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Review of chapter "Epilogue" from ShalaDakiri
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So that's who it was. I was actually thinking it might have been the Rani. Another rogue Time Lord I could easily see figuring out a way to survive the Time War.

Although I suppose the Iphidren/Ibuprofen comment should have been a big hint.
Review By [ShalaDakiri] • Date [7 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from CageFire
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Ah, so that's who it was. I had my suspicions, but wasn't sure. Good job. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [7 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Epilogue" from Letomo
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Why do enemies keep trying to keep the Doctor on Earth? No matter the century, he is too charismatic not to gain allies to help him, no matter what time [The Time Lords did the same to Doc 3]; and, if trying to trap the Doctor, wouldn't the 21st Century be the worst choice, since that's 'When everything changes!'

Still I wasn't able to put the clues together on the specific enemy that trapped the Doc 10 there.

I enjoyed it, and can't wait for Seventh Segment.
Comments from author:
Really? Darn. Better fix that.

Changed "the Fountain" to "the Fountain of Kulkmattoll". Which should be a specific enough allusion that you'd be able to work it out.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [7 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Eight" from Letomo
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So, what did Amy and Rory leave behind? Doc 11? River? Something else? And did their disappearance have to do with the temporal fluctuations, or them leaving voluntarily?

Ah, the hints of the Joining spell. Good, good.
Comments from author:
That's the real question, isn't it? What were Amy and Rory up to? And... if they were in the Initiative, interested in the 314 project specifically, while Professor Walsh was still alive... then what's their connection to Adam's creation?
Review By [Letomo] • Date [7 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Eight" from CageFire
Review:
Wow, I just noticed this story is 48 chapters long. I believe that makes it by far the longest story in this series, and I'm not sure if it's done yet.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it wound up being way longer than I thought. I don't quite know why, it just turned out that way. One chapter more, and that's the epilogue. Which is super duper short.
Review By [CageFire] • Date [6 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Eight" from MarcusSLazarus
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And once again, my theory is proven; Riley's blaming the Doctor for all that crap happening to the Initiative when part of it happened because he brought the Doctor there in the first place and the rest of it was because the Initiative were dumb enough to create Adam in the first place.

GOD, the man needs to take responsibility for his own mistakes...
Review By [MarcusSLazarus] • Date [6 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Seven" from Letomo
Review:
Oh, I get it, I just think it would have been funnier if she had made that mistake, eh?
Comments from author:
Oh, phew! I was really worried that no one would understand that! Yeah, I originally had some joke like that in there, but I just thought that it didn't really work with Buffy's current state of mind.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Seven" from Letomo
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Hmm, Ibuprofen, Iphidrin . . . Could Buffy have messed up the transport, so Adam was sent to the nearest pharmacy, instead?
Comments from author:
To quote from "Elizabeth":

"He doesn't abide by our moral code, Dawn," said Elizabeth. "This one place we visited — Iphidrin — I saw him…" She shuddered. "I couldn't stop him. He started, and he wouldn't stop. And they all died. They died screaming at him for mercy and he just…."

And then later...

"Uh, Will?" said Xander. "That last speech. Sort of mentioned the Doctor massacring Iphidrin. A whole ton of people. And… if the Doctor wasn't the one doing the massacring…"

And...

"Elizabeth did say she only killed those people because she thought it was right," Anya volunteered, in her usual perky voice. "She thought that the Doctor wanted her to do it, and that made it right. So, yes, she murdered a lot of people, but at least she did it for the right reasons!" Anya faltered. "Or what she thought were the right reasons."

So. Now we readers have a slightly better idea of what prompted Elizabeth to massacre Iphidrin. Why Elizabeth would have thought there'd be mixed messages, why she'd thought it was for the right reasons, and why the Doctor was so pissed off at her. And also why the Doctor would be so worried about Buffy finding out that he was down in the Initiative, in this parallel timeline and parallel situation.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Six" from Letomo
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So, he ran, alright. Right out of his own head! And I love the trick with the fasisil, that's a lovely bit of using Checkov's Gun.

Wonderful story, please, more?
Review By [Letomo] • Date [5 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Six" from CageFire
Review:
Another great chapter, keep up the excellent work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [4 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Five" from seacheldymoo
Review:
I love that the recent chapters have been longer than the prior ones, I can't get enough of this story! And! Schrodinger's Doctor! Ah, I love it!
Comments from author:
The length of the chapters has actually been partly due to the fact that I needed to keep the momentum up, and partly due to the fact that if I didn't make the chapters super-long, I'd wind up making them super-short, which wouldn't have worked.

But I'm glad you like them! Maybe I'll try to shoot for posting longer chapters every day, in the future.
Review By [seacheldymoo] • Date [3 Jul 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Four" from CageFire
Review:
Another awesome chapter, keep up the great work. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Four" from Letomo
Review:
From reading this chapter, I realized - isn't the Doctor also waiting for the 4 knocks? He's finished his time with Donna, so this is in the period of the movies.

And, I wasn't trying to say Buffy wasn't able to come up with plans, just that hers were half-formed, without someone else to bounce the ideas off of, same as most people. Which showed here; without someone to bounce the ideas off of, she had a single plan, without a backup, without a thought what to do if something went wrong.

And, when I was reading the part about how the Doctor was runing in his own mind, it reminded me about the part of him still running from his encounter with the Time Vortex at age 8; I thought that might have been how he made it through. He would just run and run inside his mind, till even the machines couldn't catch up to him.
Comments from author:
He is, indeed, waiting for 4 knocks, right now. Although... I don't think that comes up in this story. I kind of pictured this particular incident as happening way at the end of the Doctor's10th life (I mention, at some point, that he's running from the Ood's summons). Although I might change that, in the future.

Yes, I absolutely agree with your assessment of Buffy's plan-making abilities, now. That's exactly what happens with Buffy. She doesn't do well with creating plans in a vacuum.

As for your third paragraph... I'm going to wait to reply to that until at least tomorrow. (Sorry!)
Review By [Letomo] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Three" from Letomo
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Why does the thought of Buffy having a plan sort of scare me? Unless it's to grab one of her Scoobies, like Giles, Willow, or Xander and getting them to figure something out. She's got some smarts, but her plans, generally, weren't that great unless in an immediate tactical area.
Comments from author:
I've been thinking about this rather a lot. And I agree and disagree. I think that Buffy usually has very good plans, but she never comes up with them alone. She needs other people there helping her, giving her information and helping her pool resources. Then Buffy's the one who gets it all to work together.

Consider that Buffy came up with the plan to destroy the Mayor. Buffy came up with the plan to get rid of Glory (and, yes, Dawn got activated and it all went wrong, but Buffy's original strategy was still pretty solid in terms of Glory-destroying). Buffy came up with the plan to get rid of the First.

And... yes, you're right. All these plans relied very heavily on other people. And were often very heavily inspired by her friends' actions. But Buffy was the one orchestrating them all.
Review By [Letomo] • Date [2 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter Forty Three" from aeraveil
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Here's hoping Riley gets castrated or turned into a small wriggly thing.
He's a pathetic, sorry excuse for a soldier that never should have passed basics.
Review By [aeraveil] • Date [1 Jul 12] • Not Rated
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