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Review of chapter "Chapter 39c" from raxadian
Review:
Okay, I know Buffy makes stupid choices in cannon but... just no. She never made a deal with the devil.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39c" from (Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone
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So will Loki turn skinny SMG Buffy into hot Kristy Swanson Buffy? Just wondering.
Review By [(Recent Donor)Deamondeathstone] • Date [7 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39c" from MarcusRowland
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I'm guessing Loki's going to give her The Mask, from the movie of that name. Smoking...
Review By [MarcusRowland] • Date [6 Sep 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from FelixNeko
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So far I have been enjoying this story alot. The humor is great and I'm loving the interactions between the various characters. It's had me rolling quite a few times. I look forward to more.
Review By [FelixNeko] • Date [29 Aug 14] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from skychan
Review:
heh, okay this is a funy chapter, and I much prefer your retcon done like this than a complete rewrite to this point. I agree it's better to do the rewriting in one big final swoop than piecemeal.

Also, "owww" I agree with Betsy, landing on diamond woman = pain.
Comments from author:
Yeah, it's one of the things a lot of authors forget. Professionally, even. Emma isn't unbreakable, she isn't super-strong as a diamond, but she is a DIAMOND. Getting hit by her hurts more than human flesh. Getting thrown into her hurts more than hitting a normal person. She's wicked hard and that creates problems all its own when fighting her.
Review By [skychan] • Date [23 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from Morgomir
Review:
Interesting. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [17 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from AceDreamer
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Glad to see you taking pity on Elizabeth "Betsy" Braddock.

Classically, she's had a pretty hard time, being intentionally blinded by a super villain, after a very brief period as a super hero, brainwashed, had her life turned into reality tv, surgically modified and brainwashed, again, spent years dead for (other people's) tax purposes, etc., etc. Not to mention having her powers changed enough times to make anyone dizzy. About time she had a break... of a non-surgical variety. [grin]

I remember when she first appeared in UK Marvel, I wondered if they might do something interesting with her... They really did, in the 'Chinese curse' sense...

Teaching someone the reflexes for hand-to-hand combat... Betsy might be able to try some tricks with combining the Danger Room, with Emma letting her drive her body through scenarios, to bed-in the basic physical reflexes? Betsy has certainly had her body messed-with enough to learn how to move and fight in new body types...

This story has certainly been readable, and I continue to be surprised where you keep taking it next.
Comments from author:
Keep in mind that this is vaguely based off the X1 movie and not much more. So Betsy's nothing more than a teenage girl whose father had the good sense to ensure that she knew how to handle herself in unpleasant situations. That being said? It's a skill set that's proving to be uncommon among the women of Xavier's and so she's in demand.
Review By [AceDreamer] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from Meneldur
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Oh, thank you for this. And especially for giving me the credit. Does this mean we'll be seeing more of Blue Belle soon?

Very nice opening. I loved the song. So very fitting for Emma, especially the opening line...

Emma's skill of manipulation and plotting is amazing, given that Betsy was assuming at first this was all a calculated move rather than a simple timing mistake. And of course, her body strength must also be amazing if she can do that kind of stuff...

Huh. I was sure from the art Emma would be far more embarased. This actually makes more sense. Because Emma's reaction to Betsy's comment is far more like her than blushing. But I suppose anybody would be a bit red in the face, being caught in that kind of situation, especially if they'd been excersising.

Emma quickly took control of the situation, despite Betsy's joking. Of course, Rachel's intervention probably didn't help Betsy any... but it was quite amusing and enjoyable.

So, Emma wants to learn martial arts from Betsy? Or is it more like learning psyblades? Because I'm not clear on either one. If it's martial arts, wouldn't there be far better people to learn from, with far less awkwardness? But if it's the latter, well, it's always been implied that's a unique mutation of Betsy, so how could Emma learn it? Unless it isn't, simply a subset of telepathic skill that only Betsy has bothered developing into a physical weapon, and Emma wants to learn both it and the physical skills?

In any case, it makes a lot of sense, given Emma's mindset, and the fact that she's no just fighting for herself anymore, or even for her students, but also for her family, which is all pretty much dependent on telepathy. And from the start, it seems like she's certainly got at least some muscles and flexibility, given her excersise routine...

Betsy's first eight were easy to guess (though not their actual specifics, just the general idea), but what were the ninth and tenth? So they also plan their outing, though they haven't gone on it yet. I still have to wonder what Jean thinks of all this, given their new relationship.

Is Betsy just going to randomly assault Emma? I mean, it's an important lesson to learn, constant vigilance and all that, but surely there must be more to it, even if what she's teaching her is purely physical (though it again raises the question of why learn from Betsy)?

In any case, thank you very much for this, and I can't wait to see more, especially next chapter.
Comments from author:
I've been taking advantage of the not wholly linear nature of 39/40/41 to write bits and pieces of fic as it hits me, which means that I actually have most of 41 done and the end of 40 and even the end of 39 but didn't have this so I was stuck posting-wise. Accordingly, more fic should show up soon.

