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Review of chapter "Octennious, Part 2" from serenityselena
Review:
that was really entertaining...
hope to read more soon ^_^

P.S. Happy Birthday! I hope you celebrated it with a big party :)
Comments from author:
Thanks for the review! I didn't make it big (no major friends outside of family. Oh well), but I definitely enjoyed it. I hope to have more to give soon!
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [9 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Octennious, Part 2" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
OK, Mom is Laura Croft (Tomb Raider), Dad is Bruce Banner (The Hulk) and Uncle is Steve Rogers (Captain America) and the girl is some variant of Dawn Summers (The Key). Did I miss on any of them?
Comments from author:
I find it absolutely amazing that you got that close! It just absolutely makes my day! The only thing you got wrong was the idea that the girl is Dawn Summers. She's an OC who has three names that she goes by: Roxxanne Lorraine Croft, Alba "Louey" Louise Varden, and "Captain" Lorraine McCarthy. She's only a captain because she saved Maggie Walsh from a demon by shooting it in the eye. She's also an insane genius with a houseful of Minis and a little too much time on her hands as a Slayer.

And a few too many rings taken from the bodies of the Order of Teraka for just a 15-year-old, nineteen if you include the days/years spent in Pylea's cousin, if you know what I mean.

Thanks for the review! It just made my day!
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [1 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Valentine's Background" from serenityselena
Review:
a bit confusing but it explained a few things ^_^
Comments from author:
Yeah, it wasn't really meant to be very clear. But, for the smarter, more logical people, it's a slight spoiler about a few things. Hope you continue to read it! :D
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [15 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Octennious (part 1)" from serenityselena
Review:
oh my... that was something else...
*grin*
Comments from author:
*matching grin* Thanks! It didn't go as well as it could have, but hey, I was having a slight block. At least I finally managed to get it out (and it let me go to other scenes a little faster. hehehe).
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [15 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween (way back then)" from serenityselena
Review:
that was a bit confusing...
Comments from author:
Sorry. In retrospect, I think I'm pulling a bit of a Charles Dickens. In A Tale of Two Cities, he brought up all these random, unrelated things and took the entire book to show how they all relate. Hopefully, you won't stop reading my stories.
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [15 Feb 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween (way back then)" from Genuka
Review:
you do realize that you're getting the knack of evilness right?
Comments from author:
Why, thank you.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [26 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Halloween (way back then)" from (Current Donor)kcl
Review:
I really wanted to like this, but now I'm just utterly confused. Perhaps only recognizing BtVS and SG1 is the root of the problem. Oh, well.
Comments from author:
Don't worry about it and I'll try to do better in the future.
Review By [(Current Donor)kcl] • Date [3 Jan 13] • Rating [5 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Conversations with little people" from serenityselena
Review:
that was an interesting chapter...
I'm sure what you have planned for the next one will be entertaining ^_^

P.S. thanks for the "note" you wrote for me at the end of the chapter :)
Comments from author:
You are most undoubtedly welcome for the note. I felt it should be included, and I appreciate the compliment. And I hope just as much as you do that the upcoming chapters are just as good as the rest.
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [20 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Conversations with little people" from HMaxMarius
Review:
Ah, lack of a DHD is not a complete disaster. There were several occasions where the team dialed the Stargate without one. Most notably when they timetraveled and used a bunch of Duce-and-a-halfs to power the gate in the DC warehouse.

Worst case scenario, the SGC dials in when they fail to dial back for a check in. They push through a naquadah reactor, Sam hooks things up and they dial home...

Unless, of course, someone steals the gate when they're not looking.

hmm
Comments from author:
Hehe. Someone steals it on them. That's funny. Of course, I have my own way of getting them back that meshes Asgard tech with another species, creating my OC race. I'll try to bring it up in the next two or three non-interlude chapters.
Review By [HMaxMarius] • Date [20 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Waking up in the Infirmary" from Genuka
Review:
Just one thing. When Jack got snatched by Loki he was switched out by a clone. Sooooo, is there a clone involved with this one? Or are you using another time that people started disappearing around base?
Comments from author:
No clones. At least, not yet. Maybe not quite ever, but it's a possibility.
Review By [Genuka] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter One" from fanreaderonetwo
Review:
In addition to the "sins" suitable for getting her courtmartialed listed by Gideon, don't forget her openly telling her Hammond that she had betrayed someone to terrorists (her words) with the _intent_ of having him tortured to death. Said betrayal, avenging a _practical joke_, ended in the his violent death. That bit of trivia alone should get her cashiered if not sentenced to life in Leavenworth or maybe shot. At a minimum she would escorted out the mountain at gunpoint unless the person was an avowed and known deadly of the SGC or the US. And even then Hammond probably wouldn't want someone that dangerous to be around anywhere near the Stargate.

