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Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from spk
Review:
Would really love the rest of this. :)
Review By [spk] • Date [26 Feb 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from (Past Donor)akat
Review:
Very interesting premise! I can't wait to see where you go with this. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks! I'm having some issues getting the next chapter to work for me, but damned if I'm not working on it! Thanks for reading!

CT.
Review By [(Past Donor)akat] • Date [11 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from bradsan
Review:
I'm already interested. Can't wait for the next update so I got this one on tracking.

Only one thing I don't understand. The killing part. Buffy didn't hold back with the Knights and so some off them get stabbed and fell off the bus and died. The not killing human beings parts won't consider Klingon's and other Aliens and wouldn't it be more logic that the rules will change for them how longer they lived. For the safety of earth.

I also believe that the killing part was a part that the watchers made up because when the Slayer was born there were no rules, no law nothing and Sineya did kill Giles, Willow and Xander in the dream scape after they did the enjoining spell. The Slayer kills all what is dark and evil so even humans(witches,warlocks). Remember Giles told Buffy that they would leave the humans to the law and they weren't Buffy's concern. Faith didn't get crazy after killing the human but was feeling guilty and couldn't cope with those feelings and everybody reacts different to them and Faith coped her way with joining the Mayor. So she went rogue.

You can read more about the slayer at the website Sineya the first Slayer

I'm glad that this is a story with only Buffy and Faith in it and no other Scoobies. I like it when those two are together as friends or "sisters".

Well I'm done with my rant and I'm gone wait for the next update.

edit: Sorry it' s a wiki side you search for Sineya the first slayer
http://buffy.wikia.com/wiki/Sineya
Comments from author:
As this next chapter isn't coming along as well as I'd hoped, I may have to redo the last chapter as well. It's a thing. So we'll see. That info will likely change if I do rewrite that one. Thanks for the review! Glad you're liking it so far.

CT.
Review By [bradsan] • Date [7 Jun 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from Kremer
Review:
It's an interesting premise so far, but I have 2 major quibbles.

a) Like below, I haven't a clue what a Reaper/Grimm is. They're apparently immortal, too? (At least simplify it in an A/N so us ignoramuses understand)

b) For being immortal, and with their centuries of life/sociological/leadership/command experience, why are they only Commanders in rank? I can see them both refusing a desk-bound Admiral's rank, but why remand them to be subservient to (compared to them) less competent/experienced superior officers? Shouldn't they be something like a Starfleet Special Operative - someone who has a less 'official' rank, but can overrule even Captains and lower Admirals when it's necessary?
Comments from author:
First, thanks for the review! ^.^ Now, to your points.

a) Doom (the movie). Karl Urban plays John "Reaper" Grimm, a soldier who ultimately gets injected with a 24th chromosome. You don't have to know too much about the movie if you haven't seen it, as the next chapter has a lot of explanatory crap.

b) I have to admit, I didn't think of that designation. But, as for not being higher than Commander, they aren't in for the 'world save-age' at the moment. Their ultimate jobs are to be there to keep an eye on this almost completely green crew. It was one stipulation that the dissenting admirals (of which there were only three) insisted on in order to approve Kirk's promotion. Not babysitting-and-reporting (because they wouldn't do that) but more that the admirals felt better having them there to help out if necessary until the crew got a little more seasoned. (I know, can't get much more seasoned than Nero to start off with.)

So thanks again for the review, and I hope you stick around.

CT.
Review By [Kremer] • Date [18 May 12] • Rating [6 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from hellbells
Review:
I'd say I'm sorry about tempting your muses but I want to know what happened more.
Comments from author:
~laughs~ I'm working on it! It's a very dialogue heavy chapter, though. A lot of backstory, perhaps a flashback or two. Some Disbelieving!Jim, and maybe some Corroborating!Pike-and/or-Archer. And that's all I'm giving you until it's done. Thanks for the review!

I can't say as I'm too sorry you put me on this train, though.

CT.
Review By [hellbells] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from Senko
Review:
Two things bother me about this. First it seems more descriptive than active, that is rather telling a story it feels like your recapping events. Consider the following

Faith had been kicked out of the room for Buffy's testing. She'd tried to stay, but the doctor wouldn't hear of it and Buffy just gave her a pleading look so she waited just outside. And eyed the eyecandy that was James Tiberius Kirk.

it could easily be expanded into an actual scene where you have the confrontation between Faith and the doctor played out e.g. 'Doctor Smythe gave the two girls a friendly smile before saying "I'm sorry Faith but you can't stay in here for your friends examination.' Faith glared at him "Look Doc there ain't no reason for me to be elsewhere and she's nervous around Doctors so I'm staying." The doctors kindly expression hardened "I'm sorry young lady but rules and protocols are in place for a reason . . ." etc etc.