Theoretically, Emma could learn the psi blades from Betsy. It's just telepathy in a new form. That being said, given that Betsy was just debuting them for the first time (in this universe) when she visited Sunnydale? It could be that Emma and Betsy have collaborated to create them, since it doesn't really seem like the kind of skill Jean would be willing to help Betsy hone.

I didn't really put much thought into the list of things Betsy can't get; it's meant mostly to show that she has decidedly impure intentions regarding her favorite professor. Number ten is Emma providing more than just dinner out, hence the discussion of buying a dress for Betsy near the end of the chapter.

Betsy's going to actually teach her. She was just terribly amused at... well, how bad Emma was at things. This is a professor who does a very good job of seeming omniscient, who Betsy herself puts on a pedestal... and Betsy manages to trick her several times in quick succession. It's humanizing. And hilarious.
Review By [Meneldur] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from TheKnightofFaerie
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Been enjoying this story since it's first incarnation. Only problem I have is a case of "Dang it, now I have to reread the whole thing again since stuff got changed". Which to be fair, isn't a big deal.
Comments from author:
Don't yet. I have a massive pulse coming soon; like I mentioned in the note, there's some stuff that's just not done because I have to write some future bits and then back the details from those into some of the changes I'm making. Which is why Betsy's chapter needed a "this is what's GOING to change" warning rather than a "this is what DID change if you don't wanna read" warning.
Review By [TheKnightofFaerie] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39b" from raxadian
Review:
I don't know if the Juggernaut is immune to magic... he probably isn't, since his source of power is magic.
Comments from author:
That being said, nobody in the group is a witch, so...
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Jun 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39a" from Bushranger
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I came after seeing 125 reccomendations...and I left feeling very satisfied. Works like this are very, VERY hard to get right; it's so easy to become pure PWP fanservice or to swing too far the other way and become...dry and...plodding (my kingdom...for...a horse!). This manages to avoid it though, both pushing All The Buttons (so to speak - mmm green-haired super-buxom Cordy) but actually having an engrossing and engaging plot as well.

A few quibbles, forgive me if these have been previously brought up, but while I could crash through the story in an afternoon/evening/night (and stayed up FAR too late doing so), reading all the reviews would be...yeah...

Anyway, the only JARRING thing I noticed was that the fight scene in the churches seemed a little...disjointed, for lack of a better term. It started with Sabertooth 'introducing' himself to Spike - but then the ensuing fights in the next chapter/s almost seemed like an entirely different scene - at one point I almost wondered if there was some illusion at work on individuals where each thought they were in their own fight, before things came back together. It wasn't bad, it just...didn't seem to connect between "Remember me?" and the rest of the fight.

Secondly...where did Dru go? After the 'first night as a maid' she seemed to vanish, I'd have expected at least somebody to comment later, particularly when Victor was preparing for his little night o' fun.

And thirdly, sad to see Kendra being Doomed By Canon, but I suppose SOMEbody had to go into Ackbar's Perfectly Safe House Of Worship...

Anyway, minor quibbles; I'm looking fowards to more of this and hoping for a Xander/Cordy (or Xander/Cordy/Gwen?) ending. (And hey, if the Bust Fairy sprinkles more fairy dust on any of the three...nobody would complain. Well, except Cordy, but meh!)
Comments from author:
If you read it all in one go, I'm surprised you didn't comment on the discontinuity of Willow. Earlier chapters have her being far more... free-spirited... than later ones. I'm in the process of tweaking some things, including drastically revising Betsy's character. I might rearrange the fight now that you mention it; I've never been entirely sure on it. As for Dru, I write from a massive outline that goes out to roughly chapter 70 and has each and every scene outlined. It allows me to go a bit non-linear with the writing process, but occasionally it'll create problems when I go off the plan. Like saving Dru as Cordelia's pet, when I've already written some of the future house chapters. I'll probably tweak a scene or two to reintroduce her as I do the last of the revisions, then push forward.
Review By [Bushranger] • Date [5 Jun 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 39a" from Morgomir
Review:
Great chapter. Keep up the good work.
Review By [Morgomir] • Date [24 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 39a" from CageFire
Review:
Another good chapter. I'll be looking forward to reading more. :)
Review By [CageFire] • Date [17 Apr 14] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "Chapter 39a" from SamuraiSky
Review:
That was great! Smiling and laughing through the whole interaction. Thank you for yet a another wonderful chapter.
Review By [SamuraiSky] • Date [16 Apr 14] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Chapter 39a" from raxadian
Review:
Even the best laid plans... don't survive contact with the enemy.
Comments from author:
Truer words were never spoken.
Review By [raxadian] • Date [16 Apr 14] • Not Rated
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