Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from DarthPayne
I have to say that this fis is very interesting so far... :)
Review By [DarthPayne
] • Date [13 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from AlecMcDowell
I can't believe I didn't leave a review for this the first time I read it! Most of the things I liked here very much. It's fun to see Xander just pour ideas out of his head- at first I was like why are you bothering with a quinjet that isn't going to happen for years until I realized he's probably got so much happening he's got to put it down as quick as he can to move on to the next.
I thought Willow's inevitable blowup turned out a bit awkward but I'm not really sure how it could've been fixed. I do think Xander should've spoken up here about liking her as a sister, though.
Bit worried about the uniforms they are having made. I noticed you didn't say the word costumes, and hopefully on purpose. I'd imagine these three want to remain secret until at least they graduate and three new heroes with similar powers as their costumes showing up so soon after Halloween would be too suspicious to the Scoobies.
In an earlier review I was voicing hopes for members of Young Justice like Superboy to someday join the team, and while, I'd still like to see him show up, it occurs to me here that by the time YJ finally rolls around these three will be several years older and running an up and coming company. They wouldn't put up with the kiddie table crap the Justice League puts the young teams through I don't think.
I was reading through a few of the other reviews on this chapter, and I'm excited to see a few new versions of other Marvel heroes will show up here, especially if they are modeled after the Ultimate version primarily- Ultimate Spider-man was pretty much the only consistently good title in that line in my opinion. And there are plenty of candidates for a new Captain America floating around- Riley is a boy scout, and Jonathan is a weeny little guy who could grow big and strong like Steve Rogers did.
Can't think of anything else I need to say here... really hope you find your muse on this soon!
Review By [AlecMcDowell
] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from KingOfCretins
It occurs to me that since a confrontation with Buffy over how he is treating Willow is inevitable Xander might want to give a better explanation for his change in attitude.
One idea I had was Xander could explain that Halloween gave him a sense of direction in life and showed him he should take things more seriously and utilise his full intelligence.
Also he should compare his change in attitude to her own change in attitude after becoming the Slayer.
Finally he should end with saying that just as Buffy cannot change back despite her parents wishing she would he cannot change back despite Willow wishing it.
Hopefully this would help Buffy understand Xander change in attitude and perhaps even make her sympathetic to Xanders position although she would still likely be more on Willow's side for emotional support although hopefully she will be able to help Willow get used to the new Xander.
I hope in time Willow, Buffy and Xander can repair their friendship to some extent even if they are never as close as they used to be. Keep in mind half of Buffy's accomplishments come from the support of her friends (the Mayor and ADAM in particular) so repairing the rift so that Xander is available to help out every once and awhile is important.
Please write more soon.
Review By [KingOfCretins
] • Date [5 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from tavinseven
This story is great and I can't wait for you to update. Keep the issues coming please.
Review By [tavinseven
] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Hawklan
nice start and Cody as Emma Frost? That will be fun :)
typical Flash...neglecting his duty :)
I wonder how the three will now look at the world around them :)
good the three got so well off with each other.
nice how they spent their Sunday and looks like Willow will make a scene on Monday :)
hmm that talk in the library went better than I thought.
and at least they have started to plan their future :)
good how they handled the stuff with Xs uncle.
nice slap down of Harmony and what a good and to the ch for C&X :)
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from moonpup
xnader keeps say that tony stark has no meta or x-gene but you have to rember there are tons of au's of the marvel verus, In one I think he becomes a god some how and help prevent the world from ending. in anther he was just a fat lazy drunk. who is to say he was no meta gene or x-gene and as this is taking place in the dc verus snader just might have what it takes to be a hero on his own and just need an kick start.
Comments from author:
Tony Stark, the one he got his memories etc. from, had no ACTIVE x-gene. Doesn't mean he didn't have a partially active x/meta gene that is going to be fully expressed in Xander.
And no one ever said that Xander didn't have an inactive/dormant meta/x-gene in his own makeup that might be activated by Halloween.
After all, everyone is focusing on what I've highlighted of his physical changes.
No one has bothered to ask how Cordelia can be a telekinetic because she had Emma Frost in her head.
Review By [moonpup
] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Balder
I like it a lot. I hope you continue it.
Review By [Balder
] • Date [30 Sep 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from dogbertcarroll
As a mutant I don't think Emma would
have any pleasant associations with
the name Sentinel.
Harmony pulled that scene in canon
because Xander dressed and acted the
part of class clown. This Xander is
quite a bit different and would have
been noted by them.
Review By [dogbertcarroll
] • Date [9 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Three: The Hangover" from dogbertcarroll
Early season 2 Cordelia and Emma Frost are both self centered characters
who care for nothing but what they can profit from. I have no idea where
you came up with the idea that they would help anyone else without getting
something for it. Cordelia didn't really change much until LA and Emma
just put up a good front before going right back to being at the head of
the Villain's list.
The clearly rushed pairing with Xander really doesn't help matters either.
I have a dislike bordering on hate for when, despite all the changes an
author has introduced, everything follows canon.
Review By [dogbertcarroll
] • Date [9 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Morgomir
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir
] • Date [7 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Narf
Nice keep up the good work thanks and bye.
Review By [Narf
] • Date [4 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Three: The Hangover" from CrystalBlaze
I am not at all surprised at their heightened appetites. Between Wolverine's regenerative powers and their being what keeps his blood supply up, the White Queen's telepathy and diamond-morph powers, and Tony Stark's mind acing as a dual-core processor in Xander Harris, they are all in need of a higher caloric uptake.
