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Review of chapter "Coming To A Head...So To Speak" from Gideon
Review:
Five more days? They are assuming that the Prometheus is still on schedule!
Review By [Gideon] • Date [12 Jan 13] • Rating [7 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Coming To A Head...So To Speak" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
I like the subtle unsubtlety of their knowing that the other is lusting, but not being able to confirm it and how the tension slowly builds. I think this is a really good chapter and I'm looking forward to seeing what you do next.

Blue
Comments from author:
Thank you; I owe you a lot.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [21 Oct 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "So, What Now?" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Interesting progression. Good set-up of the situation and difficulties. Good character interaction. Excellent work!
Comments from author:
Tank ewe berry mulch.
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [20 Aug 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "So, What Now?" from Gideon
Review:
Well that was handy! I'm sure Sam will be able to get some sense out of the terminals eventually but it would have been useful to have Daniel there with them would it? I guess they will have to make do.
And there was someone in the facility only 5000 years ago? I thought the Ancients had been gone longer than that?
Comments from author:
Essentially true...but Jack's not an Ancient either, is he. The program only said someone, not specifically an Ancient... ;-)

All will be clear eventually.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [19 Aug 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "STILL Not in Kansas" from ianquest
Review:
Interesting! Just read chapters 1-4 and quite enjoyed it so far.

Do be careful of your details, though; in chapter 1 there were several problems. For instance, you had Walter waiting to seal the iris until he received an order from Hammond; by this point in the series they had developed the trinium alloy iris, which they closed as soon as the gate started dialing in & it blocked everything, even including the forming event horizon.

Also, you described one of the Death Gliders 'threading the needle' of the gate; the wingspan of the gliders is quite a bit wider than the gate, which is why Apophis developed the prototype Chappa'nok'kek gate-fighter. Anything else would simply tear its wings off!

Still, it's a good start - I'm looking forward to reading more, including what else they manage to discover on the moon (at the very least a puddle-jumper, if not something longer-ranged, I'd hope...)! Keep up the good work!
Comments from author:
Huh...I thought I was.

So where do you get your information? I've seen the entire series, though it's been a while since I saw the earlier episodes. I've been using http://www.stargate-sg1-solutions.com/wiki/Stargate_SG-1, http://stargate.wikia.com/wiki/Stargate_Wiki and http://www.gateworld.net/wiki/Main_Page for fact checking, along with some careful extrapolation (such as the Jaffa martial arts style that Teal'c was teaching Daniel - Sebekkha- http://www.bullshido.net/forums/showthread.php?t=60024&;page=1)

As to the Death Glider...everyone has seen the images of fighters "threading the needle". I just didn't specify what KIND of Death Glider, which they referred to it as anyway, as I couldn't find the more specific name. Good point though; I'll make note for future usage.

In any case, thanks so much for reviewing!
Review By [ianquest] • Date [13 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "STILL Not in Kansas" from Hecatonchires
Review:
Unexpected...
Comments from author:
Indeed.
Review By [Hecatonchires] • Date [13 Jul 12] • Not Rated
Review of chapter "STILL Not in Kansas" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Nice, very nice. Good progression to the storyline. No typos or anything. Great job!
Comments from author:
Thanks. Your encouragement always means the world to me.
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [12 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "STILL Not in Kansas" from Gideon
Review:
Problems of all kinds! I think this makes it even more important that Carter cobble together some kind of communicator so they can contact the ship when it arrives. Otherwise it won't be looking for them in the right place!
Comments from author:
You don't want to make it EASY on them, do you?!

Shhh...shsh.

All will become clear.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [12 Jul 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "STILL Not in Kansas" from (Current Donor)vidicon
Review:
Dear me... Naughty Sam and Jack. Bad luck on the engine. At least traveling by ship they can more easily reach the moon. Once they realise that is where thy have to go. Hopefully there is sufficient food on the moon, vegeterian or animal.

Thanks for writing
Comments from author:
Well, see, you put a man and a woman alone somewhere, especially two with huge reserves of UST...and...yeah. Naughtiness ensues. We'll see. ~.^

All will be revealed.
Review By [(Current Donor)vidicon] • Date [12 Jul 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just a shot in the dark" from Cordyfan
Review:
Interesting story so far - haven't seen one quite like this. The last line was absolutely precious, too.

Keep up the good work.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much for the kind words; I look forward to pleasing you more in the future. ^_^
Review By [Cordyfan] • Date [25 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just a shot in the dark" from Gideon
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I can see Daniel and Teal'c being a bit upset that all their worrying was wasted when they find Sam and Jack alive and well :) Although if they don't call before they burst in they might find them doing a bit better than "well"
Comments from author:
^_^

Keep reading; the chapters might slow to one every week and a half to two as work is BIZZY, but I'll try to keep the words flowing. And honestly? I don't know myself quite where it's going due to my writing style, but there just might be some "well" later on....maybe. In any case, thank you very much for the review; this story is my foray back into writing after...uh...almost nine years.
Review By [Gideon] • Date [24 Jun 12] • Rating [8 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just a shot in the dark" from SaiyaSith
Review:
Nice. Good interplay. Good chapter flow. Nice pun at the end, LOL! I liked the way you went back and forth into their thoughts without letting it all bog down. Excellent job!
Comments from author:
Thanks so much, you're very kind!
Review By [SaiyaSith] • Date [22 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just a shot in the dark" from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
It's those last lines that get me every time! You, my man are a serious tease. I just want to know how tightly you're going to wind us up before 'something' happens? Ass-ended indeed. You *will* publish a new chapter tomorrow. (please) (Blue peers up at you looking pitiful like that cat from Shrek with the bi-ig beggin' eyes!!)

Blue
Comments from author:
I'll try; I've been averaging a chapter a week, but I was a bit ahead when I posted so we'll see...longer chapters will postpone posting.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [22 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "Just a shot in the dark" from eriktheviking
Review:
Great messing with Jack and Sam's libido's.
Comments from author:
Thank you very much!
Review By [eriktheviking] • Date [22 Jun 12] • Rating [9 out of 10]
Review of chapter "We're Not In Kansas Anymore..." from (Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy
Review:
“A Jaffa does not bluff.”

Silence.
_______

That is BLOODY priceless!

I can't wait to see what comes next. Elegantly done.
Review By [(Current Donor)DeepBlueJoy] • Date [19 Jun 12] • Rating [10 out of 10]
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