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Review of chapter "Jennifer & the Debriefing, Part V: Summers" from nargus
Review:
Mmm...the last two chapters feel a bit info dump. But not too bad if things move on soon. Plus this came after the 'sex scene' (kinda) with supposedly 'demon'. So I guess it balance out :3
Comments from author:
Well, I did warn you that Jennifer's section was five chapters. :D
Review By [nargus] • Date [23 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sam and the Escapee" from nargus
Review:
*giggles* Ohhh...I love this chapter.
Comments from author:
:D Thanks. I had a lot of fun writing this story, and parts of it just flowed even faster than I can type.
Review By [nargus] • Date [22 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue – Two Months Later" from DieselDriver
Review:
I like "N-Sock" as the pronunciation.
Comments from author:
I think it should be pronounced 'throat-warbler-mangrove'. Oh wait, wrong crossover. :D
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Jennifer & the Debriefing, Part IV: Harris&Friends" from DieselDriver
Review:
Very easy to see how both groups would get the entirely wrong impression of the other.
Comments from author:
Yes. Particularly since what each group does is unbelievable, and each group will have its own misconceptions of the situation.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xander and the Medical Exam" from DieselDriver
Review:
Best way to get through an MRI is to wear a set of really good earplugs and go to sleep.
Comments from author:
Earplugs, definitely.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Paul and the Girls’ School" from DieselDriver
Review:
"Did girls’ schools in Cleveland get many attacks from Viking marauders?"

If they had an attack from Viking marauders, and IF any of the Vikings survived to return home and tell stories, none of them would ever come back to attack again. I can see the whole thing being over in less than 15 minutes... No surviving attackers. It would be like the marauders were swallowed by the Midgard Serpent. Gone without a trace.
Comments from author:
Yeah. Someone capable of hacking half a dozen vampires to pieces in a matter of seconds is not going to have a lot of trouble with mere humans.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Daniel and the Breakfast" from DieselDriver
Review:
They're all wrong. Hostess powdered donettes are the best.
Comments from author:
Hostess cupcakes. Chocolate cake, chocolate frosting, creamy filling... Mmmm.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Sam and the Spy" from DieselDriver
Review:
Just like last time I spent most of this chapter giggling to myself and chortling uncontrollably.
Comments from author:
That is pretty much what I was aiming for.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xander and the Dinner Order" from DieselDriver
Review:
Very nice to have a poison protecting symbiont (as opposed to the parasitic Gooly, er Goulie, oh well, never could remember the right place to put the ').
Comments from author:
Just call it a Gould like Jack does. (I spell his pronunciation like Harold Gould the late actor.) Since it's not an English word, you get a lot of flexibility in spelling the transliteration.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xander and the Problem" from DieselDriver
Review:
Ok, I'm going to have to find and finally watch the SG1 videos my brother bought me for Christmas a couple of years ago. I think this is the 3rd time I'm reading this. I was thinking about something I'd enjoy re-reading, not in the mood for something new this morning and after reading the current post of "Hermione, etc." I knew it had to be one of your stories. I thought about the Reality Theory Big Bang one but decided on this one. It was really a toss up.

To anyone not familiar with Diane's writing, be prepared to be spoiled for almost anyone else's stories.
Comments from author:
I really did not like 'Stargate' the movie even though it had a nice climax that is obviously set up by half a dozen plot points along the way. So I didn't watch the tv show at first. Then one night I was changing channels about midnight and I hit this awesome show and I had no idea what it was. It was Richard Dean Anderson's Stargate SG-1. After that, I watched it incessantly. The first season basically set up the premise and did the world-building as the writers figured things out, so it did a lot of the Monster Of The Week thing (like Buffy did in seasons 1 and 2) as it came to grips with its potential. It gets better. I have to admit I lost interest as RDA did less and less on the show, and I basically stopped watching in season 9.
Review By [DieselDriver] • Date [4 Jan 15] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Xander and the Fruity Beverages" from SlickRCBD
Review:
One small mistake. Anise is the Tokra symbiote. Freya is the host.
Normally when the eyes flash like that, it signifies the symbiote taking control, not relinquishing control to the host.

If anything, you should have had her going by Freya up until that point, then switching to Anise.
Comments from author:
Ooh. I need to go check that. (Although in canon they can make their eyes flash whenever they feel like it.)

And I like your username. Is that 'RCBD' part by any chance a Randomized Complete Block Design?
Review By [SlickRCBD] • Date [29 Dec 14] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue – Two Months Later" from navnukjent
Review:
Very nice story!
Comments from author:
Thanks. If you really liked it, I wouldn't mind a recommendation either... :D
Review By [navnukjent] • Date [6 Dec 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue – Two Months Later" from SilverWave
Review:
You know a sequel would be awesome :-)

Cheers.
Comments from author:
:D :D You know, you're right. And I put half a dozen sequel hooks in the two stories, and my muse is just under-motivated. She's busy with other stuff, and getting her to do what I want is rather like trying to push a boulder up a hill. A really grouchy boulder. :D
Review By [SilverWave] • Date [24 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue – Two Months Later" from Lydia
Review:
Good and interesting story, but I personally would have preferred more action and see either some SG Teams dealing with the Supernatural or Slayers with the Aliens. More could have happened but still overall it as pretty nice.
Comments from author:
Thanks. But this just isn't an action story. It's really a weird romance tale. If my muse ever gets inspired and forces me to write another sequel, *that* is likely to be an action story. (And yes, I have that sort of relationship with my muse.) But I have half a dozen sequel hooks scattered about in between this one and the other half of this series.
Review By [Lydia] • Date [20 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Epilogue – Two Months Later" from larin
Review:
I can't believe I missed this gem. There are so many good moments in this where you take a small moment and use it to really flesh out an otherwise minor character. You actually made Anise into a three dimensional character.

I hope your muse brings you back here one day.
S.
Comments from author:
Thanks! And I'm pushing my muse pretty hard right now. Unfortunately, she's the only one who is armed.
Review By [larin] • Date [19 Nov 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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