Emma and Emma Within set up bubble cores of the personae, including her own, as the backup plan should Stark's device have failed. I say both as Cordelia mentions stabilizing them after the fact since Jarvis and the computer node device did in fact work.
The end result for Alexander Lavelle Harris is that his own computational abilities have been augmented by the analytical and creative genius of Anthony Stark. Again, this stacking and integration is a lot like a dual core CPU, and I suspect that Xander is now capable of using all that material in ways Stark himself cannot--at least, without a great deal more time.
Given some of the bizarre demonic powers and "aspecting" that goes on in canon and the fact this is a fusion universe of Buffy and DC, I can see this. I even have a motivation for stepping into the Hawkeye role as opposed to the Green Arrow clique, namely not wanting to step on Arrowette or Arsenal (formerly Speedy)'s toes. The Spider-Man incident could be someone developing his own augmentation based on Project Cadmus data, and their work on Guardian may provide the impetus for the Captain America of the group. (In fact, it could BE Guardian if he is sufficiently disenchanted with Cadmus..)
The Metagene being a less isolated but more easily inherited X-gene variant makes sense to me as well. This also means that Cordelia, once she has access to a working Cerebro system, can likely detect metahumans and carriers of an inactive metagene, just as Stark's tehnology could detect and isolate chaos magic during Halloween; In both cases, similarity and familiarity make it workable.
I do think that Willow can be redeemable and hope that this will start her on that path, but she truly did cross a line and I applaud you having Xander push back in a measured, adult response. I do hope that Xander's enhanced body is resistant to Alcoholism, as Anthony Stark was a recurring alcoholic when sufficiently stressed and Xander certainly had the genetic proclivity prior to Halloween, given his parentage..
If you want to go with a female Cap, Kendra or, if she dies, Faith might do well there. So far you've stepped parallel to but a slight distance apart from episodic events, but some changes have taken place already and events are about to angle right at the trio of Ultimates.
Angelus is a future possibility, but Jenny Calendar blew her cover in Ethan's, and I know Giles didn't miss it. The lack of recriminations is easily explained, there was no serious deception at that point. After the events of Halloween, he might be rather pleased there's a member of the Kalderash keeping an eye on the souled vampire. So might Angel, if it's brought to his attention..
The mayor has so far stayed out of it, but I don't see that lasting, especially if, as I suspect, Cordelia soon has to mind-frell Snyder to keep him off her, Xander, and Oz's backs.
On the note of another change, I did pick up on the demise of Stein under the feet of the Hulk, one character I am rather glad to see didn't last after Rayne's spell ended. Also, I *really* don't see Rayne returning to Sunnydale quite so soon, if ever, given how he reacted to Jenny, so the changes are coming..
On a DC front, do you think the aquatic demons that coach used making the steroids for the swim team are known to Aquaman and the Atlanteans? If so, a challenge to Sunnydale's isolation may come from quite a surprising quarter..
Well, this ramble's about done. I hope it's not too much; great work, man.
Comments from author:
The increased caloric intake will not remain AS severe on average, but their bodies have undergo intense cellular change and they need to recoup cellular energy. They will always have heightened apetites and metabolisms that mean Cordelia can basically eat anything she wants without gaining weight, but it will slowly taper off from the extreme levels of the first week.
Cordelia did in fact stabilize the bubbles. If she hadn't they would have started to unload into their minds, causing some serious deja vu issues. By stabilizing she creates an anchored backup of the memories etc., carefully concealed and guarded. This is important to a few events later in the timeline, but not for several years.
Xander has an edge on the original Stark, something that will eventually become clear once they get the technology to perform genetic and biological analysis. They will determine that the so-called metagene in most metahumans on Earth is an incompletely developed X-gene, tghus explaining why metas generally have a catalyst in their first generation, and why the offspring tend to nmore closely inherit their parents powers, as opposed to mutants where family lines may tend to pass mutations on but its not guaranteed. A lot of research into this will come into play later in the story, especially as Xander, Cordelia and Oz will later observe the 'birth' of universal analogues of several heroes they know from their own memories. For example, Hawkeye will one day come about because a costumed hero in training has taken the Ultimates/Avengers as his idols, so while he has made himself an archer like green archer etc., he has modeled himself off Hawkeye. A lab accident results in this world getting a Spider-Man. And Xander's experimentation utilizing a sample of a serum recovered from an alternate reality provides their own Captain America.
Review By [CrystalBlaze
] • Date [3 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from JediKnight
Interesting chapter, but I am looking forward to a repaing of the relationship between Xander and Willow. I hope to read more soon.
Review By [JediKnight
] • Date [3 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from nerfherder
You have an excellent grasp of the basics of the characters and can come up with a very engaging story-line. The development of the story and the changes imposed on the cannon of the involved characters by the Halloween spell are consistent and insightful. You bobbled the personal pronouns a few times and dropped a few letters and words here and there but over all it was technically sound. A good piece of the craft. Keep it up!
Review By [nerfherder
] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Atwight
This is a great, well-written story, one that I hope continues. I'm greatly enjoying the character development after Halloween night, especially Xander and Cordiella. Don't change a thing and keep up the excellent work!
Review By [Atwight
] • Date [2 Aug 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]