Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Eljin
interesting, i really like it.
i hope you pick it up again some day
Review By [Eljin
] • Date [4 May 14] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from kdakmmt
Great story you have there, looking forward to the next chapter. I find it interesting that spica thinks this story bashes willow. Xander is now seeing Willow from the 40+ perspective and granted Tony isnt a great example of normal, he sees her issues for what they are. Imo just because they didnt give a detailed background to willows psyche in cannon doesnt mean that she isnt as discribed within this story. Im still trying to see where the bashing of Buffy was....
Review By [kdakmmt
] • Date [19 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from AlecMcDowell
This story became even more interesting now that I've actually seen some of the Young Justice cartoon (Season 1 is finally up on Netflix) I'm even more excited to see these three build their empire and reputations in the DC world YJ has set-up, it's an uncluttered and very interesting take on DC as a whole that I like a lot.
Couple of things that I'm not sure occurred to me before. Larry, Jonathan and Andrew all went as useful things, if they kept any skills or knowledge at all they could be useful towards the building company.
Willow- Cordy is in a totally unique position to help her with telepathic therapy. All she has to do is get Willow into a sort of trance where Willow thinks she's asleep, Cordy appears as any other person, and they try and figure out Willow's problems, with needing attention and Xander as well. Would be useful practice for Cordy and also help Willow before she self-destructs (I can't see the Willow you are writing letting Cordy off without punishment after this last chapter)
Really hope your muse returns to this soon!
Review By [AlecMcDowell
] • Date [14 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from FinalGuardian
Great story, can't wait for things to heat up.
Review By [FinalGuardian
] • Date [13 Mar 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from RoyalTwinFangs
Look like this story is dead.
Review By [RoyalTwinFangs
] • Date [2 Mar 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from tchizek
Just reread this and I really hope that you can continue it sometime.
I like the concept and really like the style so far.
Review By [tchizek
] • Date [12 Nov 13] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Four: Time for School" from Spica
I thought the story was decent and had potential, and then *smack* comes a severe dose of Willow-bashing, followed by Buffy-bashing along with some bad old "all praise to Xander the great"...
I´m not fond of bashing, it is in fact a definite turn off, but when the bashing is in the form of ranting upon some badness that was painted on retroactively through author fiat, that just totally killed my interest.
I mean please, sociopathic tendencies for Willow, totally out of the blue?
If you have to bash a character, at least use something that exists, or you have established through the story so far.
I can say a fair few bad things about Willow, like obsessive and reckless, but sociopath? Just no.
And using bashing to split a group up is just a cheapskate crutch for forcing a development into a story where it doesn´t fit.
Which also leads me to the reason for this artificially applied split. Them not telling Giles? That would make perfect sense even if i doubt it would hold.
But the process to get to the "we keep it all a secret" stage, that just didn´t work.
They´re almost behaving like Cordettes to give a comparison. Shallow and clique-ish against anyone on the "outside of those chosen few".
Xander keep mentioning how Willow is his best friend, while he blatantly shows by actions that it´s complete rubbish.
So, sorry but with some sadness i now quit this story. When it feels like the author is bullying characters, then it´s no longer a story for me.
Review By [Spica
] • Date [10 Nov 13] • Rating [4 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from banner
I have been deeply enjoying this story. There's a great deal of detail and explication, but you keep a nice pace. I like the way each of our heros remains essentially himself even through the influence of the personality grafts. The characters are simpy charming.
Review By [banner
] • Date [10 Oct 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from slytherinheadgirl
It's is a great story. I really want to know how they will eventually become full superheroes. I really want to see Xander in the full suit eventually. I was wondering though, are you planning on this story continuing, or is it dead? I hope not as it is too good to to not keep going. May the muses continue to shine on you.
Comments from author:
RotU isn't dead, just delayed. Real life coupled with issues with focus and writing have gotten in the way. I have the core plot line (the major story arcs) laid out for FIVE volumes of story so far, plus tentative concepts for another dozen or so.
Thanks for the support, and glad you enjoyed it so far.
Review By [slytherinheadgirl
] • Date [10 Jul 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from djhardim
I've enjoyed this story and hope to see more. To be honest, I wonder if it's really necessary to bring the Justice League and Young Justice into the story. What if they were the first heroes?
Changing the subject - are you planning on continuing "Way of the Jedi" over on fanfiction.net?
Comments from author:
It's neccessary because its a large part of the world content as planned for the story. I've considered 'first heroes' story concepts before, even have a few in my notes, but for this idea it was very much started by a 'What if the Avengers/Ultimates were introduced into the DC universe?" and thats where it came from.
