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Review of chapter "Chapter 9: The Sisters Bond" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 9: The Sisters Bond" from bradsan
Review:
Glad you took your time to update. I love it and can't what will come next.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [14 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Sunnydale" from bradsan
Review:
Oh Giles will be shocked when he finds out. I already can see him taking off his glasses and starting cleaning. If he ever finds out. To me the Scoobies and Giles will never find out, but I can't influence what you write. I only hope when he ever finds out. That he won't tell the Council about Buffy becoming a witch or even being alive. A well when Cole falls in love with Buffy The Council will regret if they ever try to hurt Buffy. She will be well protected with all those white lighters, witches and even demons who care about her.

thanks for updating and have fun writing the next chapter.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Sunnydale" from CageFire
Review:
Uhm, okay. Couple things. I think the whole joyce with spike thing was rather extreme, and also I just checked the wiki to be sure, but in canon she doesn't get the explosion power until after prue's death. However, I'm guessing you're changing that in this series. I also can't find anything referencing /when/ in the series this is taking place, so I'm not sure about the timeline of this fic.

Oh well, whatever. I'm curious what buffy's power will be. Will she just be taking paige's place or what?
Comments from author:
Actually Piper gets molecular combustion sometime in the third season. Remember how she tried to kill shax by blowing him up and it didn't work? And since Cole comes in on the very first episode of the third season, I am actually adding in what happened when Buffy ran away in the second season of Buffy and crossing it over with the Charmed ending of season two also, if that make any sense? Also Buffy is taking Paige's place in Charmed.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 8: Sunnydale" from WolfWriter
Review:
RIPPER'S HERE!!!!

Love the interaction with him and Joyce. Not to mention Spike. I'm assuming that Drusilla is dust in the wind???

Hopefully, Joyce will end up deader than the proverbial doornail. Just don't let her rise after however many days. We don't need Vampire!Joyce in the mix. Her as a human is bad enough.

I bet even Spike is going to be ticked at the way she's treated Buffy.

This story is getting better and better.
Review By [WolfWriter] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: The Charmed Slayer" from (Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard
Review:
great chapters though I am interested to see what powers she will have - for example shape sifting (animals) - it fits with the whole slayer thing
Review By [(Recent Donor)SlayerandWereLeopard] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: The Charmed Slayer" from AllenPitt
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So..Buffy will probably be able to Orb, maybe Heal; plus one Halliwell power. She's already got slayer dreams; though I suppose if she got Phoebe's type of visions, that'd just become stronger. PLUS the whole "if you chant it in a rhyme, it happens" spell ability (which is really the greatest ability they have, they just don't use it much). ... potion making.
Willow would be jealous. Took her years to get to that level. Hm, I wonder if they can summon/rescue Angel? Anyway--one wonders how the Elders will react to all this. Did the PTBs know she was a Halliwell? etc.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 7: The Charmed Slayer" from CageFire
Review:
Great new chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One: Angry Outbursts" from BlueEyedJedi
Review:
Will Buffy's new power, erase her slayerness? (Faith would be THE SLAYER.) Will it enhace her slayer power, or just be totally separate? I am eager to find out.
Review By [BlueEyedJedi] • Date [26 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Buffy, a Slayer and a Charmed One?" from CageFire
Review:
Great story, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [25 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Buffy, a Slayer and a Charmed One?" from nightshadowlife
Review:
Can't wait to see where you go from here :D
Review By [nightshadowlife] • Date [25 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 6: Buffy, a Slayer and a Charmed One?" from bradsan
Review:
OMG you made me cry at last chapter. The second time a read it I got tears in my eyes.

Meaning you did good. Keep writing, I will keep reading.

One question I'm not criticizing it's really a question. Why don't you meld the chapters together, you will get longer chapters and less shorter ones. I noticed that chapters can be meld even when you are writing Buffy's view or her sisters. Many writers do it that way. I'm not complaining I like the updates but it would give you really long chapters. Only problem will be that an update would take more time.

Again you did good. If you can make me cry you hit the right spot. Congratulations.

NEXT
Comments from author:
Awhh thank you sooo much for your wonderful review! That just made my day *smiles happily*

As for your question I'll see what I can do, but like you said it will take longer to update. I also will be working with a co-author and she will be helping me with the story. Hopefully I will be giving more updates more often.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [22 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 5: The Fourth Sister" from AllenPitt
Review:
Finding out that Sam & their mother had an affair will be a shocker. Next up: Buffy has Halliwell powers, but bound. Will that be undone? Will there be a "power of 4" ?
Will Joyce regret what she did? And..with Faith in a coma, there's no active slayer in Sunnydale now.
Comments from author:
Buffy's powers aren't bound. When the sisters lost Prue and found out Paige was their sister in the show Paige's powers weren't bound either. Plus it hasn't even started in on season three for either charmed or Buffy so Faith isn't even in Sunnydale right now.
Review By [AllenPitt] • Date [22 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Buffy's Reseach" from bradsan
Review:
Darn this one was very short, don't get me wrong I'm glad you updated because it means you are still writing. I hope the next one is longer.

Now one small thing which could have a big impact on the story.

The prophecy of the Slayer goes like this and not how you wrote it.
Into every generation, there is a chosen one.
One girl in all the world.
She alone will wield the strength and skill to stand against the vampires, the demons, and the forces of darkness; To stop the spread of their evil and the swell of their numbers.
She is the Slayer

You wrote: she protects the human race which means she can't do anything against humans who goes evil or made a pact with the Devil. Meaning dark witches, warlocks etc.
If you had wrote "she protect the innocence" it would give it whole other meaning.

In the original prophecy she can fight and kill everything, doesn't mean she has to but she could if necessary. It's not in Buffy's nature to kill humans or innocence demons.

Well I already said it's a small thing but the impact could be huge on the story, every story.

keep writing and I will keep reading. Oh and don't listen to bad reviews. Read, learn and use what you need from them, but it's your story and you are the one who knows where it's going to.

Happy writing and update soon, hoping for a longer chapter this time.
Comments from author:
Thank you so much for correcting me :) I will fix it asap. You are right, it is a small thing that makes a big impact. Also thank you so much for your reviews. :)
Review By [bradsan] • Date [9 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 4: Buffy's Reseach" from TheElegantFaerie
Review:
Yay! An update! I can't wait for the next one! Will Buffy meet her sisters in the next one?
Comments from author:
Yes Buffy will be meeting her sisters in the next chapter. I have a few ideas on how she will meet the sisters, but I was wondering if you would like to co-write with me? :) With your help I'll be able to post better chapters, and considering my health is failing on me, it would be much appreciated. :)
Review By [TheElegantFaerie] • Date [8 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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