Sad, you never got around to the sequel. It is fun rereading this, but I still long for more. Thanx for what you did put out!

Joyce for 60 gold? I can see his powers are a great temptation!

What happens if you bless a water elemental and then have it
attack vampires?


-That I will do all I can to save, to nurture, and to lend a hand
to any living creature in need of help.

Hitler could have used a hand in his final days. That's just one
of the many examples for how that vow just screwed everything over.

The soul is not guilty of the vampire's crimes, they are two different people.
Why are people being punished for the actions of demons using their body
after they were dead and gone? Du went after her soul, which really is
probably a greater sin than murder. Xander has deliberately yanked William's
soul out of the afterlife to make it suffer for crimes a demon committed with
his body after he was gone. So much for power not corrupting him.


Multiple rings of Amarra? There should have only been one and he was forced
to make the others.


-“Come on, what do you think will give a man a single moment of happiness? It's
sex of course.”

I still say that was just because of how shallow Angel is.

Cordelia shouldn't be involved. She's still a popularity obsessed biatch with a thing for Angel at this point. Angel was just coming around himself. Willow had a thing for Xander the size of the hellmouth... The characters hadn't come into their full character growth and are vastly different than the later season versions.

This is a wonderful story. I never could have come up with the ideas you incorporated. Well done. I can't wait to read the sequel.

As far as ideas go for the sequel, I only have one. Since Dawn is the Key and under Xan's protection, I would love for him to train her and end up with them traveling through the multi-verse going from one fandom 'verse to another.

After reading so many of your stories, it gets amusing rather than irritating that you manage to seriously overpower the good guys in almost no time (At least in most of your Buffy crossovers; 'Phantom Brave' and 'Technological Ninja Naruto Uzumaki' at least seem tame in that regard, and 'Master of forbidden Seals' would have been tame too if it weren't for the sheer number of characters involved)
In this one, you really outdid yourself in the overpowering department, that's for certain. Seriously, you would unleash in the Stargate Universe someone who can disassemble and then make unlimited number of copies of Atlantis, or Lantean Battlecruisers if he gets to the Orion and the s, and on top of that can make items that increase people's intelligence so humans would be able to figure out the Ancient Tech easily? where would be the fun of that? Exactly what could you possibly come up with to give the Gang a challenge?
Now, with a risk to irritate you by nagging, as I wrote to you on the matter on the FF.net's Personal message system, and then in a review for 'Apprentice to a Hero', I'd like to ask you for permission to use one of your setups to write a story of my own. I'm interested in the 'Apprentice', as I have never written a Naruto story before, 'Master of Orion' and 'Arm Commander, Alexander' (judging from what I found uploaded, those two stories have never really started in the first place, despite the high possibilities the setup offers)

A cracking good version of an empowered Xander through his Halloween experience.

nice ending/beginning...looking forward to when Xander encounters Apophis&Klorel's Hatak ships...was wondering Xander wil encounter a Destiny Seed class seedship or at least have the facilities to make more stargates or even a cityship...Earth is supposed to be the capital of the exiled Alteran civilization...which means that the solar system is littered with their junk....if the Alkesh had Alteran sensors, it should detect the cities under the glaciers of Antarctica...

A fun story which ends at a good place from the point of view of narrative structure, but it really feels like it needs a sequel to close the high-level story arc. Here's hoping you don't take too long a break before starting on one. :)

(Sorry for the confusing initial review draft. I'm hot and drowsy.)

love it!! great story!!!!!!!!!!

Great story. Keep up the good work.

ok sweet story! would like to see xander deconstruct the lantean outpost on earth though and
maybe get a new power like the ability to upgrade and repair buildings/craft ect!

I look forward to seeing book 2. I do wonder if you will have Xander build an empire to fight the Goa'uld, Wraith, and Ori. Or something else.

Very nice premise. Some points in no particular order:

-The story could be bigger and more elaborate, specifically from the point where Xander started building in the desert the story seems rushed with some world-building and little character growth. As it stands now the story feels more like a prologue or a setup for a future story then anything else.
-Xander himself: Zeppo to godlike in 30 days tops. Good storytelling would display his thoughts and emotions on the changes that happened and the weight of the world suddenly on his back. Aside from the OMG I'm undead moment he seems a bit bland about everything that is happening. He is a geek who just got godlike powers. He would either freak, throw a party or do an epic Aaaaaaw Yeeeeeeah every time he is reminded as to what he is now. Blood drinking seems the only bummer to me... Poor poor Xander without his (mostly fannon) Twinkies...
-Stargate crossover... A bit old but on the positive side you have a massive universe to play with.
-Other characters feel at times like cardboard cutouts.

Good story, intriguing premise, no large grammar issues*. Very rushed on the Overwhelming scale. Infinite gold cheat? Lazy. :P

Now the question is... What do you have cooked up that will pose a problem to a man (god?) who can basically land on a planet and spam an army in a few hours and repeat the same ad nauseum?


*at least none that actually broke me from immersion.

I dislike giving negative reviews, but this fic was made of fail.
The grammar was gruesome, the spelling subpar, the plot was pitiful, and pacing pathetic.
I would highly suggest learning to conjugate properly, or failing that, find yourself an editor/beta reader.

Also, why the hell would a Lantean use an Al'kesh, a Goa'uld ship, when their own ships are so vastly in advance of the Goa'uld?