It may just be because you want to get to your main story but its something to keep in mind particularly for major events like their meeting with John I assume from the Doom movie (and I think his sister was also injected with Chromosome 24 if I remember right) which shouldn't be skipped by with a single sentence or two. The second thing is that going by cannon Willow is pretty much immortal herself considering she showed up well into the future although that's easily accountable by an AU universe. Still it brings us back to the first point where brief descriptions of events can leave lingering questions in the readers mind.

Otherwise its an interesting premise and I'm curious to see where you go with it.
Comments from author:
First, thanks so much for reviewing. You make valid points, and I'm glad you mentioned them. I can't clarify (in story, even!) if I don't know, right? ^.^

Now, the vagueness was (mostly) completely on purpose. ('Mostly' because it WAS after midnight when I wrote it, having just got home from seeing The Avengers which dropped ANOTHER bunny in my head. Thankfully for a ficlet, but anyway, my cognitive abilities, I admit, are not always sharpest at that time of night.) Also, it was Bones as the doc, but from the girls' POV, they didn't want to address him period, so gave his designation instead.

As for Samantha Grimm, yeah. But I had already decided to kill her off. Almost killed Faith, too. And their meetings with Bones will be dished out. THAT bit had been planned beforehand. Chapter three will include the girls and their thoughts and feelings as well as their side of the story. As for the but about Willow, anything beyond 'Chosen' has been deliberately barred for me. I didn't like season eight. I thought Joss backtracked too much with their personalities and lost much of the growth they'd gone through. So if that came up in the comics, then I wouldn't know about it. I stopped reading... not sure which volume, but it was early enough. Dawn was still a giant. However, one thing:
"The second thing is that going by cannon Willow is pretty much immortal herself considering she showed up well into the future although that's easily accountable by an AU universe. Still it brings us back to the first point where brief descriptions of events can leave lingering questions in the readers mind."
I had thought I made it clear enough that Willow was mortal and died in the prologue. The mortal bit I know is clear. So for this bit, I am sorry if it wasn't clear enough, but I don't know how to make it more so.

I am glad you've gotten interested so far. I hope to live up to that with what comes in the next few. Thanks again!

CT.
Review By [Senko] • Date [18 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from Sandi
Review:
Ouch. He screwed up big time. Faith and Kirk would be interesting but her and Scotty would totally rock. He's not as cute but better with his hands.

Fantastic idea.
Comments from author:
He did indeed! And I think Simon Pegg is adorable, but there won't be any Jim/Faith romancing going on. I'm going with the TOS attitude that Jim (and Scotty, for that matter) is married to the ship. Flirty!Faith is never far from the surface, though. She IS a walking advert for sex, after all. Thanks for the review! ^.^

CT.
Review By [Sandi] • Date [18 May 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Grimm Meeting" from Gideon
Review:
Darn Admirals, always posting you where you don't want to be! I hope Bones doesn't get into any bar fights anywhere near the Engineering staff or Faith might take the opportunity to give him a few extra bruises :)
Comments from author:
Haha! Yeah, but we need those Admirals in order to torture... errr... move along the story. Not torture the protagonists. Honest. And yup! Faith is looking for any reason to kick Reaper's ass. She may yet get her chance, too. Thanks for the review!

CT.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [18 May 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Gideon
Review:
I like the more formalized reasoning behind the levels of Slayer evolution. That Faith came up with the idea is great too! Sad that they had to leave their friends behind, but at least it sounds like they had many years together.
Comments from author:
Thanks! I was pretty proud of that bit, myself. And hey, at least they had each other for going through all that crap, right? Thanks for the review!

CT.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [15 May 12] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Prologue" from hellbells
Review:
Yay you can never have enough reaper fics out there looking forward to more!
Comments from author:
You realize that I blame this all on you, right? Evil beast that you are. ^.^

CT.
Review By [hellbells] • Date [15 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from tosca
Review:
Interesting start!
Comments from author:
Thanks!

CT.
Review By [tosca] • Date [15 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Martin
Review:
You make it sound like Reaper supposed to mean something. However, I have no idea what it supposed to signify. I don't remember a Reaper in Buffy or Trek, so add this other cross so we might have a context of what Reaper is since the name Reaper is used in lots of different shows and stories.
Comments from author:
Thanks for mentioning the oversight. It's been corrected.

CT.
Review By [Martin] • Date [15 May 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Prologue" from Wrytergrrrl
Review:
I'm very excited to see where you take this. I love Buffy and Faith in space stories, especially when Reaper makes an appearance as well. I'll just keep my fingers crossed that this will be a Buffy/Reaper pairing cause that is one of my favorites. :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review! I'm super in love with Buffy/Reaper, too, so you can be certain that that pairing will make an appearance. As for Faith, haven't you noticed that it's always ONLY Buffy that gets affected by the spell or whatever? I figured that except for dying, they're pretty much the same. Chosen instead of Awakened or Activated. And I like Faith. ^.^ Anyhow, glad you liked it!

CT.
Review By [Wrytergrrrl] • Date [15 May 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
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