some reason for it.
Have to say I read reviews and as I was reading the story I didn't really take the time to critique the spelling and such it kinda held me spellbound so I didn't notice if there were spelling errors. That is what a good story is supposed to do. Keep up the good work and please not such a long time for the next update please.
Review By [Eureka] • Date [6 Dec 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from justapiranha
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I have so been waiting for this update. took me two days to read it on my lunch breaks, and you leave me with another cliffhanger. oh well i'm still in my happy place just seeing an update.
Review By [justapiranha] • Date [4 Dec 13] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from Arkaedia
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God I love these updates. I'd wish for them to happen more often, but we avoid the W word.

You are having too much fun with this bra thing, and I keep waiting for Buffy to cave and promise that next time she'll keep the bra and throw the towel, then just stand there smirking as Tim's mind wanders off picturing That!

Love it!
Review By [Arkaedia] • Date [3 Dec 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Eight: At Razor's Edge" from HMaxMarius
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Hi,

First off, I /am/ enjoying this. No ifs, ands or buts. I really like your take on Buffy/Elizabeth in the Batclan...

However, there was one thing on this chapter that knocked me out of reading for a bit... That is one particular spelling error. 'Bounds' instead of 'Bonds' or 'Bindings'. You see, several years ago I was taking a 'financial markets' class as part of my degree and the instructor was an Iranian expat. Well, needless to say, he pronounced 'stocks and bonds' as 'stocks and bounds', so seeing 'bounds' used repeatedly in place of 'bonds' or 'bindings' in the chapter suddenly tripped my inner-ear and I was hearing the story read aloud, by him, with his accent... 0.o Made it kinda hard to plow through for a bit ;)

Also, through the latter third of the chapter, the grammar suffered a bit from some missing articles and extra 's's. Should you decide to correct the 'bounds' you might make an editing pass through the back half.

Keep up the great work though! You have a really intriguing story and I'm anxiously awaiting the next installment!
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [3 Dec 13] • Not Rated
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