I'm a little puzzled by her description of how her team died.....
""And what happened to your team, exactly?"

"To be honest, I'm not entirely sure. Some died in front of me through staff blasts, some through ribbon device blasts, and some by those sword things, which are pretty darn rare and can split a person clean through at a twitch. But for some I wasn't there, and for the rest, well my recollection is a little fuzzy because of the liquor."

A (presumably) standard four person team, and one dead by staff blast, one by ribbon, one by sword, leaving her...... Unless somehow she was part of a very non-standard 10+ member team????? And if she was _that_ drunk, how many team members did she accidentally shoot herself, or leave behind alive because she _forgot_ them?
Comments from author:
I got no clue for ya. What I *do* know, is that she didn't forget any of them. She checked each body she found before giving them up for dead, and that she was the only one left alive. Maybe there was Tok'ra intel saying that multiple Goa'uld were on planet, and after not being able to find them, or find a way to assassinate them properly (along with the fact that... will be found out after her return to Octennious), a full-frontal assault would be the only way some might think of getting home. Plus, she didn't want to lie to him, and there were... otherworldly creatures, if you get my meaning.
And, as I said to Gideon, her position is quite, unique. There aren't many quite like her, and she has contacts that no one else, other than *possibly* Dr. Jackson, could have, which gives her at least a little bit of leeway. Besides, the only people she is a real danger to are herself and her enemies. That is an established fact. (Maybe written down by her former CO. Worth thinking of.)
I hope that you continue to read, and possibly enjoy this story. And please also read my other stories.
Review By [fanreaderonetwo] • Date [18 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Waking up in the Infirmary" from Gideon
Review:
Fun story but I am a bit confused. I'm not sure what is going on here in any of these chapters. Is the third chapter related to the story in the first two at all? And what was it that Lorraine did at the Initiative? Was she a doctor or scientist or something?
You might want to tighten up on her attitude and background a little. She doesn't have to be everything to everyone. Just give her one thing she is good at.
I did count at least 5 reasons she should get an immediate discharge from the military though. Drunk on duty, threatening a superior officer, disrespect to a General - (remember Sam has to say Sir just about every other sentence, even when she is just talking to Jack), hearing voices, absent without leave and not able or willing to tell them where she was. Memory loss and abnormal brain waves are just the icing on the cake! Not to mention that if she had gone two weeks without sleep she would be hallucinating and psychotic if not dead. Three days without sleep would be extreme enough.
Anyway, I hope you keep writing, and remember - Less is More. Use as few words as possible.
Comments from author:
This chapter is just a continuation of her life. She was kidnapped before being able to interact with her new team, and right now she doesn't know exactly what happened (though, me and her brain do. Hehehe). Also, I will let out exactly where she was in the Initiative, maybe after I show ties to her father. After all, she has several facts of life to find out. I can't very well let the cat out of the bag before she does.
On her standing with the General, he is a good friend of hers, and she has a very unique position that only two people (other than her) actually know enough about to have an effect. I thank you far actually caring enough to comment and give me a good insight into my characters, and I hope that you will continue to read and comment as I post. Hopefully, I will have a semi-coherent smooth transitioning of chapters soon.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [17 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Waking up in the Infirmary" from serenityselena
Review:
nicely done...
poor girl... she sure meets Janet too often...
I really don`t know who should be the first... as long as everyone is "visited" the order is not that important...
hope to read more soon ^_^
Comments from author:
I thank you for the kind review.
Review By [serenityselena] • Date [17 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "The meeting" from eriktheviking
Review:
A well written alternate view of some of the off screen antics at the SGC.
Comments from author:
Thank you for the review! Sorry it took me so long to respond, I'm answering my unanswered reviews. Please read and review my other stories.
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [28 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "The meeting" from Likiglok
Review:
I'm confused why would Hammond order Rain to to bed along with the rest of SG1 if she had just woken up. Also I feel you got both Hammond's and Jack's attitudes wrong in this chapter. Jack has always been shown in canon to be vehemently against anyone being added to SG-1. Hammond might have been amused with Rain's attitude, no way should he get lip from a lowly airman, but in the circumstances shown he wouldn't have taken it in stride. You have to remember that this is the military, and that disrespecting a superior officer is a punishable offense.
Comments from author:
I understand, but Rain has a secret, and in order to keep from crossing bad boundaries, like, hypothetically in a darker universe with the same Jack, Hammond ordering Jack to use children in combat, he has to know what might get her off in a bad way, and her secret scares scary people. And she also hasn't had any sleep in the two weeks since she got back. So, that being said, I will try to correct my mistakes. Thank you for pointing that out.
And it wasn't Hammond ordering her, it was Janet. Just thought you should know.
Review By [Likiglok] • Date [27 Jun 12] • Rating [5 out of 10]
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