Way of the Jedi isn't entirely dead, mostly stalled. Chapter 2 ended up crazy arse detailed and then real life (a proto thesis and then an actual thesis) got in the way. By the time I was possibly ready to return to it, real life had taken a nose dive for me and amongst other things I lost almost all of my detailed long term notes for Way of the Jedi. So it's on hiatus until I can recover my inspiration for it.
For now, I haven't been not writing so much as I've been dealing with real life and been generally silent running with my writing. Godogma has betaed and even effectively co-written several ongoing projects that I am working on, and once I have sufficient material gathered I will do a burst posting of it. Beyond the good folks at CaerAzkaban (who generally see draft copies of some but not all of the projects as I work on them) and Godogma no one else has really seen it, though I hope to finish up enough to begin posting at least a few chapters of stuff (if only as teasers) before the end of the month, and hopefully the completed first story arc for two different stories so I can begin posting.
Review By [djhardim
] • Date [18 Jun 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from DarthPayne
I have to say that this fis is very interesting so far... :)
Review By [DarthPayne
] • Date [13 May 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from AlecMcDowell
I can't believe I didn't leave a review for this the first time I read it! Most of the things I liked here very much. It's fun to see Xander just pour ideas out of his head- at first I was like why are you bothering with a quinjet that isn't going to happen for years until I realized he's probably got so much happening he's got to put it down as quick as he can to move on to the next.
I thought Willow's inevitable blowup turned out a bit awkward but I'm not really sure how it could've been fixed. I do think Xander should've spoken up here about liking her as a sister, though.
Bit worried about the uniforms they are having made. I noticed you didn't say the word costumes, and hopefully on purpose. I'd imagine these three want to remain secret until at least they graduate and three new heroes with similar powers as their costumes showing up so soon after Halloween would be too suspicious to the Scoobies.
In an earlier review I was voicing hopes for members of Young Justice like Superboy to someday join the team, and while, I'd still like to see him show up, it occurs to me here that by the time YJ finally rolls around these three will be several years older and running an up and coming company. They wouldn't put up with the kiddie table crap the Justice League puts the young teams through I don't think.
I was reading through a few of the other reviews on this chapter, and I'm excited to see a few new versions of other Marvel heroes will show up here, especially if they are modeled after the Ultimate version primarily- Ultimate Spider-man was pretty much the only consistently good title in that line in my opinion. And there are plenty of candidates for a new Captain America floating around- Riley is a boy scout, and Jonathan is a weeny little guy who could grow big and strong like Steve Rogers did.
Can't think of anything else I need to say here... really hope you find your muse on this soon!
Review By [AlecMcDowell
] • Date [6 Mar 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from KingOfCretins
It occurs to me that since a confrontation with Buffy over how he is treating Willow is inevitable Xander might want to give a better explanation for his change in attitude.
One idea I had was Xander could explain that Halloween gave him a sense of direction in life and showed him he should take things more seriously and utilise his full intelligence.
Also he should compare his change in attitude to her own change in attitude after becoming the Slayer.
Finally he should end with saying that just as Buffy cannot change back despite her parents wishing she would he cannot change back despite Willow wishing it.
Hopefully this would help Buffy understand Xander change in attitude and perhaps even make her sympathetic to Xanders position although she would still likely be more on Willow's side for emotional support although hopefully she will be able to help Willow get used to the new Xander.
I hope in time Willow, Buffy and Xander can repair their friendship to some extent even if they are never as close as they used to be. Keep in mind half of Buffy's accomplishments come from the support of her friends (the Mayor and ADAM in particular) so repairing the rift so that Xander is available to help out every once and awhile is important.
Please write more soon.
Review By [KingOfCretins
] • Date [5 Jan 13] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from tavinseven
This story is great and I can't wait for you to update. Keep the issues coming please.
Review By [tavinseven
] • Date [23 Oct 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Issue Five: Fording the River" from Hawklan
nice start and Cody as Emma Frost? That will be fun :)
typical Flash...neglecting his duty :)
I wonder how the three will now look at the world around them :)
good the three got so well off with each other.
nice how they spent their Sunday and looks like Willow will make a scene on Monday :)
hmm that talk in the library went better than I thought.
and at least they have started to plan their future :)
good how they handled the stuff with Xs uncle.
nice slap down of Harmony and what a good and to the ch for C&X :)
Review By [Hawklan
] • Date [22 Oct 12] • Not Rated